Art Critique Center

thanks ^-^

hey there
been a while since i came for a critique

i am aware of how awkward the whiskers look.
i'm not sure about everything else
be as harsh as you'd like, i would really love to improve

#4183

the mouse's hand on the right looks a little twisted, and a little long. Also, are the feet shoes or paws?

#4184

Sadlelight a dit :
the mouse's hand on the right looks a little twisted, and a little long. Also, are the feet shoes or paws?

they are shoes
this was from a dtmay, and the mouse in the reference had shoes

#4185

How' is this?

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#4186

fnafmike a dit :
How' is this?

first thing i noticed is how small the ears are for raspberry
usually mice have large ears..
and even though some body parts might be on the other side, we should still be able to see some of it
and the eyes are too high on the head
everything else is in the blue/purple line i did
including your picture:

^ with guidelines and lineart

^ without guidelines

without your picture:

without guidelines

with guidelines

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#4187

[Modéré par Whiskypickle, raison : This thread is for fanart, you can post published maps in this thread: http://atelier801.com/topic?f=6&t=1826&p=1]

#4188

[Modéré par Whiskypickle, raison : Unnecessary]

#4189

Lordfuzzy a dit :
Emilyrosey a dit :
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what u think?

I think it's horrid. Now can you stop spamming?

What's with your attitude? They just wanted a critique of their map.

I think it needs more work. Is this a tribe house or a map you're going to use for the public to play on?

#4190

Lordfuzzy a dit :
Emilyrosey a dit :
<C><Z><S><S H="183" P="0,0,0.3,0.2,0,0,0,0" L="292" X="146" Y="379" T="6" /><S H="211" P="0,0,0.3,0.2,0,0,0,0" L="202" X="700" Y="323" T="6" /><S H="79" P="0,0,0.3,0.2,0,0,0,0" L="185" X="94" Y="110" T="0" /><S H="253" P="0,0,,,,0,0,0" L="309" X="444" Y="369" T="9" /><S H="102" P="0,0,0,0.2,0,0,0,0" L="41" X="242" Y="237" T="1" /><S H="70" P="0,0,0,0.2,0,0,0,0" L="11" X="615" Y="184" T="1" /><S H="10" P="0,0,0,20,0,0,0,0" L="46" X="198" Y="285" T="3" /><S H="10" P="0,0,0,10,0,0,0,0" L="26" X="278" Y="286" T="3" /></S><D><T Y="218" X="765" /><DS Y="273" X="20" /><DC Y="203" X="654" /><F Y="66" X="92" /><F Y="66" X="161" /><F Y="66" X="27" /></D><O /></Z></C>

what u think?

I think it's horrid. Now can you stop spamming?

Tell them to put it in a spoiler, don't be a sore-butt.

#4191

what u think?

Hey! If you were to try submitting that, I doubt it would make it in, as the game-play is a bit boring and modern. For more information, take a look at the dandy Making a Good Map thread. This should cover the basics.

#4192

If you're trying for a map for public rotation, I recommend you consider removing most of the deco (such as the chairs, and the table). They only add bulk to the map.
Alignment is key! It's really important and makes your map look better.
I also would like to point out for grass grounds, make sure you end the length in a multiple of 2. It then applies grass to the sides which makes it a bit more symmetrical.
The lava on the sides of the ice makes gameplay boring (and nonexistant), so I removed those and turned it into a shaman map! Give this a look:

For future use though you may find here and here of assistance. ^^

#4193

Lietfan a dit :
Hi so uhm
pic is big
First of all, yes I know about the cat's legs, im not very good at legs lmbo
and she is meant to be slightly raised up to see the bird.
Also sorry about fountain blur.

Quoting because was skipped over

#4194

even though this is off topic
can anyone give me a tutorial to snake anatomy

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#4195

first part of this might help?

#4196

Hello, I come from the ES community, and I would love some critique on this! Especially on the coloring/shading, since it's the hardest thing to do for me ;u;

#4197

Lietfan a dit :
Lietfan a dit :
Hi so uhm
pic is big
First of all, yes I know about the cat's legs, im not very good at legs lmbo
and she is meant to be slightly raised up to see the bird.
Also sorry about fountain blur.

Quoting because was skipped over

Make the birdbath more defined by giving it an outline and/or a shadow in the grass. the way it is it looks like its part of the ground if you get what i mean. Also, the cats muzzle seems nonexistent/undefined, i know its hard to draw one from that angle and that they are small but it seems awkward looking flatfaced.

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#4198

So, is the hair better then last time?
Also, how about the eyes? Is the placement good does it looks good?

#4199

Critique, I prefer redline. Harsh as you please.

#4200

Lordfuzzy a dit :
Critique, I prefer redline. Harsh as you please.

Mice have whiskers. I think you should atleast try making the eyes and ears more equal. Also try closing up all the lines.
That is all i got for now, sorry about no redline.

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