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unovafangirl a dit : It looks like the tail item is just pasted on, How is it connecting to the tail??? Youngness a dit : Where are the mouse ears??? |
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Youngness Secretive  « Censeur »
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unovafangirl a dit : Try looking at wing anatomy, wings aren't just lumpy- they've got distinct and specific patterns of feathers which allow flight. Also wings are almost never shaped like this. Try looking at pictures of real birds and drawing what you see. You need detail within the lines, so details on the feathers and sections. Some detail to the feather on the head would benefit your drawing as well, in my opinion. That shows a pretty decent example of how the inside of the wings are supposed to be laid out I'd imagine the wings looking a little more like this, even though this bird is standing and not flying. The pose you have is strange for wings, a flying bird would almost never be completely vertical. Now onto the mouse. The eyes are uneven, the right eye is about 2/3 the size of the left eye. The whiskers are too thick. There are no paws, and mice usually have pink/cream/whatever-their-skin-tone-is paws. The tail goes big > small > big > small, it should just be a seamless transition from big to small. The item on the tail is just kind of.. floating? Try thinking about how gravity would affect it. Some little things i'd change if it was my drawing- The color almost looks yellow to me, I'd personally use a brown that had more red or orange in it. The tattoos are visibly asymmetrical, I would try to match those better next time ________________________________ Can I get a critique on this? I'd prefer critique on the colors/shading moreso than the horse- but either is welcome. Also sorry that the colors are slightly difficult to see, this was the best my scanner could do.  |
Secretive Kittyknight  « Citoyen »
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Secretive a dit : Well the coloring is about the same as I can do, so I can't say anything there... But for the body, the hooves are too small, the legs and neck too short and he's a bit chunky It depends of the breed really, and if you're doing a future pony I guess you can get away with the chunkiness :) Also, his back right leg if very bony compared to the others. c: Hope I helped. ^-^ |
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| I know this is non tfm but I'd really like to see if there's anything I can improve on with the anatomy.  |
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Youngness in DTMAY a dit : Anything to say ? The "chest hair" isn't nice at all - I know. I kinda failed on the neck so I did what I could to catch myself up. ^-^ |
Mistalee  « Citoyen »
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Youngness a dit : hh so i did the redline thing and i'm trying to explain some things that could be improved in my opinion, but dont worry because im not trying to be too mean/harsh  for starters, i think the paws should be way closer to the arm, because they look really long in your pic. Also, IF those are tfm shop items, they're too big too. And then there's the little things/nitpicking; your mouse's mouth looks a bit weird to me and the eyes should be closer to the muzzle. I also changed the carrot's leaves because i couldn't find a species that have that kind of leaves (i hope they're called leaves in english). And the last thing, idk if it's just me or does the mouse's anatomy look a bit too human-ish? And i just noticed it but it doesen't have ears, or if the bunny ears are supposed to be the normal ears. |
Sirusthemice  « Consul »
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unovafangirl a dit :  i apologize for my bad choice of words but i suggest looking up wings and feathers and just mouse anatomy i suppose |
Secretmiss  « Citoyen »
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 I'm wondering what I could do to make this better and also how to make the feet |
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Ejaffa a dit : aaah, i meant to reply to this ages ago but i got distracted and then forgot about it. anyhow, thanks so much for the critique! the placement of the front paws was probably what i thought looked off, so thanks for pointing that out! long necks are part of my style, but i can see what you mean. i'll try to make sure they don't end up too long. and yeah, i'm awful at drawing tails haha. if anyone has any tips for drawing tails, it'd be super cool if you could share em! ;; i sort of redrew the same pose following your advice. does it look any better or is there anything else i can improve on??  |
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| Yes that's a lot better Zet The only think I would point out if you wanted a slightly longer neck to suit your style is something like:  All I would suggest is generally loosen up the shoulders a little bit. Just a small nitpick again, when I draw mice sitting, I usually draw the front legs slightly closer together so they look a little cosier or something, however this isn't needed and feel free to ignore this suggestion if it doesn't suit your style. |
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 Okay, can someone critique this for me? Long time since i dropped something here, since i was kind of scared. Okay so this is a fae i've wanted to draw since forever! Today i finally felt like it, and so im requesting critique so it will be better. This is the sketch, so i can fix things fast. Go ahead i guess I feel like something is off with the head, and the hair. Also i wonder with the ears.. Why she wears human clothes you wonder? shes on a mission in the human world |
Supastarx  « Citoyen »
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Mistalee a dit : Mistalee a dit : Okay, thanks. I do huge ears (only way I can do them :') ) so I made the rabbit ears the normal ones because it looked horrible on the sketch. Thanks again I'll try out what you said soon :) |
Griffincraft  « Consul »
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Can someone criteque the Jolteon I drew? I need help specially with the coloring.. I drew the yellow first, and when I tried to make the blue streaks [the flashes of lightning in the background colored the pelt blue] it turned green... Because I thought the blue would overthrow the yellow and show blue. >_> <_> <_< Well anyways anyone help? :P |
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Ejaffa a dit : Quoting this because I think I need help ;; |
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griffincraft a dit : Note that using color pencils/markers(if you used any of those) mixes the colors that combine. Even though you need help with coloring, you have to use something else to make sure the blue doesn't mix with the yellow. Like an actual online art program, not pencil and paper. Anyway Here's a redline.  The legs are WAY off, you need to shorten them. If they were that long that would be in a different pose, like jumping. The front limb which is raised is kinda off-proportion. Try to make it a bit lower. This is how a front limb of a canine looks like lifted:  Now, the actual pokemon. Jolteon's snout isn't supposed to be that huge which makes it look like a canine snout. The ears are too small in my opinion. The neck is way too long. Here's a picture of Jolteon: http://prntscr.com/4g6nc3 The spiky parts look like just stiff fur to me, like a cat when it's threatened. Try to make it bigger, like in the redline. Hope this helps! |
