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Ejaffa
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First chapter ^-^

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Chapter 1
Where do I start?

The first morning after the break in of the mysterious mouse, the scientists owning the facility came back for a seemingly normal day of work.
But something wasn't quite right, something felt missing.
One of the scientists noticed a body floating in the glowing pink paste. They immediately called the others over to drain the container.
Once the container was drained, the body of the white mouse was limp, but still breathing, sitting at the bottom of the container.
They fished the body of the white mouse out of the container, as the container was very difficult to reach into, considering the length of an average mouse arm.
The white mouse was placed into a recovery chamber, not only to recover, but to monitor any side effects from the paste she had fallen into the night before.
While this was happening, a cream coloured mouse was training her chicken in a nearby farm, when she heard a huge explosion from the facility.
Being the curious mouse she was, she picked up her chicken, placed it on her head and ran as fast as she could towards the facility to see if she could help.
When she arrived of the location of where the blast was heard, she was met with the sight of a gaping hole in the wall of the facility and a floating white mouse, glowing pink, and carelessly destroying things, however, the white mouse had a confused look on her face, and when she turned to face the cream coloured mouse, her eyes were glowing pink, but her face, confused as ever. The cream coloured mouse knew exactly what was going on and shouted "Calm down! I know exactly how you feel! I can tell you don't want to be here, but listen." Her voice toned down a little, "Try and imagine yourself on the ground".
The white mouse closed her eyes, and slowly floated towards the ground. She immediately fell to her knees, but looked up at the cream coloured mouse.
"....Thanks, you must have experience to calm ME down, my name's Foxie J"
"My name's Cream, and you're welcome, I suppose I do have some experience" Cream replied.
"I heard the explosion, but didn't expect to see a floating mouse"
"I-I don't know what's happening to me...." Foxie J sadly replied.
Cream assured her, "I have a friend who could help you control your power, obviously, it seems you've never experienced this kind of thing before"
Foxie looked at the damage she had caused, "Well, we need to hurry, before I have another nervous outbreak."

Enjoy ;)
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Awesome :O
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Ejaffa a dit :
First chapter ^-^
Enjoy ;)

So amazing.
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Shardpixel a dit :


So amazing.

I guarantee there will be some #shox in here
Ejaffa
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New banner:

http://i.imgur.com/AvX7TI5.png
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WOAH SICK
:O
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Still accepting characters?
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Still accepting characters?

Sorry, character slots are closed ;n;
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That first chapter was ace! I can't want for the next one.
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Next chapter :D
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Chapter 2
Sudden pain

Foxie J and Cream started to head to where Creams friend worked, they had an experience of calming mice down and stress problems.
As they wandered down the street, Foxie J seemed to find it hard to stay calm, she started to breath heavily in fright.
Cream spoke up, "You ok...?" Foxie replied, "I-I can see through the buildings" then Foxie looked at Cream and screamed.
"I CAN SEE THROUGH YOU! OH MY GOD, THAT'S AN IMAGE I WON'T GET OUT OF MY HEAD!"
Foxie shook it off and focused on keeping calm, she was able to control her over-sensitive sight quickly.
A brown and maroon mouse, with horns that glistened in the sunlight, was walking on the other side of the street with her arms full of groceries.
Suddenly, she stepped in a small puddle and her groceries went flying into the air and all over the floor.
Cream ran over to help, leaving Foxie on her own. Foxie could hear the commotion on the other side of the street extremely loudly.
The brown and maroon mouse complained, "Oh, I'm so clumsy! I'm so typical"
Cream picked up some of her groceries and said "Everyone trips up", then let out a small giggle.
The brown mouse found herself giggling too, and then responded, "I'm Luna"
Cream introduced herself and then looked at Foxie, to find Foxie on her knees in extreme pain.
Cream shouted in panic, "Oh my god! Foxie!!" before she and Luna could run over, wings burst from Foxie's back.
"WHOA", said Cream and Luna, at the same time.
Foxie let out a sigh of relief, she was no longer in pain, but had no idea she grew a pair of feathery wings.
Foxie turned to face the other way, but didn't realise she had smacked a mouse trying to walk around her.
The mouse was slammed into a wall, but didn't seem to be harmed.
"Oh no! I'm so sorry! These powers make me so oblivious to what's around me" Foxie apologized.
"That's OK, I've been in much worse, I say, what's your name, you look familiar"
"I'm Foxie J, and you are?"
"Foxie?? Foxie J? It's me! Skylar!"

I'll try and fit in all the characters in the least amount of chapters, maybe chapter 4 all of the characters will be included.
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Amg <3

Its so good :O
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This sounds really good!
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New chapter :D
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Chapter 3
Powers come with benefits

Foxie ran over to help Skylar and when Skylar was free, she hugged Foxie J.
Cream spoke up, "You know each other?"
Foxie replied, "Yeah, we went to school together, we were the best of friends... until we got separated"
Cream fell silent, knowing "separated" was not a good thing.
Luna decided to break the awkward silence, "Well, we should get going to get to your friend, Cream"
Cream agreed and they all set off in a group, heading towards Creams friends place of work.
When they arrived, Foxie found it hard to get through the door, as she had no idea how to close her newly sprouted wings.
When they finally pushed Foxie J into the building , they were greeted by the receptionist. Who gave them a smile and asked,
"May I hel- Oh! Cream! How delightful to see you! Cherry will be with you in a moment, or you can just simply invite yourself into her office"
Cream replied, "I'll invite myself in there, this ones urgent". Cream led Foxie J to the office while Luna and Skylar waited in the waiting room.
Cream knocked on the office door and a voice inside said, "Come on in!"
Cream opened the door and Cherry was sitting there, beside a stressful-looking black mouse with horns.
Cherry gasped at the sight of Foxie J, the black mouse could only stare.
"What on earth! Cream, who is this?!" Cherry said, backing off a little.
Cream said, "Oh, this is my friend, Foxie J, she's somehow gained powers, which are slightly out of her control, we were wondering if you could help"
The black mouse sat up from the sofa he was laying on, his face was blushed.
Foxie noticed him staring and spoke up, "Um, is there something on my face?"
The black mouse hazily replied, "...No, it's... I'm Shard" Foxie gave Shard a confused but unamused look.
Cherry was looking through her folders when Shard screamed, she looked and almost laughed out loud
Foxie's hand and eyes were glowing pink and her hand was pointed towards Shard, who was somehow floating in the air.
A pink aura was surrounding Shard, but then Foxie knew what she was doing and started shaking her hand violently in the air.
Because of this action, Shard was also violently shaking in the air, almost vomiting.
Cream and Cherry were practically rolling on the floor laughing.

Shard will be pleased
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Ejaffa a dit :
New chapter :D


Shard will be pleased

http://i.imgur.com/CPWyT78.png
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Shardpixel a dit :

-whisperes- chapter 9 is out on my fanfic.

Great chapters, Jaffa! I can't wait for more!
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http://i.imgur.com/ubjukfh.png
Chapter 4 is being written :)
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Ejaffa a dit :


http://i.imgur.com/ubjukfh.png

Heh, he he he.
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