[Fanfic] The Planet Mice |
Flawiicode « Citoyen » 1472410680000
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Chapter One ~ The Gathering Today was a big day. The entire galactic council gathered above in the sky. All of the eight planets, plus a small little planet known as Pluto gathered. Mercury, Venus, Earth, Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, Uranus, Neptune. They stood above all the rest, while Pluto decided to cower in a corner. The other dwarf planets gathered beneath them. Protecting the citizens. Today was the day of the solar eclipse. The day when the sun crossed over the moon, and sent a ripple through the galaxy. The citizens, which were tiny mice dressed up as stars sat below, stuffing their feet with blue moon cheese. "Man I'm so bored." Whined Neptune. "Well that sucks for you." Teased Jupiter. Neptune crossed her arms and rolled her eyes. Sticking her tongue out at Jupiter. Jupiter ignored her and went back to flirting with Venus. Uranus stared jealousy at the flirtatious friends, and sucked violently on a juice box making loud obnoxious noises. "Sheesh don't drink so loud Uranus." A voice came from behind her and she jumped. Turning slowly around she faced the host, Mars. "S-sorry mars." Mars was the star student and child of the sun and the moon, he was very important. "Heyyy what's up man?" Chuckled a drunk Mercury. "Well, it's something serious for sure." Mars said in a dark tone. "What is it?" The other planets turned their heads to listen. "The sun has gone missing." Chapter 2~ The Sun All the planets screamed and gasped at the shocking news. "What'd ya mean the sun is missing?!" Screeched Neptune. "Earth is currently out looking for him, but Sun can't be found. The galactic council believes he was kidnapped by Dasioon." All the planets and mice below began to painc. Shrill screams of horror filled the clearing. "What are we going to do!" Neptune comforted the crying Saturn. And Uranus cowered with Pluto. Jupiter wanted to join them but kept a brave face for Venus. "We need to get Sun back." The stars began to clear out and return home for their family's. Banners and confetti lay lifeless and pointless on the floor. The planets stood in a sad eerie silence. The dwarf planets and Pluto left for home, leaving Uranus in the corner. This whole party wasn't very happy. Jupiter and Neptune began to make plans, while Venus and Saturn mourned. Mercury and Mars hesitated in the back wondering if they should speak up. Uranus cried. Then Mars spoke. "We are going to have to get Sun back, and the only way to do that is fight." Chapter 3 ~ A deadly Threat Suddenly, Moon appeared. She was sobbing. "Moon! What's wrong?" Mars ran over comforting her. "I-I want my husband back." she sniffled."THIS MEANS WAR!" Moon screaming meant this was serious, Moon was known to be the most calm planet mouse in the galaxy. If she got like this, it was bad news. Sun and Moon were partners, lovers, whatever you might prefer to call them. But either way, they were joined at the hip, yet polar opposites at the same time. Moon's white fur blew in the wind and her sparkling eyes were sad and lonely. Mars and Venus took her in to the back room gently whispering kind things to her. Neptune screamed in rage and pounded his fist on the table, while Jupiter leaned on her boyfriends shoulder trying to calm him down. The entire galaxy was being thrown out of balance, and everyones emotions were out of control. Mars was away comforting their empress, so nobody could do a thing until he got back. Earth their queen was away with the galatic council discussing the issue. A whimpering Saturn stepped forward. "Look, how about we all just calm down? If we're all calm we can solve this right?" Her face was hopeful, but the others were all dark and sad. Saturn lowered her head and stepped down, feeling ashamed for the stupid suggestion. "Saturn's right." came a voice from the shadows. The planets turned their heads to face a small little planet, it was the Dwarf Planet, the LEAD dwarf planet, the husband of Pluto. Ceres. "Hey Cer." Chuckled Jupiter. "Hello Jupiter." Ceres dipped his head. The planets began to circle around Ceres, there wasn't a hint of intimidation on his face. He fixed the star crown on his head and nodded. "It's best we all calm down in this situation, Pluto came to me crying about the Sun. She couldn't even speak she was so upset; So I went to the local dwarf star village, where I was alerted of the situation. It is a sad day for us all." The planets stood in a sad sorrow circle, until Moon came back out. "It's time to prepare for war." Her eyes were filled with a fiery rage, she hissed as she spoke her words, her teeth were bared and her Moon sword stayed in hand. Mars and Venus grabbed her by her elbows and pulled her back in to the room, the other planets decided to follow the second time. "I dunno what pep talk you're given er, but our empress seems kinda...meh." Neptune said. Jupiter lay her head on his shoulder and kissed him. Uranus stared jealously. Venus rolled her eyes and twirled her pretty blue hair. Neptune eyed her but was slapped by Jupiter. "Don't go cheating on me!" Chapter Four ~ A battle between planets "Alright. Located far within the galaxy are 3 major unknown planets, the first being Dasioon. Short for, Dark side of the moon, my evil twin." Empress Moon had layed out battle plans on a table. The other planets gathered around it in a hushed silence. "The second, being the child of Dasioon, is Meorlan. Short for Meteor Planet." The other planets looked around nervously at eachother. Meorlan was a ferocious battle planet, and once defeated Sun. "The third and last planet that is in on the sun capturing, is Blackhet. Blackhet is short for Black Hole Planet." The planets looked at eachother with a scared look on their face. All of the planets listed were far more powerful then Sun and Moon, how could they defeat all three? "I know it might be hard, but we have no other choice but to go to war with them." The empress explained. "Dismissed." With that the planets exited. Sitting down on a nearby rock, Uranus began to cry. Venus tried to cheer her up with jokes, but to no avail. This was a dark time for the planets, this had never happened before. "None of us have wondered, what about the solar eclipse? I mean what is gonna happen? Moon is going to be thrown out of balance without Sun." Jupiter had spoken up. "I dunno." Mercury said. There was a silence as the planets pondered on this. "Should we consult the Star Shaman?" Mars spoke in a formal tone. "I suppose we should." Venus said as she looked up from her crying friend. With that the planets dressed up for meeting the powerful Moon shaman. "Shall we?" "We shall." TO BE CONTINUED Dernière modification le 1472415600000 |
Youngness « Citoyen » 1472421600000
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I love the idea! unfortunately the chapters and lack a lot of context. By the first one alone, a lot of questions are raised. I admire your devotion, a chapter a day's gotta be harsh! Good luck! |
Lisa_w « Citoyen » 1472448720000
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nice story |
Anubislk « Citoyen » 1472476500000
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flawiicode a dit : Good luck posting it here ;) my story is too trashy to be posted here |
Atearatareta « Censeur » 1472488260000
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it's a really gr8 one guys anubi post it |
Flawiicode « Citoyen » 1472514300000
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Youngness a dit : lisatibu a dit : Thanks for you support! I try to update it much as possible |
Creammouse « Citoyen » 1472664540000
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ehh the only thing that bothers me is that the chapters are EXTREMELY short, with the exception of ch. 3. thats more of a tolerable length, but i'd advise you to make the chapters a lil longer. but otherwise nice job! |
Atearatareta « Censeur » 1472933100000
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flawii pls update this |
Little_soldr « Citoyen » 1472996220000
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This seems pretty B.A. I would make a crappy one... |
Flawiicode « Citoyen » 1493685660000
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Lock this thread please never coming back 2 this |