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I'm going to drop this here again, since last time nobody saw much wrong in it.

But this time, can I get some opinions? Like, "Oh, maybe the signature should be just to the right of the bell instead of where it is now."

Anything, however insignificant, would be nice to hear.

#1422

But this time, can I get some opinions? Like, "Oh, maybe the signature should be just to the right of the bell instead of where it is now."

Anything, however insignificant, would be nice to hear.

I don't see anything bad. I really like it :)

#1423

Mousegodmind a dit :
I don't see anything bad. I really like it :)

That's why I'm posting it again; to see if anyone does see something they'd like to see changed.

I'd appreciate it if I didn't get any more responses like that.

#1424

Zhine a dit :
I'm going to drop this here again, since last time nobody saw much wrong in it.

But this time, can I get some opinions? Like, "Oh, maybe the signature should be just to the right of the bell instead of where it is now."

Anything, however insignificant, would be nice to hear.

i think the bell has a bit too much shading on it and needs more shine, and the left ear should be narrower, and the inside shouldn't be seen, like this:

oh, and maybe you could make the forehead a bit bigger?

#1425

Hetaliagal a dit :
i think the bell has a bit too much shading on it and needs more shine,

Oh -- I think the bell had a technical error of the sorts. When I overlayed the texture, it fogged up the light that was on the bell. Good catch.

Hetaliagal a dit :
the left ear should be narrower, and the inside shouldn't be seen, like this:

I don't think the angle he's facing is far enough to the left for the ear to be so thin. I do see your point, though. A bit of an angle should be put on the ear.

Hetaliagal a dit :
oh, and maybe you could make the forehead a bit bigger?

A bigger forehead is a good idea. I tend to arrange the face in such a way that makes the forehead undersized.

Thank you for the critique. ^_^ Very helpful.

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#1429

Alikha a dit :
i cant find his thread

I am female, just so you know. :)

Here's my thread: Topic-329790

I didn't make a request for you because you didn't fill out the form correctly. And don't try to do it again; requests are closed.

#1430

I'd say personally my only issue with this piece is the size of the ribbon/strap the bell is on. The bell is based on a cow's bell which features a wide strap, as thin as the strap is on your drawing it could break after enough time.
I simply would just change the size of the bell to make it more proportionate to the mouse.

#1431

Haruhitastic a dit :
I'd say personally my only issue with this piece is the size of the ribbon/strap the bell is on. The bell is based on a cow's bell which features a wide strap, as thin as the strap is on your drawing it could break after enough time.
I simply would just change the size of the bell to make it more proportionate to the mouse.

cowbells aren't /that/ heavy(or so i assume from what i've lifted in the past)

#1432

Haruhitastic a dit :
I'd say personally my only issue with this piece is the size of the ribbon/strap the bell is on.

It's a ribbon, indicated by the way it thins as it folds into the ring on the bell.

Haruhitastic a dit :
The bell is based on a cow's bell which features a wide strap, as thin as the strap is on your drawing it could break after enough time.

In the world of mice I'd imagine they wouldn't be wearing bells as heavy as that, so a ribbon would be able to support it for enough time.

Now that I look at it though, the way the ribbon droops implies that the bell IS heavy, so that needs fixing.

#1433

well that's why I had said to make it more proportionate in size. :3 I hope I didn't cause any confusion. ;;

#1434

Hetaliagal a dit :
i think the bell has a bit too much shading on it and needs more shine, and the left ear should be narrower, and the inside shouldn't be seen, like this:

oh, and maybe you could make the forehead a bit bigger?

Actually, this would be little incorrect I think. The mouse is looking straight at the viewer, so the left ear wouldn't be foreshortened or turned like that. If anything it's only slightly diagnol hrm...
Although the left ear does look slightly awkward, and make should be turned to the side slightly imo.

@Zhine
One thing I noticed is that the eyes look uneven

-- quickly traced

The one on the right kinda looks a bit too tall, and the open part on it looks weird since the left one is completely closed hmm

The one on the right also looks more square in shape compared to the left one
Also I quickly sketched a person and the anatomy is totally wonky who wants to redline it and yell at it and junk

#1435

Vulli a dit :
Actually, this would be little incorrect I think. The mouse is looking straight at the viewer, so the left ear wouldn't be foreshortened or turned like that. If anything it's only slightly diagnol hrm...
Although the left ear does look slightly awkward, and make should be turned to the side slightly imo.

@Zhine
One thing I noticed is that the eyes look uneven

-- quickly traced

The one on the right kinda looks a bit too tall, and the open part on it looks weird since the left one is completely closed hmm

The one on the right also looks more square in shape compared to the left one
Also I quickly sketched a person and the anatomy is totally wonky who wants to redline it and yell at it and junk

i like it

#1436

Finnys a dit :
i like it

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Elaf a dit :
this thread is for critiquing
if your just going to say "omg thats awesome!"
dont post please

;.;

E~

Could someone critique please?

#1437

Before I start my own critque, I wanted to say that I really love Ork's critiques. They're very explanational.

Nekoava a dit :
Could someone critique please?

Cute!

Hmm, the tail seems a bit too thick firstly. And I believe mouse tails are more pointed at the end rather than rounded.
The whiskers on her right and left cheek are pretty... err... what's the word? Well, they're completely different sizes. Even though we see one cheek more, the other whiskers are still a little too small.
The nose is kinda big, too, but that's fine. Also the eyes are kinda close together, so I suggest moving them appart a little bit. Oh, and since her head is a little tilted, one eye should be tilted aswell.
As for the hair, the collar overlaps it at some points when the hair should be over it. The hairband's lines are kinda shaky, too. What program are you using? I'm not sure how GIMP works but if you're using SAI, I reccomend trying to use the stabilizer. And the pen (under linework) smoothens lines.
The collar itself is fine but the tie is too straight. If the mouse is leaning back, the tie shouldn't be so straight.
One foot is kind of... pointy at the heel :p. And they're different sizes. I know this is entirely up to style, but she also is missing hunches/knees.

#1438

I have tried drawing with a new style.

I would need some critiques.

#1439

Laddee a dit :
I have tried drawing with a new style.

I would need some critiques.

I tried redlining it

#1440

Zhine a dit :
I'm going to drop this here again, since last time nobody saw much wrong in it.

But this time, can I get some opinions? Like, "Oh, maybe the signature should be just to the right of the bell instead of where it is now."

Anything, however insignificant, would be nice to hear.

the head is way too two-dimensional. yes, fancy lines are nice, but they flatten the image in such a way that no amount of lighting/shadows will fix it.

the eyes are on a flat plane rather than the rounded surface of a head (and are also rather large for the head you've got). shrink them down to at least 60% of the original and they'll look ten times better. your ears are also in two completely different places. the right is at its temple while the left is somewhere between the top and side. but hey, at least the left ear follows the curve of the skull somewhat!

the shading itself isn't wholly accurate. i don't mean it has to be realistic, but that's a pretty obvious use of the burn tool. avoid that for lighting (and dodge for shading), please. digital painting works just like traditional painting - you have to use different colors to show form.

the background design isn't bad, but the signature should probably move elsewhere or be redesigned, since it fits neither the lines nor the graphic object.

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