Haruhitastic a dit :

Hi! Since you asked for critiques, I hope you don't mind me offering some. :>
First, the term fanfic is short for "fan fiction," basically a piece of fiction surrounding a different series. Unless this is a diary from a character from a show, then this isn't considered a "fanfic." Just thought I'd point that out!

There's not much to offer a critique on, but since this is a story, you need a beginning, a middle, and an end. You need a climax as well to make the story fit. What happens in Amber's life? Is it just a day to day talk about her experiences? Will something happen? Maybe her mother and father get a divorce, or perhaps her brother gets sick?
Will this be simply a diary? Will you have other mentions of her life outside of it, as in story telling, or only the diary?