A Forbidden Love [ Fanfiction ] |
Piegirlseyaj « Citoyen » 1488632040000
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Prologue Every story has to take a right turn to Sunny day or a left turn to Stormy skies... Judy was her name.. Judy was a mysterious mouse and was diagnosed with being blind but they couldn't confirm it .Judy's mom April left her in a orphanage and was adopted by age 7. Her new family lived in the village. They owned the village or at least the beer bar. If you enjoy stories with happy endings I'd adivse for you to not read this anymore. Chapter 1 Judy was usually happy and Jolly. She had brownish fur and always wore a green and white scarf. One day while she was walking home from school she ran into Jonah a small and brown mouse. " H-h-I" Jonah said, then he ran off. Judy thought to herself " heh he's sorta cute" then she covered her mouth and kept walking. Before Judy got home she tripped on a few stickers and fell and screamed pain. Nobody ever came... she thought to herself " Am I dead?" " Of course not silly!!" Said a mouse named Haden. " Who're YOU?!?!" Asked Judy. " I'm Haden. You're in matosia. It's the place where you're dead but not dead. Basically you can return to earth for two weeks MaX during every month." Judy dusted herself off realizing it was filled with clouds. She turned her head and saw she was walking on clouds. " Let me return to earth!!" Judy demanded. " okay but there's rules" Haden showed Judy the rules like she can't go into the rain but she can into pools. She can NOT have a relationship with any of the living. " Okay fine" she said as she went back home. " MOM DAD I'm HOME!!!" Nobody came... she saw a Get out sign explaining this house was to be torn down. " N-NO!!!!" Then she realized something.. she turned around.... Chapter two is a work in progress. Hope you enjoyed. Here's a sneak peak for next chapter Judy meets a girl named April who is a demon but she doesn't know it Haden has an unfortunate accident Jonah got a gf Hope it didn't spoil TOO much Extra: Please notify me of any grammar or spelling errors Dernière modification le 1488682380000 |
Tartlmancer « Citoyen » 1488805320000
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Good fanfic so far! I reccomend you work on paragraphs though. nobody likes reading a text wall. |
Piegirlseyaj « Citoyen » 1488851940000
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Tartlmancer a dit : Thanks! |
Piegirlseyaj « Citoyen » 1488853080000
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Chapter 2 Note: there are some parts between heaven and Hell and this is meant for fiction reasons not to be religious or anything There in the dark shadow came a figure. Tall, slim, and had a top hat. " H- Hello...." said Judy almost making a squeak. " Do not be afraid young one for I am the one who freed you from the past. For I can only speak in thy call riddles." Judy looked up and snickered a little trying to hide the smile." Do not fret or cry or shed a tear for I have seen you've have a long path ahead. For I must head right in to my hut on the tiki tiki island far away. I must leave you but have a warning there is more to come than what you're knowing." Then the figure vanished away. Judy shuttered and got the chills. The figure left behind a necklace make of gold and a ruby in the middle. " Hmm.." then Judy tried it on and wore it for a while. She walked outside and found her friend Mia a short but smart and nice mouse with long whiskers. " Hey! Why have you been absent for a week??!!?" Asked Mia. Judy thought up of a decent lie ," My uh.. Dad..." "Your dad what?" Asked Mia. "He broke his foot so we had to go to a doctor." Mia shrugged and walked off. Judy randomly vanished into thin air realizing she was going back to Matosia... " Hey!! What's the dang idea??!?!" Judy screamed. There was a book layer out explaining Matosia was in between heaven and hell and that she did die but was saved before she went to the place. All of a sudden a figure came who was a shaman one of the three shamans... the green one... " Hello young one." Said the shaman and Judy bowed. "Haha it's okay young one. I have come to let you go back to your life.. it might be miserable but that's the price." Judy thought and said," YES!!" Then a glow came and she was back to her life and her parents were there and she was SO happy. Judy saw Jonah hold hands with a mouse named April. " Hey Judy this is my girlfriend April!" April skimmed through Judy until she said," Hello.' Then she snickered. "Well, love to chat but we gotta get going Judy." Said Jonah as they walked off. Judy was heart broken.." Young one don't be afraid for there are worst more to be afraid. That mouse of yours Haden you see had the accident of his leg you see." Said a voice and then vanished. " ugh why the Hell does this crap ALwAYS happen to ME!!?!?!?" Judy lived her life sadly for two months until an incident happened... she as confirmed with photophobia.... ( a disease where your eyes are more sensitive to light so either your blind or you have to wear glasses) The truth is Judy wasn't normal.. she had a life somewhere else.... the truth was she is a-- ( car goes by) So yeah. Then some figures went around a pot of something " Soon Judy will be where she belongs" snickered a voice ... |