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 Griffincraft  « Consul »
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shardpixel a dit : satash a dit : Ow -eye twitch- Eeyup I probably should do this next time I idioted out uhm. |
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 Can someone critic this? I really need help on the wings, and also I would really prefer a redline and I still need to add the other wing so can someone redline the other wing if they want so I can like.......................................... ok w/e thank u |
Mantlestar  « Citoyen »
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Rosuuri a dit : Hey um I really liked the concept for your drawing so I redlined it If you prefer the wings on their original position, here's the redline:  Basically, wings are like arms with feathers sticking to it.You can find a lot of references for wings on the internet! Personally, typing "owl flying" on the Google search bar helped me A LOT on wingg anatomy and positions. In my opinion, I prefer the wings on this position: Redline with original drawing behind Redline without original drawing behind I noticed the mouse seemed like it was to conjure something so I redlined the arms as well. This is a nitpick tho Anyway, it depends on you on what you want to do! alikha a dit : Here's a redline I cant find anything bad so far, so here are a few nitpicks from me: - The mouse doesn't seem to have any limbs - Headphones don't work that way. Headbands tends to be flat so i redlined that - The strips on the necktie [size=1]I'm not perfect so please don't get mad if this is inaccurate :c e: please crit this http://i.imgur.com/CvDJSG3.png be harsh if its necessary thanks |
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Rosuuri a dit : I think the hand positioning is fine, if the mouse IS conjuring something there would still be space between the paws. Anywho, here's acrap redline from memory of how wings work  Basically, a bird's wing is kind of an arm. That has a ton of feathers on it. So when drawing it at dif angles and positionings or slightly folded up, try to imagine it being jointed like an arm. Links to some actual wing tutorials you should look at instead: x x x I vaguely remember a really GREAT and indepth one, but I need to search for it |
| Techtriostep « Citoyen »
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Rosuuri a dit : Other than the wings (since 2 people critic on it already) (and vulli has drawn out a 2nd wing , which was something i wanted to talk about but ok) I think the body is too long. It makes your mouse rather sloppy looking. Also your mouse nose seems pushed back, which means that her snout can be deformed. Her left arm looks like its not attached on her body, also want to point out that the muscles on that arm looks deformed too. Lastly she looks like she is derping (as in her eyes are looking at opposite directions basically)  |
Pyrubble  « Censeur »
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alikha a dit : I'm gonna follow the Praise-Question-Polish format for this critique. ✓ The colors you used for shading (or the layer mode used to blend it) works well for the color scheme. ✓ I also love the smooth feel of the lines, especially the fact that they're colored lines instead of black. ✓ The face is probably the best bit of the drawing. It's well-shaped and downright adorable. ? Did you use a line tool for the lineart or is it freehanded? ✗ I think you need to work on limbs; they don't appear to have joints or much structure. ✗ Two things appear to be missing: the insides of the ears and eyebrows. ✗ Small nitpick: Place the gem tail item a little higher on the tail. It looks like it could fall off any moment when it's hung right at the tip. Here are some visuals:  Also (and I'm not sure that this is the appropriate place to ask) but would you all be interested in some sort of tutorial from me? If so, specify what kind (lines, coloring, painting, etc) and I'll see what I can do. |
| Pyrubble « Censeur »
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| let's do another one mantlestar a dit : here's the image; each point is explained below  1. There's a certain flow between eyebrows and nose that is absent from your piece. See how in this image there's a line that extends from the brow to the bridge? 2. I'm not certain how this shading style developed, but having that spot of dark on the middle of the nose doesn't really follow the rules of light. Noses are generally lit like a stripe down the middle and onto the nostril arcs. 3. The bow looks unnaturally perky, and try using a square-ish shape for the knot in the middle instead of a circle. 4. • See those lines of shadow leading up from the bangs? They don't follow the flow of hair. It looks like it's going perpendicular to the parting. • Remember that hair is effected by gravity and isn't as voluminous as the media depicts it; straighten out the left side. • The hair just kinda comes out from the ear and it looks really uncomfortable 5. The reflective lighting on the eye is quite large. A quick Google search of the word 'eye' will return images with no such quantity of light. The example I drew is just how I would've done it; you can adapt reality to your style as you wish. Also keep eyelids in mind! They add a lot of depth to the eye/eyebrows in just one simple line. 6. Again the perkiness, and the ribbon ends seem to be the only things in the piece afflicted by wind. it also looks like it might fall off because it's so close to the end of the tail. 7. • Loosen the shoulders. • There isn't enough of an angle for the breast to obstruct her arm. • Adjust the tie a bit to lie over the curve of her chest. • The neck is a teensy bit far back. Other than this big list of nitpicks, it's a good piece. The wet edges look good with the lines and the subtle gradients add a noticeable amount of depth. |
| Griffincraft « Consul »
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| Mantlestar « Citoyen »
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| Pyrubble « Censeur »
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| I need a little a help because I can't draw human-like animals. T^T Can I have critique? My biggest enemies are hands. D: (The male mouse is drawing something but I didn't draw the paper yet.)  |
| Griffincraft « Consul »
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| +Pyrubble Here, the animals Im most likely to draw The first one is a Dog ///I try to make the tip round, but when I do, it looks so ODD! Do you have any tips for it? Second one is a cat ///The back of the ear... uh Third one is a Pikachu ///...I dont know how to do upright Pikachu ears >n<  E// Ignore the head anatomy, I just drew that quickly to make the ears :P |
Sirusthemice  « Consul »
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jevjev a dit :  here's a small redline! i reccomend you use your own hands as a reference while you're holding a pen and such, and also i think the male mouse's hand should be somehow on the paper to hold it in place or else it'll slide around while he draws haha |
| Pyrubble « Censeur »
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griffincraft a dit :  The backs of the ears should cover about half, and Pikachu's ears aren't quite so triangular. You're probably tired of hearing this, but please use references. Look up photos of wolves and cats for practice. Try tracing them to get a feel for the shapes. I didn't know how to draw the ears either, until I used pictures to help. |
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Mistalee  « Citoyen »
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mistalee a dit : still would like a critique for this |
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sirusthemice a dit : Whoaaa, thank you so much! You can draw amazing hands! It helped me a lot, thank you! |