[Fanfic] The Special Artist

Hello I hope you enjoy my story!

[url=]Charcters[/url]
Kittywing
Vivihi
Cutemckitten
Xxxrubyxxx

[url=]Chapter One[/url]
Kittywing's POV

"C'mon Vivihi we're going to be late for school! If we start walking now we'll be only a minute late for school!"
"Okay, Okay hold on! I'm getting my IPod just in case Cute texts me." Vivihi said in annoyance.

Wait! I forgot to introduce myself! I'm Kitty: smart, awesome and nice! Oh, and did I forget awesome? Yeah well, I live in a house with my sister Vivihi. Our mom and dad are secret agents so they go out and fight evil alot. Anyways, today is Art Show Day. I'm very excited and I don't wanna be late beause they're going to announce who wins (mainly because I entered)! Now let's continue!

As Vivhi and I were walking we ended up having a conversation on who we thought was going to win.

"Hey Kitty, who do you thinks going to win? I think Ruby and Cute will, I mean their arts are AWESOME!"
'Uhm I think the answer is quite obvious, me!
"Really? Well okay then.. but what if you lose?"
"Trust me I won't. I mean who do you think I am?!?"
"A person who can't draw?"
"I CAN DRAW!!!"
"Okay okay sheesh!"

So the conversation didn't really go out well..... But whatever! Luckily we stayed quiet until we got to school. When we got in the school and went to the auditorium (we were suppose to go there) there were HUNDREDS of mice! I never knew we had a big school!

"Good morning students, I'm your principal Ms. Pea! We will be anouncing the winners for the Art competion! I'm glad that so many entered, because all your art looks so beautiful. Now it's tme to announe the 3 winners, but first I will be telling the prizes. For 3rd place they're will be a 30$ gift card for Mice Mall, A 30$ gift card for Mice Mall and a Paint brush set for 2nd place, and for 1st place A 30$ gift card for Mice Mall, a Paint brush set and they're art displayed at a Art Museum! Now it's time to announce the winners! Third place is..."

To be continued...
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Characters
Ruby...

Kitty...

Cute...

Vivihi...

Zack...

OMG Kittywing XD!

Thanks for including me by the way :)

Love it! c:

What a really cool story! *-*

Here are some mistakes I noticed..

Micefamilies a dit :
Hello I hope you enjoy my story!

"Okay, Okay hold on! I'm getting my ipod just in case Cute texts me." Vivihi said in annoyance.

IPod*

Micefamilies a dit :

I'm Kitty, smart, awesome and nice!

I'm Kitty: smart, awesome and nice!*
Maybe like that?

Micefamilies a dit :
(mainly because I entered cx)! Now let's continue!

"Hey Kitty, who do you thinks going to win? I think Ruby and will, I mean her arts are AWESOMEEE!"

I think that you shouldn't use little emotes like cx and stuff, may not look very proffesional. :p

And for the second sentence: ''I think Ruby and will,''
?? There were a few spaces and the Ruby and part was missing another name.

''I mean her arts are AWESOMEEE!"
Maybe shorten the AWESOMEEE to AWESOME! Will look much better :D
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STILL, AWESOME STORY!

Vivihi a dit :
Here are some mistakes I noticed..
IPod*
I'm Kitty: smart, awesome and nice!*
Maybe like that?

I think that you shouldn't use little emotes like cx and stuff, may not look very proffesional. :p

And for the second sentence: ''I think Ruby and will,''
?? There were a few spaces and the Ruby and part was missing another name.

''I mean her arts are AWESOMEEE!"
Maybe shorten the AWESOMEEE to AWESOME! Will look much better :D
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STILL, AWESOME STORY!

Thanks! I was rushing because I had to go soon. But I'll fix them!

edit:Thank you for the nice comments!

:p XD! Nice story! When are you writing the next chapter?

Vivihi a dit :
:p XD! Nice story! When are you writing the next chapter?

I might write the next chapter in a few minutes.

nice story :D

#10

[url=]Chapter 2[/url]
Kittywing's POV

"Now it's time to announce the winners! Third place is... Kittywing! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall! Please come up to get your prize."

As I was walking to the stage I was thinking in my head "THIRD PLACE ARE YOU KIDDING ME? I'm WAY better than that!" I mean seriously! I need to have a talk with Ms. Pea after she's done announcing the winners!

"Second place is... Cutemckitten! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall, and a Paint Brush set! Cmon up to get your prize. This is it! First place is.... XXXRUBYXXX CONGRATULATIONS! YOU WON A GIFTCARD FOR $30 AT MICE MALL, A PAINT BRUSH SET AND YOUR ART DISPLAYED AT AN ART MUSEUM! Come on up Ruby!!"

"Yay! I'm so excited I won first place!" Ruby said in a braggy way.

Well I'm not suprised that Ruby got first.. WAIT YEAH I AM! SHE DOESNT DESERVE TO BE FIRST PLACE! I mean- I can't believe that she would somehow be first place! I seriously need to talk to Ms. Pea . But before I could say anything, Vivihi ran up to me and said:

"I knew you wouldn't get first place! I guess your art IS bad!!"

Then she ran to class since everyone left. Now I can talk to Mrs. Pea alone..

"Uhm Ms. Pea? May I talk to you please?"
"Of course honey! What is it?"
"Well I wanted to talk to you about who got first, second and third..."
"And what about that? Everything seems fine."
"My complaint is that my art is WAY better than Ruby's and Cute! I mean how could I possiblly be last?"
"Listen, you got 3rd, thats pretty good! It may not be first or second but it's better then nothing. Now, run along I don't want you being late for your class."
"Okay."

That was a total bust. I just don't get it. :( I thought I was not just any artist, but a "Special Artist". Well, I guess I should start going to Math class.

#11

Micefamilies a dit :
[url=]Chapter 2[/url]
Kittywing's POV

"Now it's time to announce the winners! Third place is... Kittywing! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall! Please come up to get your prize."

As I was walking to the stage I was thinking in my head "THIRD PLACE ARE YOU KIDDING ME? I'm WAY better than that!" I mean seriously! I need to have a talk with Mrs. Wood after she's done announcing the winners!

"Second place is... Cutemckitten! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall, and a Paint Brush set! Cmon up to get your prize. This is it! First place is.... XXXRUBYXXX CONGRADULATIONS! YOU WON A GIFTCARD FOR $30 AT MICE MALL, A PAINT BRUSH SET AND YOUR ART DISPLAYED AT AN ART MUSEUM! Come on up Ruby!!"

"Yay! I'm so excited I won first place!" Ruby said in a braggy way.

Well I'm not suprised that Ruby got first.. WAIT YEAH I AM! SHE DOESNT DESERVE TO BE FIRST PLACE! I mean- I can't believe that she would somehow be first place! I seriously need to talk to Mrs. Wood . But before I could say anything, Vivihi ran up to me and said:

"I knew you wouldn't get first place! I guess your art IS bad!!"

Then she ran to class since everyone left. Now I can talk to Mrs. Wood alone..

"Uhm Mrs. Wood? May I talk to you please?"
"Of course honey! What is it?"
"Well I wanted to talk to you about who got first, second and third..."
"And what about that? Everything seems fine."
"My complaint is that my art is WAY better than Ruby's and Cute! I mean how could I possiblly be last?"
"Listen, you got 3rd, thats pretty good! It may not be first or second but it's better then nothing. Now, run along I don't want you being late for your class."
"Okay."

That was a total bust. I just don't get it. :( I thought I was not just any artist, but a "Special Artist". Well, I guess I should start going to Math class.

Oh my glob didnt read the whole thing yet but :)
AMG IM MEANNNN D:

#12

This story is turning out amazing.

#13

Micefamilies a dit :
[url=]Chapter 2[/url]
Kittywing's POV

"Now it's time to announce the winners! Third place is... Kittywing! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall! Please come up to get your prize."

As I was walking to the stage I was thinking in my head "THIRD PLACE? ARE YOU KIDDING ME? I'm WAY better than that!" I mean seriously! I need to have a talk with Mrs. Wood after she's done announcing the winners!

"Second place is... Cutemckitten! Congrats! You get a Giftcard for $30 at Mice Mall, and a Paint Brush set! Cmon up to get your prize. This is it! First place is.... XXXRUBYXXX CONGRATULATIONS! YOU WON: A GIFTCARD FOR $30 AT MICE MALL, A PAINT BRUSH SET AND YOUR ART DISPLAYED AT AN ART MUSEUM! Come on up, Ruby!!"

"Yay! I'm so excited I won first place!" Ruby said in a braggy way.

Well, I'm not suprised that Ruby got first.. WAIT YEAH I AM! SHE DOESNT DESERVE TO BE FIRST PLACE! I mean- I can't believe that she would somehow be first place! I seriously need to talk to Mrs. Wood . But before I could say anything, Vivihi ran up to me and said:

"I knew you wouldn't get first place! I guess your art IS bad!!"

Then she ran to class since everyone left. Now I can talk to Mrs. Wood alone...

"Uhm. Mrs. Wood? May I talk to you please?"
"Of course, honey! What is it?"
"Well, I wanted to talk to you about who got first, second and third..."
"And what about that? Everything seems fine."
"My complaint is that my art is WAY better than Ruby's and Cute! I mean how could I possibly be last?"
"Listen, you got 3rd, that's pretty good! It may not be first or second but it's better than nothing. Now, run along I don't want you being late for your class."
"Okay."

That was a total bust. I just don't get it. :( I thought I was not just any artist, but a "Special Artist". Well, I guess I should start going to Math class.

fixed up some of the grammar and spelling errors. x.x
i wasn't sure about some of it, so i didn't revise those parts.
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lovely story and plot. hoping to see more :J

#14

Thanks Flutter and Neko!

[url=]Chapter 3[/url]
Kittywing's POV

Math class is SO boring! I mean all the teacher does is give out pop quizzes and tell us boring stuff! Well the good news is that Cute is in the same math class as me. We are somewhat friends, even if she beat me in the Art Show. I wonder what she's thinking right now.

Cutemckitten's POV

Math class is so fun! I just love it! The only thing that bugs me is that the teacher ignores a student or freaks out when they raise they're hand like yestraday:

-some dude raises there hand-
-teacher is texting on their phone-
"UHM TEACHER!!!"
"OMG WHAT THE FLIP DO YOU WANT? CAN YOU NOT SEE I'M TEXTING MY BOYFRIEND?"
"I need to go to the bathroom really bad!"
"WAIT UNTIL CLASS IS OVER IM STILL TEXTING MY BOYFRIEND!"
"Ugh!"

As you can see the teacher is well, crazy! But I still like learning about math. The teacher is currently telling us about divison; Which is dumb! I mean we aren't 5 year olds! This is just.. wow. The good news is that math is almost over and next subject is Science!

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Science is over. It was actually fun! We watched a move called Monsters University. I've never heard of it before, but I already wanna see it again! Lunch time now! WHOO!
~End of chapter 3~

Note:I skipped science because I didnt want chapter 3 to be long. And I have no idea how long the story will be. Also, it might end up having a different title and everything changing and blablabla

#15

Micefamilies a dit :
Thanks Flutter and Neko!

[url=]Chapter 3[/url]
Kittywing's POV

Math class is SO boring! I mean all the teacher does is give out pop quiz's and tell us boring stuff! Well the good news is that Cute is in the same math class as me. We are somewhat friends, even if she beat me in the Art Show. I wonder what she's thinking right now.

Pop quizzes* :p

NICE CHAPTER :D
(More mistakes but lazy to point out..nvm ill do it -_-)

Micefamilies a dit :
Thanks Flutter and Neko!

[url=]Chapter 3[/url]
Kittywing's POV

Math class is SO boring! I mean all the teacher does is give out pop quiz's and tell us boring stuff!TWO SPACES FTW Well the good news is that Cute is in the same math class as me. We are somewhat friends, even if she beat me in the Art Show. I wonder what she's thinking right now.

Cutemckitten's POV

Math class is so fun! I just love it! The only thing that bugs me is that she ignores a student or freaks out when they rasie they're hand like yestraday:

-some dude rasies there hand-
-teacher is texting on their phone-
"UHM TEACHER!!!"
"OMG WHAT THE FLIP DO YOU WANT? CAN YOU NOT SEE I'M TEXTING MY BOYFRIEND?"
"I need to go to the bathroom really bad!"
"WAIT UNTIL CLASS IS OVER IM STILL TEXTING MY BOYFRIEND!"
"Ugh!"

As you can see the teacher is well, crazy! But I still like learning about math. The teacher is currently telling us about divison; Which is dumb! I mean we aren't 5 year olds! This is just.. wow. The good news is that math is almost over and next subject is Science!

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Science is over. It was actually fun! We watched a move called Monsters University. I've never herd of it before, but I already wanna see it again! Lunch time now! WHOO!

#16

rasie.. suppose to be raise
first paragraph of cute's POV

#17

I'm editing guys. o-o I just wanted to see how it looked.

edit: I took away the "Please tell me if you notice any mistakes in my chapters!" because it's really annoying now. o-o

#18

LOL Why didnt you say :D

#19

srysh
its not suppose to be annoying its suppose to make your awesome story awesomer

#20

Kattiej a dit :
srysh
its not suppose to be annoying its suppose to make your awesome story awesomer

Well it kinda is when you keep doing it before I can even edit.

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