any critiques?


please dont mind the backround i was in a rush

Froggymypet a dit :

any critiques?

please dont mind the backround i was in a rush

Well since I really like how you're been improving, I'm going to just redline you and get the heck off these forums.
Be right back.



The way the mouse is grabbing the paint brush is alright but the paws/fingers are very small. They are almost too small that I couldn't see it. The brush looks somewhat like icecream.
I'm not sure but I think you used paint bucket to color things in. It's not very helpful and you didn't color some pixels that weren't in the lines with the blank white. Try coloring it in and taking some time to check if there are any missed pixels.
The ear on the mouse's right is. . . Inside the head?
The arm on the mouse's right has more fat than the left arm. Also, I think you may need to learn shading because you missed some places that would need to be shaded and you shaded some places that didn't really need to be.
I'm not sure if this was intentional but the mouse is leaning on it's right.
One foot is bigger than the other.
You forgot whiskers to make it somewhat more convincing it's a mouse.
The tail is pretty thin for a mouse with that kind of fat, even it out.

Satash a dit :

Well since I really like how you're been improving, I'm going to just redline you and get the heck off these forums.
Be right back.


The way the mouse is grabbing the paint brush is alright but the paws/fingers are very small. They are almost too small that I couldn't see it. The brush looks somewhat like icecream.
I'm not sure but I think you used paint bucket to color things in. It's not very helpful and you didn't color some pixels that weren't in the lines with the blank white. Try coloring it in and taking some time to check if there are any missed pixels.
The ear on the mouse's right is. . . Inside the head?
The arm on the mouse's right has more fat than the left arm. Also, I think you may need to learn shading because you missed some places that would need to be shaded and you shaded some places that didn't really need to be.
I'm not sure if this was intentional but the mouse is leaning on it's right.
One foot is bigger than the other.
You forgot whiskers to make it somewhat more convincing it's a mouse.
The tail is pretty thin for a mouse with that kind of fat, even it out.

thanks for the advice stash

Mimby a dit :

WOO OHOH LEMME CRIT THIS ONE ^_^ i know 2 people crit already but i wanna try o3o~ *yay*
like all crit i make, i do not hate the work, i LOVEEE it but just pointing out some stuffu ^_^.
1. Where is the position of the mouse?
From this picture.. eh, i cannot really tell IF the mouse is in the middle of the coffee (>u<) or leaning to the side of the cup, i suspect he is leaning to the cup, so help on that, i suggest HIS right arm to be like on the edge of the cup to make it much clearer and the Ripples of the coffee would be more towards him.. While talking about Ripples..

2. How does the body goes in the coffee.
...Liquid, when it is calm, it would have a horizontal flat surface right? right!
and if that is so... when doing in the water, where the body is "splited" from the water and air should be horizontal, if you dont get what i mean...v


3. Shading
I find the shading actually good, BUT there is one small place which it looks... odd. Which comes to it's left paw, the shading is rather too dark there o3o... you can lighten it up o3o

4.Anatomy.
Ok i can understand it is your style ^_^ i can understand that, but some parts of the body is really in the wrong place, let me go through them:
i) Ear position
Both ears looks like they are detached from the head, and replaces on the sides of the head instead of.. 45 degrees upwards.
ii)Hair
i can see you are trying to make the hair having the 3D look with the shading there, but i have to admit 1stly, the shading is not really right o3o" and 2ndly, it looks like (dont get mad ;;) the hair is a cardboard sticked on her/his head. is like... cut out is a rather odd way. Hair normally would flow down, ( i mean if they curled there hair im fine ). bUT THE HAIR IS.. LIKE GOING EVERYWHERE O3O"" reminds me when you wake up in the morning and our hair would be .. messy xP
iii) Arms
.. Both arms are.. not really right, His left paw is too long there, and the way it bends makes it look awkward, While his right arm , it is places abit to low.. the whole arm oo"
thats should be all there o3o"... eeeyup!..
ima redline it alright? good work there, im serious ^_^

Buggzie a dit :

Can you tell me what you think of this?

I think that's....beautiful :D I can't think of any critiques.

Katsatuma a dit :

I think that's....beautiful :D I can't think of any critiques.

ehh.. this is a critque thread.. if oyu have only complimenets.. i suggest you shouldnt.. really comment :I just saying, NO HARD FEELINGS D:

Buggzie a dit :

Can you tell me what you think of this?

Hi lol ima try a critique if that's ok.

Well the first thing is, the hair looks a little flat. I suggest you highlight it a little bit, :I just a little, unless that is your style then ignore this.

Another thing, the eyelashes look like they are just a bunch of scribbles overlapping each other, they're all over the place. I suggest you take a little more time practicing eyelashes. The eyes though are beautiful so I got nothing to say about them. Also because it's your style so xD yeah.

Thats all. Your drawing is really good though :D

Beautyiscool a dit :

Hi lol ima try a critique if that's ok.

Well the first thing is, the hair looks a little flat. I suggest you highlight it a little bit, :I just a little, unless that is your style then ignore this.

Another thing, the eyelashes look like they are just a bunch of scribbles overlapping each other, they're all over the place. The eyes though are beautiful so I got nothing to say about them. Also because it's your style so xD yeah.

Thats all. Your drawing is really good though :D

i was just about to critique that piece but you've basically said what i was going to. a few things i'd like to add:

there could be a few more details in the hair
needs a few more touch-ups (the green from the sweater collar is overlapping the skin)
"happy fourth of july" doesn't really seem to fit the piece, seeing that she's wearing winter/fall clothing

i seem kinda skeptical about the piece though, i've seen your art before and it doesn't really look anything like that. either you've improved a lot or you stole it from somewhere.

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^sorry for bad handwriting

(tried a redline <.< sorry bout the handwriting)

The feet are too long and skinny, (you don't have to do the feet like i did). Also where's the nose? And are those clouds?

Also the tail is a little too thick, make it a little thinner. The mouses body is a little chubby, try making it a little thinner. The eyes are a little too close together, and what is the mouse sitting on?

Sorry if the critique or redline doesn't help much.

Otherwise good drawing, you've improved a lot!

Beautyiscool a dit :

The feet are too long and skinny, (you don't have to do the feet like i did). Also where's the nose? And are those clouds?

Plus whiskers c:

Beautyiscool a dit :

(tried a redline &lt;.&lt; sorry bout the handwriting)

The feet are too long and skinny, (you don't have to do the feet like i did). Also where's the nose? And are those clouds?

Also the tail is a little too thick, make it a little thinner. The mouses body is a little chubby, try making it a little thinner. The eyes are a little too close together, and what is the mouse sitting on?

Sorry if the critique or redline doesn't help much.

Otherwise good drawing, you've improved a lot!

Thanks that helps a lot, yes they're dark storm clouds- and the mouse is sitting on an ice ground. LOL I forgot the nose..

Hetaliagal a dit :

i was just about to critique that piece but you've basically said what i was going to. a few things i'd like to add:

there could be a few more details in the hair
needs a few more touch-ups (the green from the sweater collar is overlapping the skin)
"happy fourth of july" doesn't really seem to fit the piece, seeing that she's wearing winter/fall clothing

i seem kinda skeptical about the piece though, i've seen your art before and it doesn't really look anything like that. either you've improved a lot or you stole it from somewhere.

Honestly, I'm also skeptical. I'm very sure I saw some of her anime pieces poses before but I can't seem to find it.

critique please~

Big background isnt necessary is it?

you cant critique the eye its her style ..

E:

Kamikitteh a dit :

critique please~

its very cute its just the arms are too low and the feet aren't even ^-^

^ exactly, people draw eyes differently

Okay okay gosh.

Vivihi a dit :

Big background isnt necessary is it?

I'm not sure if you're just tracing the art as a redline or not.