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Okay, so this is Frozen related, someone running away for powers as a reason, etc... But this story is about a mouse that hides her powers away from Transformice, and sets off a set of ice monsters that can eat heat and color from mice. Only 10 mice can save the world from the disasterous queen.

Okay so here's the bad guy:



Name: Annalisa [Awn • Awl • Izz • Ah]

Annalisa will not give her monster creating up in this story. She is the ice queen, and she is dangerous. She is pretty but mean and will drain energy from any hero that faces her. She is a distant cousin of Elsa, the queen from Frozen.

Age: 20
Personallity: One word. MEAN.
Likes: Ice
Dislikes: Everything except ice
Bio: When she was 1, her parents beat her up so badly she had to leave the mouse hole and live 19 long years practicing ice powers, recently, she created monsters to drain heat and color from mice.
Mouse's Birthdate: December 21

Ok now for the good guys [1/10]



Name: Nomaku [Noh • Maw • Kew]

Nomaku had wealthy parents until she was old enough to leave. She discovered a message in her pocket in this story. *cough* spoiler *cough* 9 other mice friends help her defeat Annalisa. She is the chosen hero of Transformice.

Age: 14
Personallity: Crazy and Kind-Hearted and Shy
Likes: Everything Nice
Dislikes: Annalisa, everything mean
Bio: She met Annalisa when she was only 6. Annalisa beat her up like Annalisa's parents when she was 1. Now she reconizes her as "One of the hugest enemies."
Mouse's Birthdate: August 3



Name: Meifee [May - Fee] (Mei for short)
Age: 22
Personallity: Very friendly and helpful, but has short temper. Mei can help her friends, even if it costs her life.
Likes: True friends, teamwork and adventures
Dislikes: Being an outcast, idiots
Bio: Since she was born, she was an outcast in her family. Everyone made her an outcast, except her older brother. He and Mei thought that the parents were affected by the invasion of ice monsters. Meifee met Annalisa when she was 9. Annalisa wanted to fight Mei, but she (I meant Meifee ofc) was brave and strong enough to beat Annalisa up.... But she had beaten up Mei. So Mei waits for a rematch and she's stronger than ever.
Mouse's Birthdate: October 12
Now you can be a part of Nomaku's team! I only accept 9 more mice!

Form:

Referance (delete this and replace it with an image of your mouse)
Name:

Part in story explained as a paragraph, and his/her thing in the story (do the same as Referance, but leave a paragraph here)

Age:
Personallity:
Likes:
Dislikes:
Bio:
Mouse's Birthdate:

(NOTE: Your mouse's birthdate does not have to be your real or your account's birthdate.)

On to the prolouge!

Prolouge a dit :

A white flash of snowy fur passed a brown colored mouse. "What was that?!" he thought. His name however, was *Souris_1337. He couldn't talk but only think in his world of thoughts. Another mouse passed him and shouted

"SOURIS! RUN! THERE'S A MONSTER ON THE LOOSE! IT WILL MAKE YOU A FROZEN ZOMBIE MOUSE!" Souris jumped onto his feet about the terrible saying. He turned around on his back to see a stampede of frozen zombie mice, and one of Annalisa's ice monsters. He got very terrified and started to run, but one of the horrid zombie mice grabbed Souris's tails, swinging him towards the ice monster. The ice monster started to chuckle at him and say

"You are a noob, aren't you? Well now you'll be joining us!" Souris panicked and started to run away, trying to push past the zombie mice, but they were unmovable.

"I don't want to die!" he thought. The ice monster then opened his mouth and started to suck his heat and color in. The panicky mouse screamed in horror as he turned into a part of the frozen zombie mice army.

"Excellent, my monster," a figure bloomed, "excellent job." She smirked and revealed to as Annalisa.

End of Prolouge

Boring story isn't it? Well here's the pages where the chapters are at.

Prolouge-Page 1 (OF COURSE)

I'll be seeing you-
Wait!
Before I go, I want to note I need a banner and a helper. Thanks!

Now!
I'll be seeing you in the worlds! -Bethdacat

I'm not trying to be mean but maybe consider making up your own idea instead of robbing ideas from movies..

Also it's hard to read your prologue. New characters speaking need to be on a different line.

Haruhitastic a dit :

I'm not trying to be mean but maybe consider making up your own idea instead of robbing ideas from movies..

Also it's hard to read your prologue. New characters speaking need to be on a different line.

Please no critisms, Haru oAo But I will listen and do so ^-^"

Alright, ignore my first line then. The second isn't a crit, it's basic writing knowledge and if you want people to follow your story it's the least you could do. It's very difficult to read.

Haruhitastic a dit :

Alright, ignore my first line then. The second isn't a crit, it's basic writing knowledge and if you want people to follow your story it's the least you could do. It's very difficult to read.

But Haru it's not robbing oAo even though it sounds like it

Name: Meifee [May - Fee] (Mei for short)
Age: 22
Personallity: Very friendly and helpful, but has short temper. Mei can help her friends, even if it costs her life.
Likes: True friends, teamwork and adventures
Dislikes: Being an outcast, idiots
Bio: Since she was born, she was an outcast in her family. Everyone made her an outcast, except her older brother. He and Mei thought that the parents were affected by the invasion of ice monsters. Meifee met Annalisa when she was 9. Annalisa wanted to fight Mei, but she (I meant Meifee ofc) was brave and strong enough to beat Annalisa up.... But she had beaten up Mei. So Mei waits for a rematch and she's stronger than ever.
Mouse's Birthdate: October 12

How come no one reads these stories?!

Anyway, Mei has been added!

Ooooh, can't wait for a sudden overload of characters and the first chapter :)
But no one is interested, that's the sucky thing. :/