+Basgetti

So I’ll say this first: Im a newbie critequer. Some of what I write might be nitpicks and I didnt notice they were nitpicks, or some of it might be wrong, and I might even accidentally mix my style with yours... If someone else could also criteque your drawing, that would be grrrreat
[size=8]and also PM me on what the hell I did wrong ty<3

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I couldnt really help on the right arm, since Im not good at fingers [As I have never drawn them], so I’ll leave that to someone else




Ok so um, I’ll go through the head-area first and work my way down;



i am so sorry if it has a lot of nitpick that I didnt notice ;-;
or if it’s just wrong in general

[size=7]please dont kill me

griffincraft a dit :

+Basgetti

So I’ll say this first: Im a newbie critequer. Some of what I write might be nitpicks and I didnt notice they were nitpicks, or some of it might be wrong, and I might even accidentally mix my style with yours... If someone else could also criteque your drawing, that would be grrrreat
[size=8]and also PM me on what the hell I did wrong ty&lt;3

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I couldnt really help on the right arm, since Im not good at fingers [As I have never drawn them], so I’ll leave that to someone else

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Ok so um, I’ll go through the head-area first and work my way down;

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-The eye is unrealistically large. Making it kind of about half the size what it is in your drawing could be a good enough size

-The Shaman feather kind of appears as though it’s attached to the fur, or that it’s on the side of the head. Try drawing it so it looks like it’s on the top of the mouse’s head

-The ear is quite large. Yes, some people draw them with large ears, but it kind of looks like it goes all the way to the back of the mouse’s head. Maybe try drawing a rectangle on the area where the ear is first, and then use that as a kind of guideline for the ear.

-The right ear would probably be closer to the left ear, because of the angle.

-There is no mouth, and the Shaman marking sort of looks like one. Maybe try adding the mouth and thinning the stripe, moving it a little bit back? [Oh and the shaman marking is on the back of its head, but Im guessing you knew that :P]

-The head looks a little bit too big for its body [Probably a nitpick..], and the forehead and snout rather round. Mice do have round-ish snouts, but it kind of leans in at the bottom as the lower jaw ends. And mice’s foreheads are flatter and not that high up.

-The collar is leaning to the side. Often when you wear a necklace, it doesnt droop over your shoulder, does it? It usually Vee’s down to your neck. Try to make the front area tilt down as it reaches the neck.

-The spikes seem to be at the bottom of the collar. Spike collars’ spikes are studded around the middle/center area.

-The arm is a little too close to the front area of the mouse. Moving it back a bit and adding more elbow should do

-The mouse’s body seems a little bit too thin. Mice have fluffy, chubby bodies, so try puffing it out a bit on the back area

-The left hind seems like it’s too ‘up front’. Move it back a bit and show a little more of the underbelly

-The right toe kinda looks like it’s popping out from the left one. Try fixing it by making the left toe smaller and the right one larger? [Did I word that right?]

-The leg is kind of short. Stretch it out a bit

-The tail remains thick as it reaches the tip of it. Thin it out as it ends

i am so sorry if it has a lot of nitpick that I didnt notice ;-;
or if it’s just wrong in general

[size=7]please dont kill me

That's a nose, not a mouth. The 'marking' looks like a mouth because it is.

I wasn’t saying the nose was a mouth

Shit I didnt know it was a mouth because it was dyed light blue

omfg im so sorry

[size=8]sorry

hi I really need help specifically on the hair and just above the shoulder area sorry if its hard to see lol

Satash a dit :

griffincraft a dit :VoirMasquer

+Basgetti

So I’ll say this first: Im a newbie critequer. Some of what I write might be nitpicks and I didnt notice they were nitpicks, or some of it might be wrong, and I might even accidentally mix my style with yours... If someone else could also criteque your drawing, that would be grrrreat
[size=8]and also PM me on what the hell I did wrong ty&lt;3

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I couldnt really help on the right arm, since Im not good at fingers [As I have never drawn them], so I’ll leave that to someone else

Spoiler

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Ok so um, I’ll go through the head-area first and work my way down;

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-The eye is unrealistically large. Making it kind of about half the size what it is in your drawing could be a good enough size

-The Shaman feather kind of appears as though it’s attached to the fur, or that it’s on the side of the head. Try drawing it so it looks like it’s on the top of the mouse’s head

-The ear is quite large. Yes, some people draw them with large ears, but it kind of looks like it goes all the way to the back of the mouse’s head. Maybe try drawing a rectangle on the area where the ear is first, and then use that as a kind of guideline for the ear.

-The right ear would probably be closer to the left ear, because of the angle.

-There is no mouth, and the Shaman marking sort of looks like one. Maybe try adding the mouth and thinning the stripe, moving it a little bit back? [Oh and the shaman marking is on the back of its head, but Im guessing you knew that :P]

-The head looks a little bit too big for its body [Probably a nitpick..], and the forehead and snout rather round. Mice do have round-ish snouts, but it kind of leans in at the bottom as the lower jaw ends. And mice’s foreheads are flatter and not that high up.

-The collar is leaning to the side. Often when you wear a necklace, it doesnt droop over your shoulder, does it? It usually Vee’s down to your neck. Try to make the front area tilt down as it reaches the neck.

-The spikes seem to be at the bottom of the collar. Spike collars’ spikes are studded around the middle/center area.

-The arm is a little too close to the front area of the mouse. Moving it back a bit and adding more elbow should do

-The mouse’s body seems a little bit too thin. Mice have fluffy, chubby bodies, so try puffing it out a bit on the back area

-The left hind seems like it’s too ‘up front’. Move it back a bit and show a little more of the underbelly

-The right toe kinda looks like it’s popping out from the left one. Try fixing it by making the left toe smaller and the right one larger? [Did I word that right?]

-The leg is kind of short. Stretch it out a bit

-The tail remains thick as it reaches the tip of it. Thin it out as it ends

i am so sorry if it has a lot of nitpick that I didnt notice ;-;
or if it’s just wrong in general

[size=7]please dont kill me

That's a nose, not a mouth. The 'marking' looks like a mouth because it is.

Actually, it was a marking. The mouth is not shown in the drawing. Sorry for the misunderstanding.

Rosuuri a dit :

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hi I really need help specifically on the hair and just above the shoulder area sorry if its hard to see lol

I don't know if you wanted it to be realistic or manga/anime like, but I tried to draw it slightly in my style.
Also, I didn't knew if you wanted it to look more like a child or a teenager (or something else), I just followed the lines.
But it does look like a child.

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Critiques:

Also, I gave her a face. I tried to make the eyes kinda look like your style, so yeah. Pardon me for my grammar, I'm bad at explaining things. And my grammar looks even more horrible if I talk a lot.

Hope this helped !

heey i need help with especially the hands (and about the legs, she's supposed to be running).

Michxmouse a dit :

Rosuuri a dit :VoirMasquer

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hi I really need help specifically on the hair and just above the shoulder area sorry if its hard to see lol

I don't know if you wanted it to be realistic or manga/anime like, but I tried to draw it slightly in my style.
Also, I didn't knew if you wanted it to look more like a child or a teenager (or something else), I just followed the lines.
But it does look like a child.

redline:

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redline with drawing in the background:

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redline without drawing in the background:

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Critiques:

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The ear looks a bit too pointy, and needs a short, slight curve in it. The faceline is a bit... Off, idk. The dress is too flat. Her shoulders weren't in a line, it looked like the other arm with cut off or something, like she was a handicap. Her hair was a bit too wide/thick, it was like she didn't brush her hair for some days and there are lots of tangles in it which makes it thick. And it looks flat if you tried to draw anime/manga like.

Also, I gave her a face. I tried to make the eyes kinda look like your style, so yeah. Pardon me for my grammar, I'm bad at explaining things. And my grammar looks even more horrible if I talk a lot.

Hope this helped !

its alright!!!!! but no, I wasn't trying mango/anime like, but yeah this was supposed to be some warmup thing lol
thanks for the awesome critique!

Mistalee a dit :

heey i need help with especially the hands (and about the legs, she's supposed to be running).

This thread's been pretty much dead lately but yeah i'd still love to get a critique for this.

Please critique this

Linsdaymice a dit :

Please critique this

I made a redline for you, but blame the lack of text on my laziness.

and you can ingore the hands/feet.

my most recent drawing

I can't help, because it's amazing!

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Help me, pls.

Mistalee a dit :

Linsdaymice a dit :VoirMasquer

Please critique this

I made a redline for you, but blame the lack of text on my laziness.

and you can ingore the hands/feet.

Thanks *-*

It's old by a few months, but I really would appreciate help :P

Larenwa a dit :

It's old by a few months, but I really would appreciate help :P

sh i'll promise to write something next time, but for now i'll just point out the odd shape of her head.

Mistalee a dit :

Mistalee a dit :VoirMasquer

heey i need help with especially the hands (and about the legs, she's supposed to be running).

This thread's been pretty much dead lately but yeah i'd still love to get a critique for this.

still wanting a critique for this btw!

Elmyszendo a dit :

H-help?

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Well hello there did someone say dragons

I mostly just redlined over it, but some points i'd like to make are:
-The poor guys head was too large.
-He is a short and stout looking dragon, so i redlined him that way.
- His wings in your photo would be too small to fly.

Also basic wing shapes and arm shapes.
To be honest if you're having an issue with something, break it down into shapes and just keep toying with it that way. (thats how i did his lil toesies) You can also try referencing off other artists work, which some people might get offended by but imo as long as you are not copying it line by line you should be fine. honestly this comes to mind.
Also if this isnt what you're looking for i'm sorry !

Hi



Do you have any advices pls?