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 Fabillia  « Citoyen »
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birdluv a dit : The 'wolf-dog' thing's face looks very big-cat like. I was about to say you should make it look more domestic cat-like, since that type of broad snout and facial features look weird on such a petite cute mush body. I say look up some sorts of small dogs to get a more doggish yet 'chibi cute small mush body' look with a matching face! Or work on a 'chibi' style that chibis up the face too so it doesn't look so out of place compared to the bodies smallish features. Try comparing wolf faces to little chihuahua or pomeranian faces and just pay attention to the different in eye/snout/ear proportions compared to the rest of the head. (Or big cat vs domestic cat) Also it has no crotch/stomach Just empty void gap between the legs While some wish to have voids instead of stomachs (me) it doesn't work like that sadly, keep in mind the rest of the body underneath dem limbs Second one's cute! The snout + mouth still make me think of big cat mouths, though. Kinda how the lines make the snout look boxy like tiger snouts kinda are. And how horizontally long the nose is. Make it more narrow, perhaps, to make it look like it's on a smaller animal! |
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| Ahh, thanks for the critique! I'ts hard to try out a new style without somebody else. Because you usually miss something big (For example ^) I see what your saying with the nose's range and that. I also decided to give your suggestions a shot and this is what I got! (tell me what you think!)  (I was only practicing on the snout and I felt it was mandatory to add the eyes, so please ignore them! ^^') |
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birdluv a dit : Yesss! Looks much more suited for a smaller animal~ |
Theandra  « Citoyen »
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birdluv a dit : this is my first time but some things on the second one the face looks like its looking to the left, but the scarf isnt? it's on the neck, so probably it should look slightly turned to the left, maybe make the left part smaller this is a nitpick, but the shape of the hat, dosent seem natural gravity pulls it down so around the end, it should tilt slightly downwards im not sure if you made the shape on it by purpose, i dont know |
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| Critique please,  I know about the messy coloring, and im sorry for that. |
Lietfan Sirusthemice  « Consul »
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Lietfan a dit :  ears may be nitpicky idk. |
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| This is a scottish terrier I was attempting to draw, I tried to make it creative by using different pencils.  |
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Pinksrainbow a dit :  faces vary with style. i also suggest sketching a circle for the head first?? maybe also look up some anatomy references or anime pictures of guys to get an idea of how shoulders and bangs/hair look also try putting on a hood irl and see how it looks and mess around with it, hoods they aren't balloons~ (unless they're tied tight)  here's an another one (purely my style) so you might get an idea of how it can look like |
Thefourthone  « Censeur »
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Pinksrainbow a dit :  woop. hope this isn't too harsh ^^;;; i also very much agree with sirus~ good luck! |
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Lordfuzzy a dit : Looks really interesting, especially on the head! The head has a lot of nice depth to it. I feel the body is a little more chaotic and less defined. Maybe if you blocked off a lighter part on the chest/arms with a lighter grey kind of like how you did on the head. Love how it kind of looks like folded paper in places, very geometric. |
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Vulli a dit : Thanks! That means a lot coming from you, I will take note of the body. e: Fixed! I changed some of the features on the lower body also. One more thing though, how do you make an image transparent without the use of the wand tool? It always leaves a white line around the picture.  |
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Pinksrainbow a dit : Both Sirius and Thefourthone are correct. The shoulders are too straight, they're meant to point downwards at an angle. You could also add eyebrows to it if you want. They help express, well, expressions, but I know a few artists who do fine without them. It's all about what you're comfortable with. The nose should be facing the way the person is facing. Personally I feel it's a bit too small and awkward looking, it really throws off the face, but if you're going for how Chihiro looked in Spirited away you should keep it how it is, just alter it so it's not so awkward looking.  Since you're trying to draw a specific character, here's what you should do to make it look more like him. The sleeves need to be longer. They're not short sleeves, it's a long sleeved jacket with the sleeves rolled up to the elbows. The shirt itself is far too high up. It should rest lower, about where the collar bone starts, and the opening-thing is longer and reveals more of his chest. His hair also has a slight curl to it, it's not straight, and it's slightly longer than your picture-- hair should be below his ears. Look at references of actual men, instead of anime, to get an idea of how their body works. |
Dead_tuna  « Citoyen »
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 Critique,please. (I know, hands are terrible.Neck too.) |
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Koshkafriska a dit : the neck is really long, but if you input that into your actual style it can easily by bypassed. It looks fairly nice there as-is. My personal opinion is if your art is going to have long necks, then the rest of the body should be elongated and thin. As you said the hands can do some work. The arms also seem a little too thick for her body, you should try to make them thinner next time, to accommodate. The dress is beautifully done, but the way it's shaped doesn't make much sense. The right side is up much higher than the left, as if the wind is blowing it, but the rest of the picture doesn't show signs of wind blowing, so it looks very weird and out of place. Try to make them even. The dagger is also way too thick. They're fairly thin, about half the size of that but just as long. The right side of the hair ends a little too soon, it looks like she's missing a huge chunk of hair on the right side of her head. Again, try to even it out with the left side. There's also something with the ears, they don't look right, but I'm not good with animals so I'm going to leave that to someone else. |