[Fanfiction] Dinah's Dilemma |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1378259700000
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He must have about a million noob mice loitering about his mansion. I have a question though, how did he get to be so famous? I mean of course he obviously didnt MAKE the world they live in... |
Livcorish « Citoyen » 1378259820000
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Good question Souris! Thats supposed to be unexplained as Dinah will ask Tig that question later. But I'm glad someone noticed that ^.^ |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1378259940000
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Livcorish a dit : Oh okay, at least you have everything worked out! It always bugs me when there's some big unexplained thing in the story that never gets answered. |
Livcorish « Citoyen » 1378260060000
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Sourisplum a dit : That annoys me too xD |
Nekoava « Citoyen » 1378260480000
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;w; This is possibly the best story in Transformice so far. My new story coming soon isn't a bit great as yours. And I respect how you're new to the forums. I'll try to help you if you need it. I wish you the best with this story and hope you get 100+ posts. (Btw, I noticed in Chapter 5 there's a spelling error. You accidently spelled "wanys" instead of wants.) |
Plague « Citoyen » 1378296660000
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rude meece wow ;-; nice story *-* |
Livcorish « Citoyen » 1378303980000
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*Chapter 6* The next few weeks are a blur, I have practice from 9:00 AM to 3:00 PM every day and I'm loving it. I've become friends with all of my team mates. In total there are 5 of us, Lisa, Taylor, Kenzie, Natalie and I. Everyday after practice we grab smoothies from the kitchen. One day we're talking about the usual stuff, when it hits me. Tig NEVER explained how he became so famous. Out of the 5 of us Taylor has been here the longest. "Hey Taylor," I ask, "How'd Tig become so famous" She replied slowly, as if trying to recall the details. "Well I know by now that you know about Thomas. After Tom got mad at Tig and ran off, Tig went looking for a job to fund his tribe. He got a job working for a building company who design bootcamp arenas. Tig became fascinated with designing and one day had an idea. He called them "Vanilla Arenas." They were a set of arenas with simple yet well designed obstacles for a shaman to help mice achieve the cheese." Lisa, Kenzie, Nat and I sit there gaping at Taylor. Taylors not finished though, "Tig opened his own company called *Vanilla* and made a fortune from people buying his arenas" She says, "He had enough money to quit his job and open up this tribe." I understand now, I think to myself. Sorry this chapter wasn't very interesting. 7 will be better! |
Wingcestor « Citoyen » 1378308600000
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i have an idea! sydo and meli are in the story too!and how about someone hears the conversation in the first chapter and stuff....i has a bi- BOTS bots bots.........yeah....that too i has a gr8 imagination ^^ |
Sourisplum « Citoyen » 1378309740000
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Of course Tig would get totally famous from inventing vanilla rooms! Wingcestor a dit : Ummm Wingcestor, it isn't polite at all to tell what people should include in their stories (nor is it polite to force people to make up things for your story hinthint) ANd meli is probably going to be in the story anyway.... |
Lettucestar « Citoyen » 1378326240000
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^ ikr . |
Kattiej « Citoyen » 1378326600000
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Wingcestor a dit : i think u should just make ur own thread, i mean... |
Susanlwu « Citoyen » 1378330080000
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-slams paw on desk- MOAR |
Livcorish « Citoyen » 1378342380000
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*Chapter 7* I brush my hair in my room and check my phone. I have 3 new messages, all from Kenzie. The first one reads: Di, Coach Sydo wants us to be in the gym at 7:30 AM for some team thing. The second one read: Only 20 minutes hurry up! The last one was from only 5 minutes ago. WHERE ARE YOU YOU'RE 5 MINUTES LATE! I check my phone and let out a squeak. It's 7:35! I pull my hair into a messy ponytail and change into my uniform before dashing out the door. While running I text Kenzie back. "On my way, be there in 2 minutes." I'm about to press send when I run into a wall. "CHEESUS CHRIST" I yell. Luckily I'm alone or I'd seem like a total weirdo... which I guess I am. I barrel through the gym's doors, still grimacing from the pain. I see the 4 girls, Coach Sydo, and some man who I don't recognize. Before I can apologize, Sydo cuts me off. "Ahh Dinah, glad to see you've made it! Please, take a seat" I sit on the bleachers out of breath. The man who I don't know starts to speak. "Hello girls, nice to meet you all, My name is Andre Cheddar. I'm not one for chit-chat, so let me cut to my point, my lagball team is from The Spy Mice, which I know that Dinah here used to belong to." All 4 of them look at me, and all I can do is shrug I'm so stunned. "Miss Sydoline, why don't you tell the girls about your big news." Coach clears her throat before speaking. "Girls, you are incredible. I have faith in all the moves you make. Thats why we've entered The Vanilla Open. Kenzie instantly starts talking. "The Vanilla Open?! As in THE Vanilla Open?! Sydoline and Andre chuckle as the 4 of us sit in bewilderment. "Whats the Vanilla Open?" Taylor asks. "I mean I've been here for 5 years and I've NEVER heard of it." "Well you see, the Vanilla Open has never been televised, you had to buy tickets. So unless you were a player or friends with one, you probably haven't heard of it." Andre explains. Natalie is still amazed, "So you want US to participate in it? Oh and why is he here? Not to sound rude or anything." Coach tells us that two of Andre's star players had told him that one of their good friends joined this tribe and was an amazing lagball player. They wanted us to get in on the game. TOLD YOU CHAPTER SEVEN WOULD BE GOOD :D THOSE TWO PLAYERS ARE PRETTY OBVIOUS EH? :D |
Beautyiscool « Citoyen » 1378342620000
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yey~ moar pwease :3 |
Cuteprettypi « Citoyen » 1378343040000
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awesome! |
Nekoava « Citoyen » 1378356180000
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This is offically.. the best story ever in all of TFM. Am I right, am I right? |
Livcorish « Citoyen » 1378399980000
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*Chapter 8*After a grueling practice we head to the common room on our floor instead of getting smoothies. Kenzie and taylor are fighting over a spot on the couch and Nat lies on the rug. Meanwhile I'm pacing around the room. "Relax Di" Nat says, "You don't know for sure that it was Alexa and Cindy who told him about this team." "Yeah" Taylor agrees, "Just take deep breaths" There words fail to calm me down. "Those two are the only girls who ever noticed me, I was basically invisible to everyone else, so of course it was them." I rant. My phone buzzes and I look at it, it's from a blocked number. *Heard you entered the Vanilla Open sweetie, well good luck, you'll need it. ;) ~A+C |
Nekoava « Citoyen » 1378431480000
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Can I talk to you in-game ASAP? Thanks. |
Ramuffinrule « Citoyen » 1378434300000
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AWESOMNESSSS! Nice story ^.^ I like it so far. |
Whitebouboum « Citoyen » 1378499400000
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Awesome story! ^-^ |