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♥Fanfiction♥ The Last Mouse
Nikuola
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Hi and welcome to my first fanfiction *-*

The story is about:
The last mouse who survived,The shamans we're killing,Mice dying,
But who will survive? The mouse was the legend of TFM.

Characters-FR flag[Red White Blue]. Chapters-BR flag.[Green]
Chapter 1's ilustrations, CREDITS:Animallady

http://imgur.com/JzoXyap
Characters:
Name: Luna
Age: 7
Describe your mouse: Shy, but a very kind little girl. She loves traveling, and eats shushi
Shaman role or surviving role: Surviving role

http://prntscr.com/3qkn3i
Name: Kira
Age: 13
Describe your mouse: Fabulous, Talented, Skilled at everything, Smart
Shaman role or surviving role: SHAMANNNNNNN
Your pic or tell how you look: ummmm elin u know how I look :o [pink hair, pink tail bow, leopard fur, fangs, pink eyeshadpw, necktie]

Name: Mix
Age: 19
Describe your mouse: Fast, Cool, Bored (always), Pro
Shaman role or surviving role: Shaman
Your Pic or tell how you look: Orange Hair, White Pirate's Eye Thing, Orange & White Scarf, Orange & White
Donut, Orange & White Headphones

Name: Emily
Age: 9 (B-day is Dec. 21, just in case lol)
Describe your mouse: She hates the world, stubborn but if shes encouraged enough then she will finish it all the way
Shaman role or surviving role:Surviving role
Your pic or tell how you look: Yellow everything, cutie/girly stuff. Yeh,
Name: Uchiki
Age: 14
Describe your mouse: Supershy, nice, kind-hearted, clumsy at some activities
Shaman role or surviving role: Surviving
Referance: White Panda Hat, Purple Miku Hair wirh Green Ponytails, Girly Eyes (without mascara), Carrot on Mouth, and White and Purple scarf.
Story a dit :

When i got bored,I came to TFM.When i came there were crazy shamans,It all started because a shaman was mad and killed everyone.
The round begin,While sham was getting ready i saw a little girl standing in the corner, i came to her and said:"Hey,Why are you standing here? Oh and what's your name?" In a sweet and shy voice she answered me:"Well, i am kinda shy,and in this corner not every mice see me because they pay attention only to their friends and the shamans,Oh and my name is Luna,I am 7 years old." She smiled to me and then i said "Oh okay,But i'll be your friend,I am Elin.Even though im older than you 8 years,I'll be your friend and take care about you!" *I smiled too*
When the shaman throwed cannons,i saw a cannon flying to Luna,I runned fast and moved her away from the cannon.In a sweet and thankful voice she said: "Oh my god! Thanks so much for saving me!*she blowed me a friendly kiss and smiled*
The shaman fell down and died.
The next round begin.Me and Luna were running to the corner of map,We sitted and talked.In a few seconds the shaman started to throw cannons around like crazy while saying this: "My name is Kira,And i'm very skilled,So you may be very lucky to survive!" In a minute there was only few mice left,Me and Luna survived.Kira was very smart and trapped few mice.She puts an teleport in the cage and puts other teleport down, so they fall and die.
The time was out.Me and Luna finded a place to sit but the map was very hard and had water everywhere.I saw the shaman,He had white and orange clothes.His friends were in the room.They yelled in the chat:"Go Mix go!" Mix couldn't kill anyone,He tried his best and in like 40 seconds the shaman killed 1 mouse.
Time was out again. A little girl came to me and said:"Hi, i'm Emily! I just joined the room." I turned to her, i smiled and said:"Oh hey,You seem nice!Well I'm Elin, and this is my friend Luna" Luna came and said:"Uhm,hi i guess..?"
We told eachother about ourselves,Emily hated the world,But she will finish everything she had to do.
So we 3 we're chatting and became good friends.We saw the shaman was killing,Emily and Luna were falling off the map but i catched them.While we were walljumping,shaman killed everyone. There were 3 seconds left, So we survived.
The next shaman was last one who could kill.The mice yelled:"The last mouse who will survive is the legend!"
Shaman was ready and killed Luna and Emily,i was feeling terrible that i winned,Because Emily and Luna deserved that too. When it was the end and it was Nomination for title, I yelled:"Wait mice! I can't just take it." The other mice were shocked.I continued:"Emily and Luna! They deserve it too,Shouldn't there like be 1st 2nd and 3rd place?" Mice agreed and we all won.So now you can see in the "Legend list" Luna,Elin,Emily. #2014 legends.

Chapter 2 a dit :

When i logged off, i came back in few hours and i saw that Luna was online and we talked.So we went to utility to have fun.We did tricks and glitches.In a few minutes came a girl,she was wearing : White Panda Hat, Purple Miku Hair with Green Ponytails, Girly Eyes (without mascara), Carrot on Mouth, and White and Purple scarf.That was pretty and cute. The girl's name was Uchiki,she was very shy nice and kind-hearted.

Luna yelled:"HI UCHIKI LONG TIME NO SEE!" Uchiki replied:"Hi Luna! *and smiled*"When we got bored we went to random room,The mice were pushing eachother off the map.Happily mine and Luna's skills still weren't lost and we survived.We played a lot, it was very fun!

After 30 maps we got bored again,Luna and Uchiki went offline.While they we're offline i was playing survivor.When i came mice yelled:"OMG LOOK IT'S ELIN THE 2014 LEGEND!" They runned to me and whispered me everytime.I couldn't play normally because they were running to me everytime and pushing me off the map,So i just went to another room and played normally untill they found me again.. ~To be continued~

Characters a dit :

Animallady as Luna
Elinanikola as Elin
Mixblast as Mix
Shibist as Emily
Bethdacat as Uchiki
Kirbyscout as Kira

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Name: Luna
Age: 7
Describe your mouse: Shy, but a very kind little girl. She loves traveling, and eats shushi
Shaman role or surviving role: Surviving role

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Nikuola
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Okay qtie, i entered u:)
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Name: Kira
Age: 13
Describe your mouse: Fabulous, Talented, Skilled at everything, Smart
Shaman role or surviving role: SHAMANNNNNNN
Your pic or tell how you look: ummmm elin u know how I look :o [pink hair, pink tail bow, leopard fur, fangs, pink eyeshadpw, necktie]
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Thanks qtie^
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Name: Mix
Age: 19
Describe your mouse: Fast, Cool, Bored (always), Pro
Shaman role or surviving role: Shaman
Your Pic or tell how you look: Orange Hair, White Pirate's Eye Thing, Orange & White Scarf, Orange & White
Donut, Orange & White Headphones
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Name: Emily
Age: 9 (B-day is Dec. 21, just in case lol)
Describe your mouse: She hates the world, stubborn but if shes encouraged enough then she will do it all the way
Shaman role or surviving role:Surviving role
Your pic or tell how you look: Yellow everything, cutie/girly stuff. Yeh,
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Thanks for entering Mix and Shi (Emily)
:)


P.S YAY! 1 slot left :D
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Woohoo! Good luck :)

Welcome x3
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Shibist a dit :
Woohoo! Good luck :)

thanks again c:
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Im going to make fanart when the last person enters :3
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Kirbyscout a dit :
Name: Kira
Age: 13
Describe your mouse: Fabulous, Talented, Skilled at everything, Smart

This is not a good personality of your character, no one, not even virtual characters are skilled at everything, there is always at least ONE fault included, no matter how perfect they may seem.
However, this is just my opinion, when I say it's not suitable, however it is your choice and the writers choice if you should change it.
As a suggestion, your character could be very smart, but there is always one problem they find difficult to solve.
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LEL I WAS JOKING. Why take it so seriously? I'm not self-centered and narcissistic... :o

...and in a story you can make someone be good at everything..... If they're a robot. So I'm pretty much going to be an advanced robot mouse with emotions. XD
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Kirbyscout a dit :
LEL I WAS JOKING. Why take it so seriously? I'm not self-centered and narcissistic... :o

NOw dont start a fight kirby
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Kirbyscout a dit :
LEL I WAS JOKING. Why take it so seriously :o

Shes not, you shouldent 'joke' in forms. You can do joking underneath the form, or the author will get confused.
Is it the same as 'fabulous' then maybe change your form.
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Kirbyscout a dit :
LEL I WAS JOKING. Why take it so seriously? I'm not self-centered and narcissistic... :o

you seemed dead serious to me.

saying that is a poor excuse :B
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Sirusthemice a dit :


you seemed dead serious to me.

saying that is a poor excuse :B

Was about to say that, probally an excuse cause you was impressed of jaffa. Who isant.
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Mah gawd what have I done? *Hides under bed*
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Kirbyscout a dit :
LEL I WAS JOKING. Why take it so seriously? I'm not self-centered and narcissistic... :o

...and in a story you can make someone be good at everything..... If they're a robot. So I'm pretty much going to be an advanced robot mouse with emotions. XD

If she is a robot (or half mouse half robot, commonly known as a cyborg) you need to state that in the character form when appropriate, robots may be considered superior, but they are programmed to do that, no ordinary mouse could do those feats on their own.

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you seemed dead serious to me.

saying that is a poor excuse :B

This too.
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Hey guys,Don't fight,She may seem skilled at everything but who knows,She may lose her skills.
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