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 Pyrubble  « Censeur »
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| @griffincraft here's my critique based on the official art style of Pokémon: original  redo  First thing is the head. It's far too canine-like. The ears are really quite small and should be more angular, and the hair on the forehead honestly looks ridiculous. Jolteon has fur spikes going in the other direction off the top of its head (refer to the small headshot to the right). Second is the neck spikes. They don't quite swoop back from its head that way; they encircle the head and are stiff. Another issue is the body shape- it's too long for its legs and too big for its head. The back legs are too far back (they look like you used the in-game model of Jolteon as a reference, and in X/Y Jolteon holds its legs spread out- which would justify that position, but I feel it's too exaggerated). The "tail" fur looks to be in awkward bunches; it should be more swooping off (almost like how you drew the neck spikes). Swirlfire offered a good reference for the bent front paw-- I didn't do very well on that part, so use the photo for that-- and the other front leg looks rather stiff. As for the background and lighting, I don't think you understand how lighting works. Instead of highlighting with the color of the light, use that color for shadows. If the drawing has lightning in it, it should be dark, making Jolteon heavily shadowed with only select bits being highlighted with white. (also, lightning is not blue. You might be able to get away with light cyan, but deep ocean blue isn't gonna cut it) If drawing things canine-like is just "your style", there's nothing I can do to critique it, since drawing a fictional creature as a realistic animal is purely up to interpretation. Since my drawing wouldn't fit over the original very well, here's the separate pieces:  |
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Tribu Griffincraft  « Consul »
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| +Swirlfire - Thanks! I actually meant to make the snout long, well, KINDA meant to. I tried to make a snort snout and failed e.e xD. And I was really having problems with the hind paws.. I would need a tutorial considering I cant do the right leg the way you managed. Thanks :3 +Pyrubble - Yeah I tried to make the legs the way they are in the game xP And I didnt know the spikes in the back were the tail xD I only noticed when I finished the drawing. Also, I was basing the color of the lightning off this picture, but I suppose I could change it a bit .3.  |
Griffincraft Haruhitastic  « Censeur »
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Youngness  « Citoyen »
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| Thank-you soooooo much Mistalee ! Following your advice, this is what I came up with...  |
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| Um pretty sure she didnt ment copying her style Youngness a dit : |
Birdluv| Griffincraft « Consul »
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| Youngness « Citoyen »
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Corduroy  « Censeur »
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Corduroy Mistalee  « Citoyen »
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| aah im glad i could help you, Youngess. And i think smalltoes just said what i would've. griffincraft a dit :  aha. hah. haha. i forgot the whole coloring thing, but here have a redline because im bored reasons. But yeahh, i tried to look up some references for jolteon, and i noticed that it has a bit bigger head, and all the 'fluffy' parts you drew should be fluffier and those ears are quite small for jolteon. Also, i think it would be helpful for you to look up some canine(-ish) anatomy tutorials, especially for the legs. [size=9]short critique is short. [size=7] but thats why i made a redline |
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Ejaffa a dit : this will be hard to critique, because our styles aren't similar at all ;v; but i hope i don't try to make it too realistic it too realistic, since your drawing is a lot more cartoony. but the first things i would do is change the eye's size and make the body a bit longer. the back legs or paws arent that bad, but the front leg doesn't look right (like another back leg?). the eye and legs: so i apparently didn't remember to draw the eye, sorry uvu  redo:  the head is a bit too big on this one too ;A; i hope this helped you! and could someone critique this?  |
| Griffincraft « Consul »
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| Pegasmice « Citoyen »
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Pegasmice a dit : uh what's that white thing? i can't tell what's going on |
Sadlelight  « Citoyen »
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Satash a dit : as Sat said, i have no idea whats going on. the eyes are angled down to much, as if they're angry... unless you want them to be angry. and those feet... where are the toes? and she is leaning forward, like she's going to fall. the tail should be out a little more, not so curled by its body. And you signed twice? Whats with that? hope this helped! |
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| Looks like a very fancy jacket :P I do suggest you use black lines for the jacket as well, because it looks very confusing with that brown pattern and light grey borders. The right paw looks very odd, you might want to make it a bit shorter and move it closer to the chest. The other arm does not look that long so you should try and make them look proportional. Also, the position of that right arm is a bit odd. I'd avoid that completely and just try and do a different position as this one doesn't exactly seem suitable for the whole pose? If you get what I mean. You could try making the ears a bit more round and I personally would also try to do it a bit shorter. They don't exactly look natural. The feet were already mentioned, if you actually had a real life character with these feet, it'd have a veeeery difficult time walking^^ Try to move them a bit forward so the mouse has the right stability. Mostly considering the fact it's leaning forward. Also, I do get that this is your personal preference, but I am not a big fan of the tail :( I would recommend making it at least a bit thicker close were the mouse butt is, but that is completely up to you. Overall, there are many things you can work on, but you do have some potential. Can't wait to see how much you improve :) _____ Also, I haven't posted my art here in ages and I was interested in hearing some critique on one of my newest pieces  |
| Sadlelight « Citoyen »
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Sabusha a dit : thats really adorable. though by the foot/leg/haunch and the cupcake wrapper, there should probably be some belly or the other leg. The mouse would also have frosting on her fur from well, hugging it. The wrapper is also too straight and perfect. I see you did the ridged part on the cupcake, but didn't continue it all the way to the end. Here is a picture of a cupcake:  hope this helped! |
| Pegasmice « Citoyen »
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Satash a dit : Sabusha a dit : :))) Thanks for advices sab :3 |