Thedarksidex a dit :

This is art I did for a friend :33 I've never had an art critique before so I'm curious.

The feet/legs look like stilts as Julia said...
The mouth could be a little bigger. But not by a whole lot

Juliasaysmoo a dit :

And maybe make the blush marks more circular.

I think that's they're style of doing blushes.

horrible critique x.x

Well okay, but how can I improve the legs to match the style? I respect your critizism, the muzzle and the legs suite the style if you ask me. :3 (I'm allowed to respond right? XD)

Thedarksidex a dit :

Well okay, but how can I improve the legs to match the style? I respect your critizism, the muzzle and the legs suite the style if you ask me. :3 (I'm allowed to respond right? XD)

I would draw them more like this: http://i.imgur.com/aL3Yjeo.png



I just can't get the arms right. If someone could try drawing some on so I can get an idea?

uh yh.
you can ignore the ears i know they're totally fked up :B|

Sourisplum a dit :

I would draw them more like this: http://i.imgur.com/aL3Yjeo.png


I just can't get the arms right. If someone could try drawing some on so I can get an idea?

Like this? :x

Thedarksidex a dit :

Well okay, but how can I improve the legs to match the style? I respect your critizism, the muzzle and the legs suite the style if you ask me. :3 (I'm allowed to respond right? XD)

erm, i fail at redlining. Q~Q
maybe Ill try/show.
edit: but like the way Sourisplum did

Thedarksidex a dit :

Like this? :x

I need help with the paws too, but thanks, I'll have to try out the curvier arms. I made them too bent, meybe that was the problem.

Vivihi a dit :

Uhhh the feet/paws are kind of just like long sticks. The head is a bit uhhh awkward with the fur sticking out.

stoppppppppppppppppp either put more thoguht into your critiques or dont critique at all.

Bakachoy a dit :

uh yh.
you can ignore the ears i know they're totally fked up :B|

Well, the first issue I have is that the mouse's body is very oddly shaped, like a fat triangle. Perhaps consider flattening the sides just a tad? I'm afraid I don't quite know how to explain what I'm thinking.
My other issue is that the nose is far too high up (remember a real mouse and where it's nose sits, with your drawing the nose is almost at it's eyes), and the lack of whiskers.

Haruhitastic a dit :

stoppppppppppppppppp either put more thoguht into your critiques or dont critique at all.


Well, the first issue I have is that the mouse's body is very oddly shaped, like a fat triangle. Perhaps consider flattening the sides just a tad? I'm afraid I don't quite know how to explain what I'm thinking.
My other issue is that the nose is far too high up (remember a real mouse and where it's nose sits, with your drawing the nose is almost at it's eyes), and the lack of whiskers.

i don't quite understand the first part of your critique, but thank you for mentioning the nose, i completely forgot about it being too high up in the sketch u.u

Bakachoy a dit :

uh yh.
you can ignore the ears i know they're totally fked up :B|

Yes I agree with Haru about the nose. You should make it lower. And more of a triangular shape. Kinda. The arms are a bit small, to be honest. The tail looks like it is starting at the ''circle thigh'' of the body.

Bakachoy a dit :

i don't quite understand the first part of your critique, but thank you for mentioning the nose, i completely forgot about it being too high up in the sketch u.u

i think wut haru means is that the shape is like a triangle but it's a little too wide and u need to make it a little thinner??? am i right??

Vivihi a dit :

Yes I agree with Haru about the nose. You should make it lower. And more of a triangular shape. Kinda. The arms are a bit small, to be honest. The tail looks like it is starting at the ''circle thigh'' of the body.

tails are longer than that
i don't really see how the arms/hands look too small/short

Kattiej a dit :

i think wut haru means is that the shape is like a triangle but it's a little too wide and u need to make it a little thinner??? am i right??

still not quite getting it

here, check how the mouse of TFM looks. It's kind of round in shape right? Yours is triangular.

Haruhitastic a dit :

here, check how the mouse of TFM looks. It's kind of round in shape right? Yours is triangular.

ah ok
now i see what you were talking about
thanks!

I t hink she means something like this: http://i.imgur.com/N3dtZ3m.png

The sides are very straight in the drawing, you need to try and make them looks more curvy. I think it looks fine the way it is but this is what I think haru means.

EDIT: oh come on dont post when I'm typing ; ;

Uhh...try and critique please? Not too harsh, im just a kid, people.



I know, the feet look awkward.

And I didnt shade >_>

Vivihi a dit :

Uhh...try and critique please? Not too harsh, im just a kid, people.


I know, the feet look awkward.

What feet? XD

One of the problems I had when drawing people was that I always drew shirts and stuff sticking out on the rims. Dont do it, shirts dont look lke skirts on the bottom.

Sourisplum a dit :

What feet? XD

One of the problems I had when drawing people was that I always drew shirts and stuff sticking out on the rims. Dont do it, shirts dont look lke skirts on the bottom.

legs*

Sorry, I just dont really understand what you mean, by that critique.

Vivihi a dit :

legs*

Sorry, I just dont really understand what you mean, by that critique.

I mean that the shirt should flare out near the waist like that, it should be more like a rectangle.

Yeah sorry, confusing wording.

Sourisplum a dit :

I mean that the shirt should flare out near the waist like that, it should be more like a rectangle.

Yeah sorry, confusing wording.

Ahh I see. I know, I tend to make the shirts like that XD