No problem. I'm looking forward to reading if you decide to do it!

Both would work as titles depending on the lyrics.

Also that's all up to you and what you feel compelled to do. None of us can tell you whether you should or not.

Thanks for the advice tho. :)

bumpin this up with some advice to all the new writers that have cropped up also now they can see this exists

ahem

WHEN A NEW CHARACTER SPEAKS YOU MUST LINEBREAK IT CANNOT ALL BE ONE BIG PARAGRAPH BECAUSE THAT IS VERY CONFUSING TO A READER
THIS IS HOW TO DO IT
"Hellooo," Haru said as she walked into her room. She was not aware Satash was already there.
"Hi," he replied, his hat off and sitting on the girl's pillow.
"How are you?" Haru questioned.
"I'm fine."

THIS IS A BASIC THING YOU SHOULD KNOW AS A WRITER AND IF YOU WANT TO CONTINUE WRITING THANK YOU VERY MUCH

THANK YOU HARU FOR SAYING THIS
almost every one of these fanfics dont use the proper structure ugh

yes bless you for actually noticing
i dont think people see this thread

Great thread! But it isn't for me as i'm too lazy to write stories

no youre just lazy all the tim
jkjk

Haruhitastic a dit :

no youre just lazy all the tim
jkjk

i can get up on bed, eat, and sleep so ye
Maybe get my lazy-ass to the couch for some tv
Not lazy at all. Not lazy at all.

HIYOOOOOOOOOOOO

i was thumbing through some old work last night out of boredom, while i had my novel file open and i noticed this nice little quip in a fanfic of all things:

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Elwood finally made his way to Chicago a little after midnight. He had been able to catch a bus, and then rip the driver off by distracting him and forcing his way out of the door.
But now Elwood’s problem was finding a place to stay. Hotels costed money. Apartments costed money. In some cases, even money costed money.
Money that he didn’t have.
He didn’t regret in the least giving his ten dollar bill to Miya. She deserved every bit of it.
He slipped his sunglasses off just enough so he could see his surroundings. He was standing in front of a ritzy hotel with a bellhop, twenty stories and an invisible sign that said he wasn’t welcome here.

I like the little bits I wrote, such as "even money costed money" and "an invisible sign that said he wasn't welcome here." I can't seem to find that voice anymore and I feel like my writing has become incredibly dry, see this current little quip from "Final Ticket."

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"Are you okay?" she asked, before even thinking twice about her words. Had they been online when she asked this, he would've changed the subject. But he didn't, he simply stood there waiting for his kettle to whistle.
"Yes." Solomon's reply was flat and lifeless, as the whine of the kettle filled the air. He slowly pulled a blue mug out of the cabinent and filled it to the tip top, then brought it back to the couch where he sat down. Maddie's eyes drifted over and she examined the design, and couldn't help but smirk. Did his cup have the TARDIS on it? He never impressed her as Doctor Who fan but then again her mother hadn't either. "I quite despise when my brother is out of school. He's a stalking, self-important git."

like ok help has my style changed or....hEPL

also, to try and get some life into this thread, im going to run a weekly fanfic/story spotlight. who wants to volunteer.

fanfic about what ? ^^ and um i will volunteer eep ??

god bles there's a writers thread

I'm getting a slight feeling that my chapters that I write are boring '''

may someone tell me what I should add to my writing so it'd be not as boring?

first chapter of my story:

The Mysterious ID server

Chapter 1

DING, DING, DING! The alarm clock went off. Linxus flailed around in search of his hat. He quickly got out of bed and rushed down stairs.
"C'mon guys! We're gonna miss our boat!" Linxus hollered. Cindy opened up her eyes and yawned. She turned around and went back to sleep. "We're gonna be late!" called out Linxus in a hurry. Half asleep, Joel slowly got out of his bed and walked down to the kitchen. He turned around and glanced at the clock.
"5:30am, have you lost your mind?" Joel yelled in frustration. He sighed and opened up the cellar door. It looked as empty as his stomach. Joel searches through the cabinets. One square of cheese. "When was the last time we gathered cheese?" Joel asked. Linxus shrugged and walked back upstairs.
Kia finally woke up after Linxus slammed the door several times. She quickly got dressed and hopped down stairs.
"Why so optimistic?" Linxus asked. Kia smiled back at Linxus and grabbed a small piece of the remaining cheese. Joel slowly sat down on his small navy blue chair and took a small bite of the cheese.
Cindy woke up to the smell of cheddar cheese. She sprang up from her bed and searched through her room for her ribbon. As soon as she got dressed, she ran down the stairs and took a huge bite of the sweet smelling cheese.
"You couldn't have saved some for me?" Linxus sighed. Looks like there was no breakfast today.
Cindy and the others grabbed their spy gear as fast as lightning. Everyone rushed outside of the hut and quickly walked down town.
"So where did Tig request us to go next?" asked Kia in wonder.
"To the ID server.." Joel quickly replied. Kia looked at Joel in excitement. She trotted to the shore in glee, wondering what the ID server would be like.
The boat keeper stared at the team looking like he was half dead. Joel dropped him a square of cheese.
"So this be your crew?" sneered the old boat keeper. Linxus slammed the small desk and replied in a sharp tone.
"Is there a problem?" Linxus asked, whisker to whisker with the boat keeper. The boat keeper grinned and gave him a slip.
"Not at all." smiled the boat keeper. He took a sip of beer from his rusty looking mug and waved back at the team. "Good luck, you'll need it." whispered the boat keeper in a creepy voice, as if each word slithered in his own mouth. Joel grabbed Linxus' arm and dashed to the medium sized boat, with the boat keeper a length of a whisker behind.
"Into the boat!" cried out Cindy in fright. The team barely made it to the boat alive. They quickly pulled up the sails and rowed the boat away from shore. All they could hear was the boat keeper screeching at the end of the shore..

I read your first chapter a while ago actually and I didn't see any issues outside of what I pointed out before, your constant tense changes: "You couldn't have saved some for me?" Linxus sighed. Looks like there was no breakfast today.

If you want a deeper crit let me know but otherwise, it's not boring at all. :P

Haruhitastic a dit :

I read your first chapter a while ago actually and I didn't see any issues outside of what I pointed out before, your constant tense changes: "You couldn't have saved some for me?" Linxus sighed. Looks like there was no breakfast today.

If you want a deeper crit let me know but otherwise, it's not boring at all. :P

ok thanks haru :^)

bumping helpful thread

thank

i thought you were gonna offer me something to crit

Haruhitastic a dit :

thank

i thought you were gonna offer me something to crit

you want a piece of me u lil shit

yes give me your worst

Haruhitastic a dit :

yes give me your worst

all i have is an apology letter to caroro
:'(

i can judge your apology if you wish also hit me up on da skyp about that