hi i was reading this and first uhm
you really
rEALLY need to break lines when a different character speaks
i cant follow who is speaking
and secondly
why on earth have you swapped from third person
to first
i am
so confused right now..

Ah see what you mean XD

The last fanfiction or book I made for my class; it was written in third person. So now I'm trying to write it in FIRST person, and I guess I get mixed up every now and then! X3

Consider proof reading before posting then.

I actually would if I could. I had to go, and had to rush to finish. Probably explains the Third nad first person mix-up. I'm sorry about that. I'll also try to get a chapter out today.