Author note: My other fanfic did not work out, I hope for this one to be better.

Character(s):

Adelaide Thomas:

A rough around the edges girl, not girly in ANY way. She's tribeless, not interested in joining one. Not very social at all. She's not awkward, but she dosen't care about having friends. She's a ratapult champion, known by all.
Her picture:


Terrence:


More character images to come! Now, on with the fanfic!


Hey, my names Adelaide. I'm the kind of girl who you wouldn't notice unless she's kicking your ass. I'm the ratapult queen, and I rule with an iron fist. This is my story.


Chapter 1:

My hair swings as I pull it back in a ponytail. The air is abnormally chilly for October, and my breath comes out in small puffs of white. I glance up at the list of times and opponents. I frown at a new name on the list; Terrence. I hear impending footsteps and glance up. Standing in front of me is a guy who looks about 5' 8" with a strong jaw and figure.

I stare at him for a minute before shaking my head and muster out
"So you're Terrence?"
He looks me up and down and cooly replies
"You're the famous..."
He squints at the board;
"Adelaide?"
I roll my eyes, many people don't understand my name.
"Yep genius, thats me. But whatever, lets get started playing."
He grins,
"I must warn you, I'm pretty good."

I smirk and say,
"I always love a good challenge."

I jog out to my platform and wait for the timer to countdown.
The echo of the beep bounces off the trees, and the wind whistles through my hair.
I grab the anvil and heave it at Terrence, it hits him squarley in the stomach and he stumbles back.
He winces.
"Lucky shot girl."
I laugh a little and the game begins.

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3 hours later I'm dripping from head to toe in sweat, just a little less than Terrence. We're both bruised and bloody but after all that time tied up I pulled ahead and knocked him into the water. He smiles at me warily,
"Good game Adelaide !"

I smile and say
"You too Ter, I'll see you tomorrow."

He winks and I blush.
"I'll look foreward to it."

so she's a mary sue

also where's the story

Haruhitastic a dit :

so she's a mary sue

also where's the story

agreed

but i like how it's written like it's p creative launguage used but otherwise i agree

I suppose you're both correct, but she is FAR from perfect, just wait and see.

Good storeh. c:
you should check your spelling. I saw a word wrong.
(( she's falling in love isn't she ))

very cool yesyes.

why is the mouse 5'8".....

Haruhitastic a dit :

why is the mouse 5'8".....

in another story a mouse is 6ft

i guess tfm mice are really tall ???

Susanlwu a dit :

in another story a mouse is 6ft

i guess tfm mice are really tall ???

Yes. Yes they are.

Noobforevah a dit :

Yes. Yes they are.

seems more like anthro mice to me.

I've sat for like 3 hours writing out this story and I can't figure out the ending. Would a sentinel please lock this? Thanks ;;

OK you don't have to write the ending today. Most stories don't have only one chapter so you still have a lot before the ending.

Livcorish a dit :

I've sat for like 3 hours writing out this story and I can't figure out the ending. Would a sentinel please lock this? Thanks ;;

Why would you want to lock it? It's literally the beggining of the story.. unless.. you already... well... wrote the ENTIRE thing.

Livcorish a dit :

I've sat for like 3 hours writing out this story and I can't figure out the ending. Would a sentinel please lock this? Thanks ;;

You can just make it a cliff hanger so you don't really have to end the chapter or something?

Trust me, my fanfic has 8 chapters right now, i came up with the ending at like ch 5.