Orkestrzhopa a dit :

first off, if you take photos of your art, make sure you have good lighting. half of this redline was spent fiddling with the magic wand tool and brightness/contrast so i could see what i was doing.

second, your facial features all migrated away from the center of the face. don't do that. the center of the face is not a huge blank space - it is small and filled with things like the corners of the eyes, the top of the nose, the beginnings of the eyebrows, etc. your hairline is also way too high - she's either balding or wearing a very badly-placed wig.

the eyes go smack dab in the middle of the head, an equal distance from the top of the skull to the bottom of the chin. yes, cartooning involves moving that eyeline up and down, but if you don't know where the eyes are supposed to go in the first place you'll never get a cohesive style going. the nose, no matter how stylized it is, will never be tinier than the pupil of the eye. i understand that large eyes are a stylistic thing, but there are limits - when they make up over half the width of the face, it's time to stop and think about what you're doing.

those lines above the eyes confused me until i realized they were puffy eyelid lines. those don't go that high over the tops of the eyes unless the person is squinting or has a swollen eye. the eyebrows are never straight lines. always give them a curve. there are many emotions to be rendered depending on what sort of curve you give.

you did good giving the hair some volume and not making it completely symmetrical. i'd like you to take a moment and think about hairstyles - if your stylist (or whoever) gave you a fringe that had a huge lock of hair hanging longer than the rest, right in the middle of your face, would you be happy with the cut? or would you demand they even it out? because that is what this poor girl is suffering from at the moment. i realize it's there to fill up the huge empty space between the eyes, but if you use facial real estate properly there's no need for that.

her shoulders are... i don't even know. does she have extreme scoliosis? is she shrugging? did her shoulder get blown off in the war? you drew her face from the front and her torso from what i /think/ is a three quarter pose - ie one that tilts the body. i can understand one shoulder being lower than the other then, because that is how perspective works, but that huge difference is ridiculous. you don't stand with one shoulder next to your ear and one way below, like igor. if that were the case, your upper body would need to be sideways for the shoulders to be on those levels.

Haruhitastic a dit :

Her feet are little spikes, not actual feet. Her eyes are almost as big as her entire face. (There is such a thing as too much chibi style)
Is her pony supposed to go down to her butt?

p.s. ork never stop being amazing

Swirlfire a dit :

Critique my friend's drawing of me?


*Please don't tell she has some white spots out of the drawing at the ears*

Vivihi a dit :

Critique please?

No harsh comments please thanks. A redline would be good too.

Orkestrzhopa a dit :

stop right there.


i realize chibis are deformed little people, but throwing clothing on a glorified stick figure and calling it done does not a chibi make. you know what a chibi is, at its core? it's a toddler or an infant, with grown up features. that's it, that's the secret.

babies have huge heads, chubby bodies and limbs, large eyes, small noses, and so on. switch babies to chibis and you've got it.

Buggzie a dit :

wow o.o

^^

Can someone critique? i know this is my second time (but this is my most recent one)


oh yeah btw for this one.. i messed up with the pants, they were supposed to e the same color as the over shirt thingy :P

Buggzie a dit :

wow o.o

^^

Can someone critique? i know this is my second time (but this is my most recent one)


oh yeah btw for this one.. i messed up with the pants, they were supposed to e the same color as the over shirt thingy :P

Orkestrzhopa a dit :

oh, honey, i am so sorry about those arms. let's take a trip to the er and a doctor will set them. i hear it'll only take a month or three for them to set properly and then you'll be good as new!

i can't critique anatomy or anything of the sort from that. it's tilted, so things that look skewed might be just because of the camera angle. protip: photos need to be taken with good lighting AND from a head-on angle.

the only thing i can comment on right now, other than the broken arms, is the iffy coloring. coloring an illustration means thinking about what the most important part of the drawing is. is it the marker? her face? the shirt? something else? whichever one of these things it is, it needs to have the most contrast.

whether it's dark and the surroundings are light or vice versa, the viewer's attention needs to be drawn to one single point in the image. when the colors are the same intensity, we don't know where to look. here's a good way to test contrast:

with traditional media, you can either squint at the image from a distance and see which areas are lighter/darker or saturated/muted. if the same tone/hue is used several times throughout the image (in this case, the hat, shirt stripes, and shorts), then you need to think about which ones to scale back and which ones to bring forth. alternately, you can turn your paper over and bring it to the light (a window, a lamp, etc) for the same effect.

digital makes this easier. most programs have a function that converts the image to greyscale, or you can up the contrast manually and see which areas pop out.

either way, if you use color you need to think about how it affects your drawing.

Buggzie a dit :

okay this is my last time for the critique thingy.... well i wanna make a comic, right? and i want this little kid to be in it.... im not sure if its comic book worthy yet, any suggestions? or help?


( i rushed through this... its sorta like a doodle)

Orkestrzhopa a dit :

her hairline rode up and settled down on the top of her head. her arms are both paper-thin and far too long. the plush rabbit is entirely too two-dimensional. give it some stitches, some fuzz, and some squish. plush toys are soft and don't retain their shape when hugged.

also that character design? it looks like every generic loli i've ever seen. what makes YOUR comic more interesting than the thousands of other comics with that same character in them?

Buggzie a dit :

I dont know.... i really wanna make comic books, i just dont know hoow to make that awesome charecter design. like other comics >.< if i knew how , it would probably be easier.

Haruhitastic a dit :

It takes a lot of creativity. To design my characters I use sites like Polyvore and various little avatar makers.

Buggzie a dit :

well, i do have a style i created my self and thats not japenese art related.. i just think it looks retarted .. this is how it looks like