Squeakishly a dit :

Aha, I don't mind, Pairings do make the story interesting ;)

Oh, woah, you're here XD
Alright ^^
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Noobforevah a dit :

Well, you should see if you think the chapter seems good, then you should post.

well I think anyways gah,

Well you guys seemed to like it, so I might as well post chapter two now ^^

YESYESYESYESYESY

Kiokosama a dit :

Well you guys seemed to like it, so I might as well post chapter two now ^^

OH. OKAY THEN.


(waits with anticipation)

IM SILENTLY SCREAMIN WITH JOY

Kiokosama a dit :

Oh, woah, you're here XD
Alright ^^
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Well you guys seemed to like it, so I might as well post chapter two now ^^

I'm everywhere :P

But yes please do post.

i feel like pukin because im so excited

Chapter 2
The hallway was dimly lit, and it seemed to go on for awhile. It was lined with many doors. A girl with brunette hair pushed past the rest of the group, and ran into a room. Then two boys with dark brown hair, one of them being the rude one from earlier, walked past Kira, and went into the room as well. Now it was only Kira and the last boy, who had a baby blue eyepatch on, standing there. Kira looked behind them, Kaden was gaining speed. Without thinking, the boy with the eyepatch grabbed Kira’s hand, and before she had time to do something, he started to run, and she did too, it’s not like she had a choice anyways. They ran to a room with a lot of instruments, and a wardrobe. The boy picked up a guitar. He looked at Kira, waiting for her to choose an instrument.
She looked at him for a second, then sighed "Okay.” she picked up a viola and smiled to herself, she could finally talk. "I'm Kira, by the way." she said. "Talon." was all the boy replied. Kira sighed.
The other mice from the group walked into the room. The girl, walked over and picked up a flute. The boys did the same, one choosing a violin, the other choosing a bass, then they all walked over to Kira. The group heard footsteps coming down the hall, and sure enough, there was Kaden, all of her knives in hand. They all started playing their instruments. They stopped playing as soon as their instruments turned into weapons, Kira's was a scimitar, Talon's was a sword, the girls was a bow and arrow. As for the other boys, one got a lazer pointer, and the other got a hand gun. The boy with the hand gun quickly bent down and tripped Kira and Talon while they were distracted by their weapons.
“All is going to plan.” he thought.. Until they both quickly recovered, and Kira tripped her back. Kira, Talon, the other girl, and the boy with the lazer pointer quickly ran past Kaden, and out the door. Leaving the "traitor" there alone with Kaden. “So, who are you..?” Kira asked the others.
"I'm Shaelyn." Shaelyn answered.
"Me name be Chess, lads and lassies.” he replied. He had a really thick Scottish accent, which suprised Kira a bit. "I'm Kira, and this is Talon." Kira said.
Suddenly, the floor beneath them dissapeared, and they fell down.
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If you see any mistakes, plese feel free to correct me ^^;
Sorry it took me so long! I had to do editing, adding a few things, and then I had chores irl..
I'm not the biggest fan of this chapter, so I might edit a few things and add onto it to make it better, unless you guys like it the way it is, then I'll keep it

I like it, I just really wish you posted bigger chapters. ;_;
But you're doing great! ^^

Should I add chapter 3?

Yespls.~

i love this story
was i accepted

Alikha a dit :

i love this story
was i accepted

Not as a main character, I'm sorry..
I'm not sure if I have enough room for a supporting character, though.. If I do, your character can be supporting, but only if you're okay with that ^^;
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Sorry I haven't posted a chapter in awhile!
My next post will be a chapter..

oh its okay

bump because i want more

I-is it bad I forgot about this thread? *laughs nervously*

Kiokosama a dit :

I-is it bad I forgot about this thread? *laughs nervously*

I knew it.

POST THE NEXT CHAPTER NOAAAAAAAA

this is fucking cool

Erikadeedee a dit :

I knew it.

S-sorry!
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I'll just.. Work on the new chapter now, I guess ^^

Chapter 3
Kira, Shaelyn, and Talon all got to a position that had them both land safely. Chess, however, landed on his side. He yelled in pain, cursing under his breath. Kira and Talon went to help him up.
“So, here’s your first question...” the ghost appeared in the far side of the room.. “What is life’s biggest illusion? You all get one answer, and let’s hope one of you get it right..’ he smirked. Kira looked at the others, hoping they'd know the answer, but they all looked as confused as she did. She sighed.
“Do we have an answer? Anyone..?” the voice said.
“Love.” Talon said quickly, he immediately looked down, knowing that wasn’t right.
“Time..” Chess said boldly.
"Fears?" Shaelyn guessed.
With each wrong answer, the ghosts smile grew bigger. He looked over at Kira. "And your answer?"
Kira thought for a second. “... Innocence.” she said.
The ghost looked at her, scowling. “You guys got lucky. Alright, one hour rest. When you start up again, you guys can either team up, or go on independant, But I can see you all decided to stick together already..” the ghost vanished.
Chess looked at the Kira and Talon. "Ey, ye never said yer lot's names." he said to them.
“I’m Kira." Kira said as she smiled warmly “Nice to meet you.” she finished.
"And I'm Talon." Talon replied. They all sat down and discussed the plan “This is going to be rather hard to discuss, considering that we don’t know what’s going to come next.” Kira pointed out.
“How much longer do we have?” she asked.
“A half hour.” Shaelyn replied.
“So, I take it we’re teaming up?” Talon asked, looking around. Everyone nodded.
They rested for the remaining time that they had left. “Have you guys taken a good look at Kaden?” Shaelyn asked them. Kira went silent, looking at the floor. “Did I say something wrong?” Shaelyn asked her. Kira shook her head, but she seemed sad.
“Do ye know somethin' lassie?” Chess asked her calmly. Kira sighed and looked at the others.
“That’s not Kaden. Well.. It is, but.. She wouldn’t do this. Kaden’s my friend. I know her better than anyone. But that Kaden, looked almost like..”
“A puppet?” Talon finished for her.
Kira nodded. “Earlier, she called the ghost “master”, that’s not like her. She’s a free spirit, and isn’t owned by anyone. And if you look at her face, it was emotionless, but she also looked like she didn’t want to do this. She looked like she was being forced, controlled, and as for the ghost, he looks like someone I know. Someone that’s alive. I doubt that is a ghost at all.” Kira explained.
“Who does the ghost look like?” Chess asked her.
“I’m not sure, I think it was my friends twin brother, and unless something happened recently, he’s still alive.” Kira replied.
“So yer saying, that be a hologram?” Chess asked her.
She nodded “Yup.”
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If you see any typos please let me know!
Hope you enjoy chapter three. I'll be posting a few other chapters tomorrow, since I'll be home all day!
(YAY STAFF DEVELOPMENT DAY, I LOVE MY SCHOOL o/)