The Great Sled Race |
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Soon :) She's writing it! (I know this because I'm her editor) |
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Oh!! |
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Cool |
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Sorry that this is so late, but I've been really busy lately, anyways, here's chapter 2! Chapter 3 should be out in 2 weeks or less, depending on my schedule. Chapter 2: “Welcome to the great sled race! Today our champions will be starting their race! To see the route they will go on and to learn more information, please see the help booth.” Announced a almost robotic sounding voice. It was 11:30 and the morning of the great race. A long line of sleds and teams was slowly assembling. One of those teams, at sled 12, was The Chairs. “Participants, please line up at the starting line!” Announced a voice, “And now we will be announcing the teams that are competing! At sled one we have the Octopuses! At sled two we have the DreamCatchers. At sled three we have…” 10 sleds later, “At sled 12 we have the Chairs!” The crowd looked at the sled wondering if the team was made up of chairs. Nope. It was mice, 4 of them! An unusually large team. “Hah! The chairs! What a pathetic name!” Shouted a mouse from the sled next to the Chair’s, “I’m gonna crush you and your pathetic name!” (This mouse, was named Sozimo, but they didn’t know that at the time) “Pah! You wanna get a chair in your face!” responded Birch. At that moment Holly and Rebecca promptly threw a chair into the other sled, hitting Sozimo on the head. “Owww! You’ll pay for that!” Sozimo shouted back. The whole time the crowd was watching with wide eyes. At the end, they cheered for The Chairs and their cleverness! The team smiled and waved at the crowd. The announcer blinked and said, “Well that was a surprise!” then proceeded to list out the names of the teams, “At sled 13 we have team Blue. And at the last sled we have team Mystery! Both of these last two teams have only one team member, wish them extra luck in this race!” Alex whispered to his friends, “When do you think they’ll announce the prizes?” Birch shrugged, Rebecca replied, “I think they’re doing that now!” A new mouse dressed in a suit and tie walked up onto the stand, he smiled at the crowd and said, “Now we will be announcing the prizes, then the teams will be off!” The crowd cheered and all leaned closer wondering what the prize would be. The mouse smiled even wider at the crowds excitement, “This years prize will be… 1000cc and 1000 fraises, it can be split up if your team is larger than one person!” Everyone gasped and started to chatter, “Wait” the mouse said, “Because of the larger prize this year, there will be a change in plans, instead of a four day race, now it will be a seven day race, prepare yourselves teams, adventure awaits!” All the teams started looking at each other worridley and the atmosphere of the race changed from loose hearted and excited, to moody and serious. A few mice even shook their heads in disbelief. The Chairs were among the few teams still happy and excited for the race, well, most of the team, Alex began to doubt the race again. Birch and Holly were pumped and was practically shouting about how excited they were! Rebecca just grinned and stood at the head of the sled. (I did not mean for that to rhyme! XD) The announcer was back with a megaphone, “Ready teams?!?” she shouted, “Ready, set, go!” The teams shot off into the wilderness, not knowing what lay ahead. |
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Don't diss the Chairs Lmao You will get a comeback, and a chair attack Dernière modification le 1517946900000 |
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oohhh don't worry nice chapter! |
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This is interesting so far, funny too, I'm pumped for the next chapter. Good work! |
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Taps foot. OI :'/ are you going to do the fanfiction forgive me for my impatience |
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They are probably busy IRL, long |
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I have been quite busy IRL, but when I saw this I realized I never actually posted chapter 3! Sorry! I'll post chapter 3 and 4 here tomorrow. |
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Here is chapter 3 and 4 Chapter 3 Chapter 3: -Before the race started- An masked mouse darts by the stadium, where the next day, the sled race would be held. He sneaks past the gate and into the stadium. 14 sleds are lined up neatly by a giant gate leading into the wilderness. The mouse looked around to confirm that no-one else was there, then darted towards sled 14, where the words Team Mystery were painted on the side. He smiled as he reached the sled. He looked down at the sled and started to tinker with it. 5 minutes later he stepped back, confident in his work. He then tinkered with the other sleds ever so slightly, causing them to be less sturdy and more prone to accidents. He smiled to himself confident of his work, and turned to leave. As he neared the exit, he heard footsteps behind him. Immediately, he whipped around, worried about who might be approaching him. “You better undo what you did to my sled,” said a voice from the shadows, “Or else I might have to turn you in.” The masked mouse narrowed his eyes, though that did little, considering he was wearing a mask. “Sozimo” he hissed, eyes trained on the shadows as a mouse with dark fur stepped out. Sozimo, smiled, one of those smiles that sends a chill up your spine. He slowly walks over to sled 13 and puts a hand on the side of the sled, and says, “I saw you tinkering with my sled earlier, weakening it.” He cast a quick glance over to the other mouse, then proceeds to say, “You wouldn’t want to show up tomorrow and have guards waiting for you, Basgetti.” Basgetti is shocked that he knew who he was, he stumbles forward trying to speak but only ends up saying, “You… my name… how?” Sozimo grins evilly and says, “You don’t need to know how I know, just fix my sled.” And that's exactly what Basgetti did. But he left unsatisfied, knowing that Sozimo had a secret that could ruin his chances at the race. He just hoped Sozimo didn’t know what he planned for the next day. Chapter 4 Chapter 4: It had been about four hours since Akari had head the horn that signaled the start of the race. She had known it was going to happen and decided it would be better for her to stay inside. She lived in the middle of the uprising woods, or, at least that’s what it’s residents called it. When the official towns and cities were established, some mice had refused to join, because they were used to, and wanted to respect, living in the wilderness. The town mice called it the unforgivable territory, but to its residents, it wasn’t as ominous. She knew that the Great Sled Race the town mice held each year was set to go through the Uprising Woods, and she knew it would be dangerous and didn’t want to get caught in the fray. But she was very curious. She poked her head out of her cottage door, and seeing nothing coming towards the clearing, she stepped out and walked to the middle of the clearing. Still seeing nothing, she decided it would be a good idea to climb a tree for a better view. She was halfway up the tree when the first sled racing out into the clearing, it sported a mouse with dark fur and it had the words ‘Team Blue’ on the side. Akari was thrilled at seeing even one of the sleds race, but just as soon it had came, it was gone, shooting back into the trees on the other side of the clearing. He heart fell, she was hoping to at least meet one of the teams, and it was unlikely for another sled to come across her clearing. But then again, the reason the sled had come across her clearing wasn’t a coincidence, but of course she didn’t know that. As soon as she started to climb down, another sled burst into the clearing, this one labeled ‘The Chairs’. There were four mice on the sled, and they appeared to be hanging on for dear life. Akari watched with wide eyes as the sled crashed into her cottage and collapsed. Her eyes widened, she raced back down the tree and over to the sled. “Are you ok?” she asked. An owl mouse hopped out of the ruins, and said “I’m ok, but i’m not sure if the rest of my team is!” Another mouse dragged herself out of the sled and said, “I’m also fine, but I think Holly might have injured a leg.” The owl mouse spun around and said to Akari, “Oh! I forgot to introduce myself! I’m birch, this is Rebecca, and Alex and Holly are somewhere in the destroyed sled.” “I’m right here!” said another mouse coming out from the ruins, “I’m Alex by the way.” Akari looked at the odd group, and sighed. “I guess you’ll need some help repairing that sled, come inside and rest, i’m sure you’re tired!” Birch smiled and responded, “Thank you! We’re in a bit of a hurry though!” “Of course,” said Akari, “I have a friend who can repair that sled super fast!” “Ummm, did you forget about me!” said a voice from the ruins, “I can’t get out of here myself!” Rebecca sighed, “Oh Holly” and went to help her out. Dernière modification le 1522004580000 |
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cracks knuckles alright listen here you sly bastard-- *gets dragged away before i can cause too much trouble* |
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Oh Holly, getting stuck in that sled, while Birch is just fine. Also Basgetti and everyone better what out, I really don’t trust that Somizo... |
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Basgetti stop this shit. *leans against TARDIS* |
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Oof. How lovely of you to do that to my sled, Basgetti. Mnmm.. I wonder, are you planning to kill me tomorrow - or something? What a great sled-name I Gadgetrocks a dit : Whhy?!?! I am super trustworthy. :( I'm hurt Agggh thank youuu for the chaaaapter I'm late but-- I'm here nooow. |
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In the new chapter another character will be introduced, this is the new character: New Character Name: Lummi Personality: Possessive, slightly evil/mad, and angry all the time Appearance: ![]() Gender: Male Age: 48 Is side character along with Akari(Cookie_kitten) but doesn't take up a slot Dernière modification le 1522460820000 |
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Nice Oh, should we get a random visit from Jareth (Trapped) just to annoy Lummi? Or is it an idiotic idea |
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Chapter 5 Chapter 5: “Thanks for the food!” Rebecca says cheerfully. Akari smiles at her and nods, “Your welcome! I don’t get very many visitors, Lummi forbids it.” Rebecca wondered who Lummi was and why he didn’t let her have any visitors. But before she could ask Birch and Holly barged into the room from different doors at the same time. “Beat ya!” They both yelled at the same time, pointing at each other. “Geez, can you keep it down!” Alex says, materializing behind Holly, “Not everythings a race.” Rebecca raised her eyebrows, “You do realize your in a race currently? Right now, everything’s a race for us.” And then she stood up and crossed the room to the fire and sat down in front of it. Warmed by the flames, she let out a sigh and looked at Akari, “You said you knew someone who could fix the sled?” she asked. Akari sighed and replied, “Yes, Lummi can, he’s a great mechanic. Currently he’s out, but I sent a bird to retrieve him.” Birch cocked her head and asked, “Who’s Lummi?” Akari sat down and said smiling, “Lummi is my caretaker, i’m currently too young to live in the forest alone, and my parents were killed in a fire 3 years ago. Lummi’s taken care of me ever since. He’s very strict, but a nice guy!” At that moment, a raccoon mouse burst into the room half-shouting, “Akari!?! Are you okay? I got your message, then when I came back, the side of the cottage was ruined! And I thought you might be…” He trails off when he sees all the other mice. Akari smiles and says, “I’m just fine Lummi! And these are some mice that crashed into our cottage. They’re in the Great Sled Race this year and they were wondering if you could help fix their sled!” Lummi glared at the others and yelled “I told you not to talk to strangers, much less, let them in!” Akari, looked flustered and seemed to choose her words carefully, “They were hurt, and now they can’t finish their race. I thought since you were a good mechanic you could fix their sled… please!” she begged. Lummi glared at her for a few seconds then said rather forcefully, “Fine… as long as they leave as soon as it is done, and you mustn’t tell them anything about me, you, or this forest.” At that he stalked out of the room, but just as he passed Rebecca, she heard him whisper, “I knew the magic wards weren’t strong enough…” Rebecca was bewildered, she considered what he said in her head and thought about asking Akari, but she had been told not to tell them anything so she dismissed it. As it turns out, she didn’t have to ask, Akari was already telling them about it. “Don’t listen to him, it’s not like it ever matters anyways… so what do you want to know!” She looked at all of them and sat down smiling. Rebecca thought it was kind of weird the way she was smiling, like it was forced. But she just looked at her as Birch said, “Everything. Tell us everything about this place.” |
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Magic wards make me think of Harry Dresden |
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Ooh nice chapter! |