Did you hear about Beatrix Potter?Peter Rabbit & Benjamin Bunny?Tom kitten?This story's style is similar,with traditional mouse-holes,and what ever!

Here are the characters of my story:



Berry Huckle is the youngest mouse of the Huckles.She loves to make beautiful flower-necklases to her friends.



Fruit loves his stomach and he is a afraid from Mr.Whisker or Mrs.Redfox.He always go after his stomach,so he often get in trouble....



Plum is a very brave and energic mouse with his brown-white fur and dark-blue hat.He loves to go on adventures.

The secret Garden
part one
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-What a wonderful day!-cried Berry,when she went on a small,flowery hill to see her brothers.She had a little backet in her white paws,to collect mushrooms or wonderful field-fowers.She imagined,that she is a princess,and every mice are here dependants.
-Come on,Fruit!Don't eat all of the mushrooms I'll collected,because than we will not have lunch and Mama will be very angry!-wishpered Berry to his brother.Than they saw Plum in the field.He singed loudly,and laughed at himself.
-Would you please come and help us?-asked Berry angrily.
-Yeah,but why do we collect theese old and bad taste mushrooms,when we can go to the garden I saw last week.there are carrots,apples,strawberries and delicious cheese.Hmmm!-Plum feeled the cheese in his mouth.
-Oh,cheese?Strawberries?-Fruit was very excited.Berry didn't look very happy.
-Ok,than go,and feed yourselves with Mr.Whisker,the ugly,old,red cat.I'll stay here,and I will tell to mama that you went to this garden!
-Ssshhh....Keep calm...-wishpered Plum.The Huckle mice were very ungry,and they loved cheese ery much.But is this a good idea to go to a dangeorous garden,when there are cats and others?
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I will continue this story.What do you think about it?

I think you need quotation marks

Kattiej a dit :

I think you need quotation marks

I will try to do not make grammar-mistakes,I study english very hard!And what do you think about the story? C:

Uhm, i think you posted this in the wrong thread :0

Sukkura a dit :

Uhm, i think you posted this in the wrong thread :0

Fanfictions (AKA writing) are considered a type of "art."

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I like the story so far c: