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Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1411329720000
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still doing the neck thingy? where are the shoulders it's like the same thing in every one of your drawings, the neck isnt supposed to be that thick and attach to the back of the head |
Kattiej « Citoyen » 1411330080000
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Sourisplum a dit : PLUM YOU'RE ALIVE!!!! anyways. It shows no signs of getting any wider though Sourisplum a dit : If it's the same in every one of his drawings, I think that's his style... even if it may be wrong. Some people do stuff differently, modern art for example |
Theandra « Citoyen » 1411330080000
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that whole thing was just bothering me |
Kattiej « Citoyen » 1411330680000
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Smalltoes a dit : Actually, did not sound rude at all. shardpixel a dit : If it were me, I'd add some fingers to the paws. It looks like the paws/hands are mittens. It also bothers me how far the inside of the ear looks. I feel like it should be closer to the base of the ear. I can't redline right now but I hope you get what I mean. The feet are fine imo. Maybe you could have the back of the front closest to the viewer on the ground instead of being like on it's tippy-toes but that's kinda optional I think. |
Shardpixel « Consul » 1411332240000
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Kattiej a dit : *her ;) --- Okay so I had some issues with Flash and then my pc had a blue screen crash when I tried uploading the fixed version. So while I'm waiting for my other pc to start up again, I'll drop off this one. Ignore the colorbleed and white dots. I tried fixing it using the advice from all three of you. I just wanna know if this is any better: Dernière modification le 1411332300000 |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1411332420000
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the neck looks a lot better. I would suggest making a bit of a bulge to show where the neck stops and the chest starts |
Shardpixel « Consul » 1411332960000
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Sourisplum a dit : Thank you~ Okay so I promise you all this is the last edit I'll post. Sorry, I just wanna get this right. I tried doing a bulge like you said, Plum. Hope it's okay :x E: Ehh... It might be a bit too subtle... Dernière modification le 1411333020000 |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1411333800000
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it's good, if it's too prominent it'll just look weird. however, the chest should start at the shoulders. sorry if i'm too picky ^^ |
Shardpixel « Consul » 1411334100000
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Sourisplum a dit : It's alright ^^ I don't wanna post a 4th version (Let alone go through the horror of starting up Flash and trying to avoid blue screens on my old PC), so I'll keep it in mind for the next time~ Thank you though, you really helped. |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1411334520000
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here, I just went and edited it a bit your problem is that you dont think about the inner structure of the mouse too much. that's fine, not a lot of people do. but it would be a lot more helpful if you did. for example, the chest (ribcage) is shaped like a short wide cylinder with the arms starting at the top of it, so the area around it should reflect that. hope this helps? |
Shardpixel « Consul » 1411345260000
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Sourisplum a dit : Ahh, I see. Thank you! |
Shastabby « Citoyen » 1411346340000
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I would very much love if someone could critique this please ^^ I have to use my phone and finger to draw until I get a new tablet so that's what I used here. I'm kind of looking for a critique on the shading and anatomy and anything really. Thanks again ♡ Also, if possible, a redline would help me most as I learn better by seeing things :x Agh sorry if you cant see it then opening it in a new tab works. Dernière modification le 1411346400000 |
Twillla « Citoyen » 1411382400000
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I would be so happy if someone would critique this cx I use smoothdraw to do my artwork along side with an Intuos 7 Drawing tablet! Alot of people have such great artworks >.< Please tell me some drawing programs y'all use, much appreciated! |
Supastarx « Citoyen » 1411386480000
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Twillla a dit : Why is the hair only on one side? If it's facing forwards then the hair should be on both sides. There is also only one ear, it is facing forward so it needs both ears. The scarf looks like it's pasted onto the mouse, and a scarf isn't just one line across the body. It usually has a loop that goes around the neck and then the two sides hang down (Unless its an infinity scarf). The left arm sort of looks like it has a shoulder and the right one doesn't? The arms are also twisted weirdly imo. Don't know if im explaining this ok but i hope it helped! |
Micefamilies « Citoyen » 1411389360000
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um i guess i'll take some critiques if you can redline would also be helpful uvu |
Mistalee « Citoyen » 1411400460000
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@Micefamilies yea the first thing i have to say is that im sorry for that i didn't make the hair as long it was in your art. Soo the mouse looks kinda weird to me mainly because of: -head is almost like a circle -no neck (if it's under the scarf that's okay, though the scarf should be closer to the neck if the neck doesen't start there) -hair just looks like some shape of grey and there's not any kind of texture to give it a 'feeling of hair' -scarf doesen't have any wrinkles -spine and tail are too short -also, she doesen't have any fingers? Lastly, i think you should work overall on anatomy, especially the legs' and head's anatomy |
Micefamilies « Citoyen » 1411401120000
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ahh thank you for critique im not very good with anatomy for mice, so i'll look at your example and other ones to get it more realistic and right again, thanks for everything you said!~ |
Mistalee « Citoyen » 1411402380000
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I'm glad i could help! And np |
Kattiej « Citoyen » 1411415940000
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Twillla a dit : I use gimp btw and doing a redline for you right now. Will edit this post. Cool message on the drawing Edit: somewhat of a redline You're missing an ear, if you want it as a side hair type thing, i suggest you fill in the gap in between it and the head. The arms are connected at the shoulders- beside the body, not in front. Dernière modification le 1411417020000 |