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[Fanfic] Rise of the Dead Shaman 2: Second Surrender
Bluecrest
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Hey guys!
I'm BAAACK!

Ohmyfreakingawd, I really missed you guys!
So the thing is, I will be CANCELLING the deletion of characters.
I actually though about how the story might go without some of the book one characters.

You get me, right?
If I did remove characters, majority of the chapters will be sad, considering that the amount of characters that might get removed should be around 3, 4, 5 or even 6. If you're asking why the chapters will be sad, it's because that in my stories, there will NEVER be a character that disappeared for no reason. It wont really make sense since what I mean of remove is getting rid of the character completely, meaning that it needs to be caused by death. Of course, since you guys already know how I write, I'm too kawaii (okay sorry I exaggerated lol) to even kill a character (if you're gonna ask about Pharah's almost death when the cats are attacking her, I'm not talking about things killing characters, what I mean by kill (omg so many "what I mean by [Insert underlined word here]") death is the character dying, not something kill someone.)

Since I'm cancelling the deletion I haven't though about what will happen in the next chapter. But I don't want ANY of you to get so bored and give up on book 2, I'm going to make LOTS of SHORTs. (Book 1 readers should remember those, hee hee)

The SHORTs are gonna be based on my real life experiences. These do not affect the chapters, so put back that chill pill inside your bags.
And while on vacation, I've experienced stuff. So expect lots of SHORTs.

Anyways, BAI!!!
(idk why, but I just realized that I've been playing a lot of Undertale recently, trying out all the routes)

Edit: pageget? ok nvm lol.

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Bluecrest a dit :
(if you're gonna ask about Pharah's almost death when the cats are attacking her,

oh yeah
thats them kitty cats ! Hehe
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Hello!
I'm baack! And I'm still filled with determination!
Instead of shorts, I'm gonna write something really long.

RoTDS Specials 1 - When Vacation Becomes LOL

Pharah, Arianne, and Paulo were already seated at the middle of the plane shortly after boarding.
They were observing the other mice board the plane before they take off.

"Hey look! There's a screen in front of our seats. There has to be good movies and shows." Pharah said, getting a remote controller to turn on the screen.
"I'm going to go ahead and wait for the food. I'm too hungry to even look at the features." Paulo said and sighed.
"Okay, but wake me up when were taking off, I'm going to sleep." Arianne yawned.

After a few minutes, the plane took off.
An hour later...

"The food is here, guys." Paulo said to his friends.
"Okay, sure. I'm getting 3 cheese rolls." Pharah said.
"I want a ham and cheese crossiant!" Arianne exclaimed.
"Okay, okay, geez." Paulo glared at Arianne. "I'll have a... chicken."

The cabin crew went past their seat, and they ordered things.

"How may I help you, sir?" One of the cabin crew mice said.
"Okay. We would like 3 cheese rolls, one of those ham and cheese croissant thingies and a chicken." Paulo said.
"But sir, we don't have a live chicken here." Another one of the cabin crew mice said.

Arianne laughed so hard because of what the cabin crew mouse said.

"I don't want a live chicken. I want a cooked chicken. You get me, right?" Paulo said with a tone in his voice.
"Oh. We thought you wanted a live chicken." The cabin crew mouse said, handing them their food. "Here you go."
"Oh my god, stop Italicizing the word 'Live' and 'Chicken'!" Arianne shouted."
"How did you even know it was in the Italic form?" Pharah asked Arianne.
"Black magic." Arianne said.
"Right. I'm gonna eat now." Paulo said and took a bite of the chicken leg.

After eating, they headed to the lavatory to brush their teeth.

"Okay, which one of these toothpastes is mine?" Pharah asked.
"I dunno, all of those are the same." Paulo answered while brushing his teeth.

Since Arianne was done, she went to get a random plastic cup and filled it with faucet water.

"Okay Paulo, drink the water when your done brushing, im gonna help Pharah. We have to be quick!" Arianne ordered.
"Sure..?" Paulo said and drinked the full glass.
"Did you gargle it yet?" Arianne turned to Paulo.
"I thought you said I need to drink it..?" Paulo answered.
"No! You have to gargle it but instead I told you to..... drink it." Arianne shouted with her voice lowering.
"Is the water even clean?!" Pharah asked.
"Of course it's clean! If it's not then who would even gargle it?" Paulo snapped.
"Can we just get out of here?" Arianne said calmly.

The other two agreed and went back to their seats with Arianne.
They were already doing things shortly after that.
Pharah was watching movies, Paulo was eating again and Arianne was listening to music.
After a couple of hours, they went to sleep.

After some more hours....

"Wake up y'all!" Pharah shouted.
"Pharah! You scared the fluff outta me!" Paulo exclaimed.

Almost every mouse near where Pharah was sitting woke up.
Only Arianne was still asleep.
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Okay guys I'm not done yet but I'm going to edit this post once I have more time to write!
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I never thought Paulo would say live chicken instead of raw chicken xDD

But still amazing long-short (I don't know)

Keep it up!
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~CHAPTER THREE~
Chaos



After a day of running around the woods finding the right way, the three reached the Shaman Castle.
It looks bigger and well improved.

"Uh.. should I go knock?" Paulo asked.
"Go ahead." Pharah said.

Paulo knocked softly on the door.
Nobody answered, so he knocked on the door so loud that the door was about to break.

"Stop breaking the frickin door!" Zoey shouted.
"Uh.. Zoey?" Arianne blurted out.
"Oh! Hey guys." Zoey smiled, suddenly changing from snappy to happy.
"Is this how you all greet unwanted guests..?" Paulo asked.
"Haha. No, that's how we greet unwanted guests who tries to break the door." Zoey answered, glaring at Paulo.
"Uhm. Anyways, can we come in..?" Pharah asked.

Zoey opened the door wide for them.
As soon as they saw the inside, chaos was everywhere.

"Oh dear. What's happening?" Arianne asked.
"Okay. So apparently, since Antonio isn't Lead Shaman anymore, there's this guy named King Fizzy. There was another new Shaman too. His name was Skittles." Zoey said.
"Oh. So now what's happening?" Paulo asked.
"Well, since Sans was now seeing too many pros in Transformice, he thought that it wasn't worth it helping other mice get the cheese by builds. So basically he's now slacking off, despite the great power he has." Zoey said.
"Well, what's going on with King Fizzy and the others now?" Pharah asked.
"Let's say chaos. Since Sans doesn't build or change his totem anymore, King Fizzy kept on scolding him. But Sans, having Divine Mode kept on flying around, with only his wings moving. Unfortunately, King Fizzy is only on Normal Mode, kept on chasing him around the castle, running. While they're at that, Skittles was... uhm... doing things."
"Such as?" Arianne asked.
"Okay, I'll begin. So Skittles saw that King Fizzy was so busy chasing Sans that he thought it would be fun to spawn rainbows, more skittles, unicorn mice, and pastel clouds. But the worst part is that King Fizzy was forced to hop up the clouds, slide down the rainbows and clear all the skittles on the floor." Zoey explained.
"Ooh! I would love to eat some Skittles!" Paulo exclaimed.
"Go ahead, help King Fizzy chase Sans by eating skittles off the floor." Pharah said.

Paulo went inside the castle and began stuffing the skittles into his mouth.
Meanwhile, King Fizzy keeps on shouting at Sans to make new builds and change his totem.

"This sure is chaos, ey?" Tanzanite came by the door.
"Of course it is. Hey, why did we recruit Skittles again?" Violet came by and suddenly asked.
"We recruited Skittles because he's one of the only mice with Divine Mode that's nearest to the Shaman Castle." Tanzanite answered.
"Although, we didn't know he's THAT immature." Zoey sighed.
"So all the other shamans are basically trying their best to keep up with Skittles. We don't want to be rude." Violet said.

Hola!
Soy Dora I hope you enjoyed this chapter!
Seriously. I need to schedule the days I have to write.
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Hey there.
You know, I'm just gonna wait here for a post that says to "edit my earlier post".
I've seen it lots of times. In fact, too many times. It's getting so annoying. I might expect someone quoting me and say "it's part of the rules".

Anyways, back on topic.
You know, I always get the feeling that I'm the worst writer here in the Fanfiction section, considering the fact that I'm only 14 and I'm a big fat amateur with no experience whatsoever. I can't even manage to write a little kiddie essay for third graders.
I was happy when there are people supporting me and my writing, and I thank you for that, everyone.

But really. I always feel like nobody that I know appreciates what I do. My mom always calls me "lazy" since I always stick my ugly face in front of the computer 24/7. My dad calls me "irresponsible" because I never tend to clean up my desk or my room. My brother calls me a "nerd" all because I like writing and reading books. I feel like I only have you guys and Velvettine (my sister) with me in my journey.

Now, I wont mind if you call me a "lazy, irresponsible girl that has nothing to do with her life besides sit in the computer all day and feel miserable" because I accept the fact that I am. On the inside, I feel so insecure and anti-social. I know that there's gonna be this person who thinks "You know Bluecrest, the poor children of the world has more issues and problems than you, just shut the f--- up."
I'm just trying to tell you guys what's really happening with me, and I'm not tolerating pity.

Even though you might think I just wasted my time typing all this crap, it's worth it for me.


-Bluecrest
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Do not let this bring you down. Be strong. Maybe everyone you know irl hates you,but sometimes internet is the better place. Stay strong,Bluecrest,we all believe in you!
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Bluecrest a dit :

Anyways, back on topic.
You know, I always get the feeling that I'm the worst writer here in the Fanfiction section, considering the fact that I'm only 14 and I'm a big fat amateur with no experience whatsoever. I can't even manage to write a little kiddie essay for third graders.
I was happy when there are people supporting me and my writing, and I thank you for that, everyone.

Well, you're only 14 and write amazing!
I mean, if i'm eleven and people love my stories (including you <3) then obviously people should L.O.V.E yours, after all, the older you get the better stories you make!
Though, if you want to improve (even though you are great ;;w;;) try these, I think of them when I write:

  • juicy words, they may seem childish, but they are amazing for hooking readers!
  • use different words! repetitiveness isn't fun,
  • make your story thick! but not too thick...
  • stay on track, if you need a new distraction, use a transition!
  • take breaks if you need too! get a snack and drink, get a youtube video or movie, and just calm yourself.
  • talk to others, sometimes telling them about your story can help them support you.


this is no way is saying you're bad at these things, you can just use/work on them!
I'm sorry if this didn't help, but you've been there for me, and I want to try and be there for you ;;w;;
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eeveewings a dit :
Bluecrest a dit :

Anyways, back on topic.
You know, I always get the feeling that I'm the worst writer here in the Fanfiction section, considering the fact that I'm only 14 and I'm a big fat amateur with no experience whatsoever. I can't even manage to write a little kiddie essay for third graders.
I was happy when there are people supporting me and my writing, and I thank you for that, everyone.

Well, you're only 14 and write amazing!
I mean, if i'm eleven and people love my stories (including you <3) then obviously people should L.O.V.E yours, after all, the older you get the better stories you make!
Though, if you want to improve (even though you are great ;;w;;) try these, I think of them when I write:

  • juicy words, they may seem childish, but they are amazing for hooking readers!
  • use different words! repetitiveness isn't fun,
  • make your story thick! but not too thick...
  • stay on track, if you need a new distraction, use a transition!
  • take breaks if you need too! get a snack and drink, get a youtube video or movie, and just calm yourself.
  • talk to others, sometimes telling them about your story can help them support you.


this is no way is saying you're bad at these things, you can just use/work on them!
I'm sorry if this didn't help, but you've been there for me, and I want to try and be there for you ;;w;;

Agreed
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Great chapter so far!
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