[Fanfiction] The Spy

Hi! So this is my first fanfiction about TFM ever.

What the story is about:
Two sides, Red and Blue, are preparing for a war between the two. Red declared the war on Blue, when the leader realized that Blue had sent spies to them for years. In this story, both of the sides prepare for the war, which takes place in Domination (A module game, like capture the flag, with cannons.). A girl named Violet is on the Blue side. She was sent as a spy to the Reds, but she never actually thought she would enjoy it there. . .

Prolouge a dit :
Feet were scurrying around on the cobblestone pathway to the Red team's house. Laughing and yells could be heard from inside the house. A tiny mouse was shoved onto the steps, being knocked into the door. The laughing ceased from the inside, and footsteps were coming towards the door. "Hurry, they're coming!" A voice hissed. The mice fled from the scene, leaving the small mouse on the steps. The door was swung open, a clump of mice surrounding the doorway. "Who are you?" A voice boomed from the cluster of mice. A shaman, much bigger than the rest of the mice walked with his head held high towards the new comer. The tiny mouse looked up at him with round, scarlet colored eyes. "My name's Violet!" She squeaked.

Character slots are open!

Character slots:
Red's: 0/5
Blue's: 0/5

Character form:
Name:
Personality/traits:
Bio:
Gender:
Side (Red or Blue or both [Make sure to include which side your character is spying on.]):
Ref:

CHARACTERS

Name: Violet
Personality/traits: Funny, optimistic, sensitive, kind, curious
Bio: Violet's father was born into the Red team, while her mother was born into the Blue team. Her parents married secretly, and gave birth to Violet. They argued about which side Violet should be in, that eventually led to their divorce. Violet was taken into her mother's team when her father got killed by a Blue member. Her mother eventually died in a fight between a Red member. Violet was young at that time, so the Blue's decided that she would become a spy, since young mice begging to join a team meant they were new.
Side: Both (Spying for the Blues)
Ref:
[img]http://i.imgur.com/NllFFD8.png [/img]
Name:Alerold [Owned by Snowysun]
Personality/traits:Serious,angered very easily,kind,also when angered she sort of forgets any friendship and will hurt anyone. Asides from being very serious,she can be very nice to someone,
Bio:Alerold was born into the blue team,though her parents were killed some days after her birth. Ever since she will hurt any Blues she find,that anger her. She wanted to become a spy since of her anger for Blues.
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Red,spying on the Blues.
Ref:
[img]http://i.imgur.com/rT8kx9q.png [/img]
Name:Valerie [Owned by Queenlordess]
Personality/traits:Very shy,sensitive,brave,a bit confusing to talk with,is easily angered
Bio:She was bffs with violet,and also a SPY
Gender:Female
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Blue and she is spying on the red side "^_^
Ref:
[img]http://i.imgur.com/Ycduajm.png [/img]

Name:Alerold
Personality/traits:Serious,angered very easily,kind,also when angered she sort of forgets any friendship and will hurt anyone. Asides from being very serious,she can be very nice to someone,
Bio:Alerold was born into the blue team,though her parents were killed some days after her birth. Ever since she will hurt any Blues she find,that anger her. She wanted to become a spy since of her anger for Blues.
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Red,spying on the Blues.
Ref:

Im just going to suggest one little thing..YOUR GENDER.
Everything else is good.

Snowysun a dit :
Name:Alerold
Personality/traits:Serious,angered very easily,kind,also when angered she sort of forgets any friendship and will hurt anyone. Asides from being very serious,she can be very nice to someone,
Bio:Alerold was born into the blue team,though her parents were killed some days after her birth. Ever since she will hurt any Blues she find,that anger her. She wanted to become a spy since of her anger for Blues.
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Red,spying on the Blues.
Ref:
Im just going to suggest one little thing..YOUR GENDER.
Everything else is good.

Accepted, and I forgot about that XD
Adding gender,

So, I'll start on the first chapter, It'll be posted when I'm done.

Chapter one,

The tiny mouse tripped over her over sized shirt. She stood up, rubbing her head with her paw.
"Ow," She squeaked out. A mouse with a black leaved headband and dark hair brushed hard against the mouse in her haste, making the small mouse spin with her violet hair flying out in all directions.
"Hey!" The small mouse clambered over to whoever knocked her around. "Why did you do that!" She huffed, crossing her arms once the stranger got her attention. The much taller mouse turned to face her.
"What's your name?" She asked.
"Oh, I'm Violet, what's yours?" Violet said, all of her anger vanishing completely.
"I'm Alerold." Alerold replied, smirking a little. "Shouldn't you be with your parents or something? You look a bit young."
"Hey, I'm not that young!" Violet protested, puffing out her cheeks.
"Whatever." Alerold's grip tightened on the parchment she had in her paws.
"Attention," A loud speaker to the left of Violet blared into the hallway. "Training for the war is in an hour, please be there to attend. Thank you," The last words echoed down the hallway.
"War?" Violet asked, looking at Alerold for clarification.
"Yes, war. Between the Red team and Blue team. It takes place in Domination." Alerold replied, rolling her eyes. "Weren't you notified of this?"
Violet shook her head, no. "Why are we fighting?"
"Because, the Blues sent SPYS to the Red side. SPYS!" Alerold replied, a hint of bitterness in her tone.
Violet cocked her head to the side. "Oh.. But why wo-" She was cut off by a loud ring, that rang throughout the hallways.
"That means lunch time." Alerold said, straightening up.
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Sorry, it's a bit short. >.<

Name:Valerie
Personality/traits:Very shy,sensitive,brave,a bit confusing to talk with,is easily angered
Bio:She was bffs with violet,and also a SPY
Gender:Female
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Blue and she is spying on the red side "^_^
Ref:

Im a little little little little little -smacks self- confused.

Violet is going to the reds.
Alerold is going to the blues.
Either,
Alerold is still at the reds,
their both heading to the sides they are going to spy on,
you brain forgot.
I just want to clear this up.

I'm sorry, >.<
Violet is already at the Reds, is it fine if I put Alerold spying on the blues in the next chapter?
Sorry for the confusion, if you say no, I'll edit the chapter,

Queenlordess a dit :
Name:Valerie
Personality/traits:Very shy,sensitive,brave,a bit confusing to talk with,is easily angered
Bio:She was bffs with violet,and also a SPY
Gender:Female
Side (Red or Blue or both [Be sure to include which side your character is spying for.]):Blue and she is spying on the red side "^_^
Ref:

Okay, accepted.

Bouncytree a dit :
I'm sorry, >.<
Violet is already at the Reds, is it fine if I put Alerold spying on the blues in the next chapter?
Sorry for the confusion, if you say no, I'll edit the chapter,

Okay, accepted.

You can put her in the next chapter,you don't expect everything to be what it is when you start it anyways!

#10

Bouncytree a dit :
I'm sorry, &amp;gt;.&amp;lt;
Violet is already at the Reds, is it fine if I put Alerold spying on the blues in the next chapter?
Sorry for the confusion, if you say no, I'll edit the chapter,

Okay, accepted.

I have a suggestion: Don't make it so your story fits the characters. Make the characters fit your story.
However, it's your story so do whatever you like with it.

#11

Snowysun a dit :

You can put her in the next chapter,you don't expect everything to be what it is when you start it anyways!

Yeah, I should ask first >.<

Satash a dit :

I have a suggestion: Don't make it so your story fits the characters. Make the characters fit your story.
However, it's your story so do whatever you like with it.

Thanks for the suggestion, I can try I suppose

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