"Jessieeee......" I hear a voice calling my name.
"Jessieeee...come on..." I recognise the voice. Its Aly! I run to the voice
"Im comming Aly!" i shout. I run and run.. Endlessly in the dark...nothing is there..but then...
"AAH!!" i shout. A cannon flys at me. i close my eyes..the cannon flys back..somehow...

~~end of the proluge thing~~


This is the story of a mouse called Jessie and her friend Aly. Both of them have mysterious powers. Jessie has her own fashion.like how she dosent wear the AJ hat but has the hair..Jessies power is that she cant be effected by cannons and Alys power is that she can become invisable.

charactors so far (will be updated): Micefamillies as Aly, Wingcestor as Jessie Beutyiscool as Annalease (anna for short) Kattiej as Poppy Bengalstar as Blue

good proluge cant wait to here more :)

SO MUCH FANFICTION.

Satash a dit :

SO MUCH FANFICTION.

IKR
they need to make a subforum just for fan fic lol

Agreed! o-o And nice story so far

pi-ka!

how about some people join? if the charrie is gunna be part of jessie and aly's family they need a power. and all of the charries need an eye colour. jessies eyes r red and alys eyes are dark brown.

I wanna join

charrie name:
eye colour:
any sisters/brothers:
whitch chapter do u appear in:

there now u can join :3

wowsers a lot of fanfics popped up >.> lol anyways the story seems interesting :3 can't wait for more

Kattiej a dit :

IKR
they need to make a subforum just for fan fic lol

someone make this a suggestion

Oh ok i will cuz i suggested on here anyways so y not
here ya go
Topic-384999

Kattiej a dit :

Oh ok i will cuz i suggested on here anyways so y not
here ya go
Topic-384999

XD theres accturly a suggstion!i might write chapter 1 tomorrow (the proluge was just a dream! well a dream that gave jessie powers..somehow)

yea i made it for ya

so is anyone gunna fill out the charrie forum and be in da story?

sure :3

Charrie name: Annalease (anna for short)
Eye color: reddish brown
Any sisters/brothers: nopes
which chapter you appear in: next one..? o-o

ohh awww didnt know there was a form
charrie name: Poppy (flower name)
eye color: teal
Siblings: Yea an older sister
Chapter: which ever one you can squeeze me in

done and done

ima do chapter uno (spanish mutch?)
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~chapter 1~
I wake up quickly and look at the alarm clock "one A.M..." i say.
"better turn off the alarm clock before 6..am..." i use my tail to switch off the alarm clock. Then i look outside. "another cat attack..this is getting old" it had been the third cat attack of the month. "why havent the mouse soldiers got better yet?" most of the mouse soldiers are pretty old yet they are still weak.

I put on my sunglasses scarf and hairband and go outside only to fall over because of Aly, my friend. "HEY!" i yell at her, accturly i didnt yell at her, i yelled at nothing, i thought..."wait wha-" is say, but i get get interrupted by Aly. "oops
sorry about that im not used to my powers yet" She says "powers?...what powers?" I ask as Aly appears. "i dont know...but i only have one power, invisibility!" says Aly "ah whatever im going to survivor" i say as i push Aly off "bye!" shouts Aly "bye!" i shout back. Then i go to a hot cannon baloon and fly away to survivor.

i arrive at survivor. i fly about as a ghost until the round ends. its normal,besides we cant even mess about with the mice. the round starts. the shaman fires a cannon and i dodge. the process carrys on for a minute and when there is thirty more seconds i dont manage to dodge. i cover my eyes. i dont feel myself falling off and becoming a ghost. I uncover my eyes. the cannon that hit me..didnt hit me..instead it just bounced back..no one since to notice so i run off the edge and become a ghost to make it fair.
~~end of chapter~~

Little things: hackers dont exist, i mean how would someone hack irl? see? its impossible to hack in this tfm world!, the hot connon balloon is a hot air balloon with a cannon not a balloon,Aly already has her powers.

<3 good story

love the story so far

Can you just make the first letter of the talking on caps next time like:
"come" into "Come"