Art Critique Center

RE: Superstarx's sketch

Pay attention to the size of different body parts. Follow the new lines and see if you can get a better sketch. c:

http://s29.postimg.org/7ni372hid/supastarxedit.png

#3802

Tadame a dit :
Pay attention to the size of different body parts.

But your corrections make one ear smaller than the other...? That's a bit contradictory.

#3803

Pyrubble, it really depends on one's drawing style. I tend to draw one mouse ear smaller than the other cos objects that are further away are visually smaller.

http://www.sciencephoto.com/image/385863/350wm/Z9180462-Mouse_Anatomy-SPL.jpg

#3804

Tadame a dit :
Pyrubble, it really depends on one's drawing style. I tend to draw one mouse ear smaller than the other cos objects that are further away are visually smaller.

There isn't much difference.

The image from the first post in this thread doesn't show anymore. :(

#3805

e: please ignore, ive improved my mouse

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#3806

Cute! sorry if im too harsh or nitpicky~

1.Add a neck! -Or if you alredy did, maybe you can try to make the head a bit more circuluar. Right now it looks like a big blob not seperating anything.

2: uneven eyes-I feel the eyes are a bit uneven, such as one being smaller then the other.

3:Ears-I think this is just me speaking but the slanted line that seperates the fur from the ears annoys me. i think instead of lines, maybe you can add little furs like you did alongside the face and ears? Also, maybe you should add some kind of brown on the top of the ears, instead of only the flaps. (like so)

http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-38XStVHWy2o/T__L4HX0GqI/AAAAAAAAABI/Pohef0pLRv4/s1600/MouseSprite.pngp

otherwise it's a very nice piece! I love how you did the hair and nose! (sorry if this was nitpicky DX)

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#3807

Tadame a dit :
Pyrubble, it really depends on one's drawing style.

If that's the case, do try to keep your own personal preferences out of your critique or at least specify that the correction is based on your own style.

And besides, if we're using the logic of "farther away makes it smaller" logic, there really shouldn't be any size difference whatsoever because the ear is only ever an inch from the other. The image you used to defend your point is useless, as the only "size difference" between the ears is due to the "smaller" ear being at a different angle. Mice's ears aren't round from every side.

#3808

birdluv a dit :
Cute! sorry if im too harsh or nitpicky~

1.Add a neck! -Or if you alredy did, maybe you can try to make the head a bit more circuluar. Right now it looks like a big blob not seperating anything.

2: uneven eyes-I feel the eyes are a bit uneven, such as one being smaller then the other.

3:Ears-I think this is just me speaking but the slanted line that seperates the fur from the ears annoys me. i think instead of lines, maybe you can add little furs like you did alongside the face and ears? Also, maybe you should add some kind of brown on the top of the ears, instead of only the flaps. (like so)

otherwise it's a very nice piece! I love how you did the hair and nose! (sorry if this was nitpicky DX)

[#reply to my art critique]MY goal on the neck was to try to "copy" this.

http://howtogetridofallthings.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/06/how-to-rid-of-mice.jpg

The fur would be making the neck look fatter, right?[/#reply to my art critique]
[#click]

I fixed up the mouse a little bit with the red.[/#click]

#3809

http://media.merchantcircle.com/22939931/Mouse%20standing_medium.jpeg

Mice still have a very obvious differentiation from neck and head though.

#3810

Sorry that this is not Tfm related, I don't really draw mice. u-u
Just a sketch I drew actually a while ago that I would like critiqued before I do anything else. c:

#3811

Fierying a dit :
Sirusthemice a dit :

i mostly need help with the feet cuz they just. look terrible ( also please ignore the colourbleeds and messy shading this is just a doodle ahaha )

I don't mean to sound rude but the problem with it is that the action she is doing is not really possible.
And even it is possible, her action should make her feel uncomfortable.

Sometimes doing the gestures of what you want your character to do can be helpful. It gives you the thinking of what's the maximum flexibility of our body and make us understand if the posture makes us at ease or in pain.

Lifting her right leg like that would soon make her leg feel tired, putting its hell on her left toe makes it much relax.
However to turn your feet in that much of an angle will give discomfort.
Also if i was to relax my right hell onto my left toes, i would not be able to rest my right elbow anywhere.
Even from your picture itself, you can se her elbow is not on her kneecap. I mean furthermore is not possible anyways.

So the only thing you need to change is your posture of her legs or even the whole figure. best to start with different sketches and choose the one you like the most. Try doing the actions so you understand your character's feeling ouo/

other than that, for my personal preferance, maybe draw an armchair and wrap her tail around it

just want to say love the outfit design btw :3

ahh thank you uvu sometimes characters end up being overly-flexible hahaha I jsut. need more practice on this I guess.

and thanks I really like her design myself uvu

#3812

shastabby a dit :
Sorry that this is not Tfm related, I don't really draw mice. u-u
Just a sketch I drew actually a while ago that I would like critiqued before I do anything else. c:

your anatomy is already pretty good, you'll just need a bit more practise on the chest and legs.
things i would correct (ear's position isn't the same, sorry about that):

and could i get critique on this one? harsh is okay

#3813

@Chawee
One thing I see that you could improve on is the shape of the mouse's head and ears; It's shaped a lot like a canine's head. I would suggest looking at pictures of mice or studying their anatomy to help.

#3814

^ Though Ruby just said exacility what i would've, you could've reduced the amount of fur in the neck, because real mice dont really have that much fur on their necks.

critique on this would be nice. and the anatomy is supposed to be something similar to a caracal (don't mind the colors/hair, bc i don't own this character)

#3815

oh gosh i can't perspective at all
I wanna draw the mouse at an angle from the bottom looking up..
help?
just the perspective help please..

#3816

In terms of anatomy, how's this? I'm going for realistic but slightly stylized.

#3817

Chawee a dit :
shastabby a dit :
Sorry that this is not Tfm related, I don't really draw mice. u-u
Just a sketch I drew actually a while ago that I would like critiqued before I do anything else. c:

your anatomy is already pretty good, you'll just need a bit more practise on the chest and legs.
things i would correct (ear's position isn't the same, sorry about that):

and could i get critique on this one? harsh is okay

Ah, thank you. That being an old sketch I was just making sure I had been trying to improve in the right ways. In later versions, the legs were correctly proportioned and the chest was repositioned and detailed. I also removed the fluff in the ears as it really didn't look correct. Anyway, thank you for the critique! c:

#3818

RE: Mistalee's caracal??

Comments are based on the anatomy of caracals.
1. Ears are a little too far apart whereas eyes are slightly too close together. You don't see the outside of the ears folded to the front. Also, caracals are characterized by the presence of a long tuft on the tip of their ears.
2. The tail should be shorter than what was drawn.
3. Leg pose is unnatural. Back legs resemble those of dogs.
4. The skull should be rounded.

http://s11.postimg.org/t7qbp77dd/caracaledit.png

#3819

Thanks for the critique , but i must say, that in the pic you drew, you kinda changed the whole position, because it wasnt supposed to be a side view (and you changed the heads position too) and i should say something about the legs lenghts too, but i dont really mind that, since you were all right in the text.

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#3820

Can someone criteque my “”wolf””? I do take note that the ears are small and the eyes are big though. It’s my first drawing on “MyPaint”, and it was pretty difficult moving around the screen without somehow losing my drawing in a mass of white

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