;-; the grammar failing has came

~chapter 2~

It had been an hour and i was still playing survivor. A cannon hit me and bounced back. The shaman noticed. "HEY I HIT YOU! ITS IMPOSSIBLE TO...To..." the shaman ran away, but i manadged to see part of her name "anna...something? Oh well.." I said."sorry about that, its just a normal mouse would have fallen off by the cannon ball,but you have red eyes and they say mice with red eyes are blessed with a power along with a sister or brother." me and Aly spun around and we saw a mouse. I read the mouses name in my head. "poppy, <<agile mouse>>"

We all went to my and Aly's house, we are sisters.When we got to our house Aly disapeared "Aly your power" I said "oops,sometimes i forget i have a power" she said. We talked for a little, " Oh my Tigrounette! Your the one and only leader of the Singing flowers?!" asked Aly, Singing flowers was a girl group who had sang alot of songs and Aly was a big fan of them. "yes,yes i am." replied Poppy."infact im accturly working on a song. But the song is a secret for now" next thing you know Aly was going crazy "hang on im going to calm her down" i said. Then i went to pull Alys tail "OW! WHAT WAS THAT FOR!?" asked Aly. "you went crazy" i replied "oh,right" she said.

"Poppy? Poppy where are you?!" I recognised that voice, it was Anna. "i need to go,bye!" said Poppy. "bye poppy!" both of us said, but Aly whacked me with her arm because she was waving really fast "ow! be careful with that arm!" I said "sorry" said Aly

We played some video games for some time then the power went out. there was a cat attack "QUICK TO THE BASEMENT!" I shouted. Aly pulled me there since she was faster. We hid in the basement. We were scared, this cat attack wasnt normal, there wasnt just one cat, there was two cats! "mew MEOW! MEW! meow" "MROW! MEOW!" then we heard some cannons, "wait, we can hear LOUD cannons! what if the cats got into our house?!" said Aly "oh no..just when cat attacks wernt a big thing..oh wait we forgot to lock the door." I said. It got dark so we went to sleep in the basement.

The next morning we got out of the basement, first thing we saw, our house, all ruined. cables broken, smashed glass, cannons, and in the midde of the room there stood, the shaman goddess! "im afraid i dont have enough power to fix this mess.. but i can fix one thing of your choice and clean up all this" we look around, "we can fix all this, but we cant fix the electronics.." said Aly. "i have our old laptop!" i said "yeah but we barely can do anything on it oh and shaman goddess can you fix the electronics?" said Aly. "certaintly" said the shaman goddess. the shaman goddess got all the electronics and wires then started fixing them. I got all the cleaning stuff and gave some to Aly. "come on lets help by cleaning up"i said. then we started cleaning up the mess.

I enjoy these stories '-'

and are the kittens evil er something? reads first chapter

yeah they are evil.

~chapter 3~

we finnish cleaning up everything. "ah there we go so now-" said Aly.
"huh..i just saw something black...go quickly.." i said,but then everything went black..
"ALY! JESSIE!Wake up..please.....no..." it was the shaman goddess..but everything was dark now..cannons flied at me but they just bounced back..i was getting ambushed by cannons. I couldent keep this up.suddenly i saw a blue and white mouse. "blue, <<the cheese preist>>" i read.blue got rid of the cannons and helped me "ill be at the shop" everything got louder.
"HUFF PUFF HUFF PUFF" i suddenly wake up.
"jessie your awake! its been an hour" said the shaman goddess
" i see Aly is still asleep" i say. I get upand go outside "im going to do some stuff i usaly do." i say and close the door. I run to the shop and look around. i see blue and she sees me. I run to her.
"hey your from my dream!" she says.
"you too" i say. A canon flies at us. I obviosly knock it back.
"wow you have red eyes.." says blue. we end up talking for some time in vanilla.

i go back home after an hour. i find that the shaman goddess has left and Aly is playing video games. "hi!" says Aly. "hi!" i say. "im going to make some lunch" i say. After lunch we played some more video games.It got dark so we went to sleep.

~*special offer*~ next person to comment gets to decide the next problem

Wingcestor a dit :

yeah they are evil.

~chapter 3~

we finnish cleaning up everything. "ah there we go so now-" said Aly. "huh..i just saw something black...go quickly.." i said,but then everything went black.."ALY! JESSIE!Wake up..please.....no..." it was the shaman goddess..but everything was dark now..cannons flied at me but they just bounced back..i was getting ambushed by cannons. I couldent keep this up.suddenly i saw a blue and white mouse. "blue, &lt;&lt;the cheese preist&gt;&gt;" i read.blue got rid of the cannons and helped me "ill be at the shop" everything got louder. "HUFF PUFF HUFF PUFF" i suddenly wake up. "jessie your awake! its been an hour" said the shaman goddess " i see Aly is still asleep" i say. I get upand go outside "im going to do some stuff i usaly do." i say and close the door. I run to the shop and look around. i see blue and she sees me. I run to her."hey your from my dream!" she says. "you too" i say. A canon flies at us. I obviosly knock it back. "wow you have red eyes.." says blue. we end up talking for some time in vanilla.

i go back home after an hour. i find that the shaman goddess has left and Aly is playing video games. "hi!" says Aly. "hi!" i say. "im going to make some lunch" i say. After lunch we played some more video games.It got dark so we went to sleep.

~*special offer*~ next person to comment gets to decide the next problem

omg
I'd love to hear more..

and i'm not good at writing so give it to someone else

if its too hard to write then how r u writing?

you need to break a line when someone speaks omfgggg
example:

"hi wing." she waved

"oh hi how are you?" he replied back


ITS THE BASICS
if your going to write can you please use the proper way of doing it

this isnt the thread to be saying this but
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without spaces

@lily

the first game is illegal '-'

wait so...elaf u choose the next problem!

AMG AMG AMG I FEEL LIKE I NEEED TO BUMP THIS THREAD!!!!!!!!!!1!!!!!

so yeah......................NEXT PERSON TO POST GETS TO PICK THE PROBLEM FOR THE CHAPTER

awesome story

omg i didn't read comment up there :o


Bumps=

marli edit in ur idea for the problem otherwise ur holding up the story..........yeah........

Wingcestor a dit :

marli edit in ur idea for the problem otherwise ur holding up the story..........yeah........

you can't rely on the readers to come up with stuff just so you can continue....if they don't come up with an idea and you still can't it's not their fault the story isn't continuing. Sorry if this sounds rude

Flutterbest a dit :

you can't rely on the readers to come up with stuff just so you can continue....if they don't come up with an idea and you still can't it's not their fault the story isn't continuing. Sorry if this sounds rude

very true and wingcestor good story so far and I'm glad to be a part of it. I have an idea for the next problem xD
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~Next Problem Idea~
How about there's another large cat attack and it brings all the characters mentioned (poppy, jessie, anna, ally, and blue) together along with others i didn't mention (not sure if i named all the characters) and they like errrr... run off somewhere and think of a plan to take down the evil cats? O_O

i have already done a cats problem and do you accturly expects them to get attacked RIGHT after a cat attack?! the cats need to recover too! and the cats will NEVER be defeated!!

Wingcestor a dit :

i have already done a cats problem and do you accturly expects them to get attacked RIGHT after a cat attack?! the cats need to recover too! and the cats will NEVER be defeated!!

it was just a suggestion... no need for that kind of reply ._. and you don't have to do it again it was just a suggestion

Good story! Your inspiring me to make a transformice fanfic :p

Can I be in this story? My title is <Solo Artist>
Oh and you can call me by my username :3

Bethdacat a dit :

Can I be in this story? My title is &lt;Solo Artist&gt;
Oh and you can call me by my username :3

the fact u didnt use the form thats somewhere in page 1

nope...