Atelier 801
Atelier 801 
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| You're trying to degrade someone by a trait you hold as well. Xxpinkstarz a dit : Xxpinkstarz a dit : Xxpinkstarz a dit : Seeing as in grammar you're not supposed to start another sentence with ''and'' or make a fragment sentence. The same goes for run-on sentences. Also in grammar you are supposed to use proper spelling. As shown in the last quote you used "cuz" instead of "cause" and you didn't end your first sentence with a punctuation mark. Xxpinkstarz a dit : May I ask what StarC;an is? (Part two is on the FR flag.) Xxpinkstarz a dit : - Instead of ''I am Pinkstar the new leader of HillClan!'' it would be ''I am Pinkstar, the new leader of HillClan!''. - Instead of ''I Know about HillClan's bad reputation and I am going to right the wrongs that have been made by this clan!'' it would be ''I know about HillClan's bad reputation. I am going to right the wrongs that this Clan has made.'', seeing as the sentence you wrote was a run-on. - In the ''There is 2 leaders Pinkstar (Xxpinkstarz) and Shadestar (Shadestarxx) and 1 deputy Whiteheart (Kmgkmg).We have made some rules that you are asked kindly to obey.'' You used wrong grammar once again. It would be self a dit : You start a new sentence because if you continued on it would be seen as a run-on sentence. self a dit : After the period in your sentence you didn't add a space. Xxpinkstar a dit : This is a run-on sentence. When you do things like what is seen above, you're supposed to make a bulleted list, not multiple commas. The right way (from what I learned it) would be: self a dit : Xxpinkstar a dit : In grammar, you are supposed to use full words. (As shown in part one.) In this quote you used ''med'' which isn't really a full word. I'm going to assume you meant ''medicine''. Xxpinkstar a dit : When you are writing the date, you are supposed to write a comma after the day. It would actually be: self a dit : Xxpinkstar a dit : You spelled ''at least'' wrong. This is a commonly misspelled word though, so I'm not really sure if I should count that or not. Xxpinkstar a dit : Seeing as Transformice is a game, it is supposed to be capitalised. Also, I've noticed that you use the word ''must'' quite frequently. Try to stray away from doing that as it makes writing less interesting. You use it a lot in the requirements and when you list how to get certain ranks. Xxpinkstar a dit : As I've noted before, you didn't add a punctuation mark after you finished your sentence. Xxpinkstarz a dit : A comma is supposed to be after ''plus''. Xxpinkstarz a dit : Again, you forgot a comma. (Part three is on TR flag.) Xxpinkstarz a dit : You're supposed to capitalise movie titles as well. In this case it would be "Sprkl", not "sprkl". Xxpinkstarz a dit : There's supposed to be a comma after ''Shell'', and a period after ''pageget''. Xxpinkstarz a dit : In this quote you -- once again -- ridicule him for his grammar, even though you can't spell grammar correctly. Xxpinkstarz a dit : Pink forgot a period again. Xxpinkstarz a dit : I'm not sure if you realise that you're not supposed to start sentences with the following words: - And - Because - But - Or There's a few more but I don't have them right now. Now, knowing that you're Skymouseeee, I'll list some things you've wrote wrong on that account. Skymouseeee a dit : - ''omfg'' isn't an actual word. It's an abbreviation for ''oh my fucking God''. The correct sentence would probably be: self a dit : I'm not going to bother correcting the log. Skymouseeee a dit : This is a fragment sentence. Skymouseeee a dit : You only used one word in this, which is ''um''. The word ''um'' gives us a clue you don't know what to say. This is basically not even seen as a full sentence, seeing as it is only one word long. Skymouseeee a dit : Now, in this I'll correct your grammar for you. self a dit : The excess of exclamation marks you used shows that you were either extremely angry or extremely upset. (Part three is on the ES flag.) Now, I'm giving anyone who reads this 100% permission to correct any incorrect grammar I've made, seeing as I was just incredibly hypocritcal to Pink because I don't use grammar that much either. I hope you have fun. |
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