Graciekinz a dit :

i tried ;;


sorry if too much! don't hate meeeeee ;; and nice shading put some shading on the left mouse face ^-^

and sorry for my bad handwriting

Oh well.

Oh and the heart thing was there cause for DA (deveinart bla cant spell)

Wafflecookie a dit :

Something is bothering me about this picture. I need some criticism *-*!

yeah. i think the lights and stuff really made it look a lot better :3

Because Imgur doesn't work for me ;_;

So, anything I can work on, besides my shading? ^^

Jhnaln a dit :

Because Imgur doesn't work for me ;_;

So, anything I can work on, besides my shading? ^^

a little bit of anatomy, because the body is a little boxy and the head is a little big
here, have a red line


well, its not good but i tried my best

Wafflecookie a dit :

Something is bothering me about this picture. I need some criticism *-*!

*bfore you continue, im critquing your "improved" picture (it was by accident! i only notced it like after finishing the crit! sorry!*
EEE this is ADORABLE! but i have alot to critque! o3o.. but dont get me wrong, i love your art ;3;, just afew critques yea? ;3;
1. What is she doing?
I know is a weird (and maybe harsh crit) but i cannot seems to tell.. what is she doing.. i can only guess, and i have 2 so far:
i. She is flying up (the smoke under her can mean she did the rocket scienctist thing in shaman skill tree) or
ii. she is lying on a cloud.
is hard to identify because if she is lying an a cloud, the cloud would have some shadding, but whereas if she is using the rocket scienctist skill, the tail and earring would be towards the smork, not beside not o3o.
But for now i can conclude she should be lying on a cloud.

2. Lighting up objects
Sinces that mouse is on a cloud, it means it can be exposed to the sun, which is REALLY BRIGHT O3O"
so from the video, i can see that the clouds are exposed to it, but the mouse is not having any "sun exposure". in my opinion, she should be alittle bit brighter, or the background abit duller.

3. Cloud Shape.
This is just what i really think about oo"
I mean in irl, you cant like lie on clouds or walk on them..
But i dont really care about irl, i would be treating clouds as dynamic objects that just floats on air :I
so anyways.. base on the cloud shape where the mouse is lying, it looks like she is going to fall (and look happy ^_^)
if you want her to be safe, make the cloud bigger and make the cloud perpective same as the mice. (like look at the picture and you have that feeling that her lower part of her body is more to the edge :I)

4. Anatomy
Last stop! ^_^ Even though this is your improved version of it, .. the body.. is STILL small T_T... the head is more towards her right and limp muscles too small. Her ear position on her left does not seems to connect to the mouse
i have a feeling you do use SAI do you? if you do i can help out with some SAi helping tutorial in a critque thread lulz.
In artist's eyes, they cannot see what mistakes they made when they 1st start drawing, so SAI made this "Invert" tool so by inverting it, you can see clearly those mistakes and correct them!



also i know drawing a mice in a 45 degrees angle is not easy, so by Pressing Spacebar + Alt, you have this rotation tool and you can rotate your artwork!


so i wouls be red lining your artwork and draw down what my opinion is for it.
Correcting with your style:


My point of view on how it can be imporved (THIS =/= How i want you to do it) this is just how i would picture myself doing it ;_; (dont get mad0

Fierying a dit :

*bfore you continue, im critquing your "improved" picture (it was by accident! i only notced it like after finishing the crit! sorry!*
EEE this is ADORABLE! but i have alot to critque! o3o.. but dont get me wrong, i love your art ;3;, just afew critques yea? ;3;

To be honest I love your criticism ; u ;
I do often flip my drawings but it seems I work best one way and it's hard to fix mistakes once flipped even though I notice them :s
I don't very well understand the anatomy of a mouse. Mostly when it comes to the legs and feet.
My backgrounds are also very lazy, but I guess I should work on improving them. = w= ~
Thankchu very much for your criticism ^-^!

crit mine

Alikha a dit :

crit mine

I tried D: http://i.imgur.com/GH8ZjgR.jpg

Mikiaya a dit :

I tried D: http://i.imgur.com/GH8ZjgR.jpg

lol interestiong crit

critique plz D:

triu


frapuccino

I know its not TFM related, but could anyone critique this? thanks ^^

Musiukas a dit :

I know its not TFM related, but could anyone critique this? thanks ^^

First redline

Mikiaya a dit :

/itried

didn't really have anatomy in mind when I rlined it but anyway there you gooo it stinks but ohwell

You did a nice critique but don't critique the eyes, it is their style.

Musiukas a dit :

I know its not TFM related, but could anyone critique this? thanks ^^

ok. first thing i noticed is that the apple looks like it's all smushed and soft, as you can tell from the dark shade from the side of the apple.
the lighting seems to be all over the place as well
and last, the hands should be a bit higher

Mimby a dit :

triu

frapuccino

i tried




dont hate me ;;

im new at this so i tried


put a question mark by the eyes cuz it's your style, just giving you my opinion, same with the ears, I'm not really sure about some cuz different people have different styles. I like making fat ears, that's me lol.

Can you tell me what you think of this?

Skellies a dit :

im new at this so i tried

put a question mark by the eyes cuz it's your style, just giving you my opinion, same with the ears, I'm not really sure about some cuz different people have different styles. I like making fat ears, that's me lol.

Repeats the same thing:

Satash a dit :

You did a nice critique but don't critique the eyes, it is their style.

.


Also, I will no longer be critiquing in this thread for some time because I don't wish to do redlines.
*Excludes Froggymypet from the anti-redline.