Lietfan a dit :

Well imo the arm (<--------) is a little you know "chubby"
and the eye is going through the hair.

I tried to find a new drawing style, oh well, have to find another one, then.

Kayleekitti a dit :

I tried to find a new drawing style, oh well, have to find another one, then.

Well make the arms a little skinnier and have the part of the eye under the hair hidden

Kayleekitti a dit :

Thanks, Nezu.
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Ok...
First up, the posture is distorted. The raised paw seems twisted due to bend of the arm. Do drop the shoulders to make your mouse seem more relaxed. And the proportion of arm to body is a little off, and the arm next to the body is rather long and...how should I call it, stiff. The mouse could be slimmer too.
Next, that's the general placing of certain body parts and items. For a mouse of this proportion, the tail should be thicker and fuller. Hairstyle...nice but a little too small for the face. Maybe the curls should drape till the bottom of the jawline. The headphones can be bigger and placed lower, and the ears are seemingly invisible. A suggesiton would be to make fuller ears, coupled with the headphones at the sides. And one more thing: the horn could be placed higher, though the size is good enough.
Finally, the overall look. I guess that the mouse is supposed to act relaxed nad cheerful. Well...in that case the mouth could form a bigger smile. As this picture portrays themouse as too tensed up, I could say that tilting the face by a tiny angle and dropping the shoulders (as mentioned before) with a visible neck may make it better.
Hope you like my nagging...

critique?


this is a bit old but whatever
no red lines please, would prefer tips on improving colouring/shading/lineart

Hetaliagal a dit :

critique?

this is a bit old but whatever
no red lines please, would prefer tips on improving colouring/shading/lineart

The picture is nice, but maybe make the shading under the skirt and the shirt , looks too dark.
Where the clip(?) is, some of the yellow has gotten onto the hair. Maybe blur the lighting on the legs a little bit. Also the mouth seems to be on the right more than the middle.
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Kayleekitti a dit :

The picture is nice, but maybe make the shading under the skirt and the shirt , looks too dark.
Where the clip(?) is, some of the yellow has gotten onto the hair. Maybe blur the lighting on the legs a little bit. Also the mouth seems to be on the right more than the middle.
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the clip is supposed to be an eye, i tried to make it look like it was glowing but i failed miserably
but i'll keep your critique in mind, i guess.

Kayleekitti a dit :

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Hm, firstly... where's the ears? I don't see them :c.
Try to add a little bit of white around the eyes, too. And the eyelashes... try putting them only on the top of the eye only. The snout is a little too big, should be a tiny smaller. Also try making the hair a little longer. Ahhh, and you can't see the headphones here; http://prntscr.com/14fhw7
The scarf should fall down a little, not stick out. The tail needs to be more thick, but I see what you were going for. Maybe make the rose's stem thinner.
Also try fixing the colouring like I said before. The colouring around the hair is messy. And the eyes, a little of the paw, and some of the tummy white.

Kayleekitti a dit :

The picture is nice, but maybe make the shading under the skirt and the shirt , looks too dark.
Where the clip(?) is, some of the yellow has gotten onto the hair. Maybe blur the lighting on the legs a little bit. Also the mouth seems to be on the right more than the middle.
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Where are the ears..? Anyway, the muzzle is way to big, make it a bit smaller. Maybe make the tails base a bit thick, and then make the line-tail. And there's like.. a DENT in the arm. And finally, The mouth seems to not fit. Maybe try to make the mouth a bit more thinner.

Electrodrop a dit :

Where are the ears..? Anyway, the muzzle is way to big, make it a bit smaller. Maybe make the tails base a bit thick, and then make the line-tail. And there's like.. a DENT in the arm. And finally, The mouth seems to not fit. Maybe try to make the mouth a bit more thinner.

Okay...

I'll try a redline.

E: Did one.

Electrodrop a dit :

I'll try a redline.

E: Did one.

Oh.
Here's one of Soak I did for our art trade:


I don't do white for some reason.

pretty good job but the head shape and the placing of the eyes are a bit off...
overall 6 out of 10, keep improving ! :)

this is my oc eyo, for a webcomic i hope to start with a few friends...
i would like som constructive criticism on his design :)

Electrodrop a dit :

I'll try a redline.

E: Did one.

Ehhmm, that's bascially everything I said besides a few things...

Kayleekitti a dit :

The picture is nice, but maybe make the shading under the skirt and the shirt , looks too dark.
Where the clip(?) is, some of the yellow has gotten onto the hair. Maybe blur the lighting on the legs a little bit. Also the mouth seems to be on the right more than the middle.
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uh
it has no ears...
the eyes are too far to the left

Critique please
http://i.imgur.com/3gHinwp.jpg ~ large picture (draw with pencil then digital it with paint tool SAI)
(OFF Topic drawing if it can't be posted here I'll remove it)

Pikapokechu a dit :

Critique please
http://i.imgur.com/3gHinwp.jpg ~ large picture (draw with pencil then digital it with paint tool SAI)
(OFF Topic drawing if it can't be posted here I'll remove it)

use bb code

GUYS/ Stop annoying poeple about the white in the eyes. Honestly, it's just style. Also honestly, some of you aren't doing a good job. Don't just trace over it and call it a redline.

Electrodrop a dit :

I'll try a redline.

E: Did one.

Most is correct. But you traced some of it.

Anayag a dit :

pretty good job but the head shape and the placing of the eyes are a bit off...
overall 6 out of 10, keep improving ! :)

Hello, basically you just added your own style to that redline. Please don't do that. :)


Redlines and critiques coming soon.

Um...critique pls?


And...the mouse's supposed to be falling but it doesn't look like...mind giving me tips on how to do so?
Thx. :)

Galbelmz a dit :

Um...critique pls?

And...the mouse's supposed to be falling but it doesn't look like...mind giving me tips on how to do so?
Thx. :)

Where is the other ear? And also, the tail looks a bit thick. And you can try to improve a bit more on the posture and stuff like that

But overall, it's okay