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Xxkaylacatxx
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The story is good so far! Keep it up!
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xxkaylacatxx a dit :
The story is good so far! Keep it up!

i will! :D
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New characters need to speak on different lines (meaning, you gotta hit enter when someone different speaks). Having them speak on the same line is confusing for readers, such as myself.
Otherwise, this seems promising. Good luck.
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dittodoritos a dit :
Prooskiller a dit :
thanks ditto for the amazing fanart! http://i.imgur.com/oxVfm.png

;uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu; yw

e : look another fanart, character included : Kathy and Ayra

http://i.imgur.com/HHrkwHC.png

You're too amazing at drawing..

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Chapter 3: the new comers



mora tried to run away but lachlan catched up and tried to kill mora ''lachlan! what happened to you?!'' mora screamed at lachlan
''...'' lachlan did not answer and got ready to attack ''STAY AWAY!'' a stranger screamed ''huh?''
mora said while lachlan is being attacked ''are you ok?'' the stranger said ''im... ok'' mora said
''HELLO!'' kathy appearded out of no where with a creepy killer smile ''AHH! kathy don't scare me like that!'' mora said angrily and slapped kathy...yes take that ''ow!'' kathy cried ;u; ''im ayra what's your names?''
the stranger said to them ''im mora and this i-'' mora stopped ''AND IM KATHY!'' kathy jumped on mora's head ''grr'' mora growled ''and im wallace'' a stranger out of no where jumped out of a tree ''huh?''
kathy mora and ayra replied lachlan attacked one of them and almost killed them ''!!!'' mora screamed and tried to help ayra but ayra attacked lachlan back with force ''grr'' lachlan and ayra growled at each other and then lachlan turned back to normal ''what happened?'' lachlan said while being thrown at a tree by ayra ''OH MY GOD!'' wallace said while watching lachlan get hit by ayra from a tree ''anyways what are you doing here wallace?'' ayra got up and said to wallace and wallace just made a face ''OoO'' wallace gasped and woke up ''im here to get some food but i can travel with you guys...''
wallace gets nervous
mora jumps on a rock ''LETS GO!'' mora said bravely and ran into the sunset i don't know anymore X'DD ''ehh'' ayra said and ran after mora ''WAIT FOR US!'' kathy screamed/shouted at them running after them with wallace and lachlan while running they saw a HUGE MONSTER again...*coughs* ''oh no not this again!'' mora said hiding behind ayra wallace easily hacked into the electricity the monster had and it fell down to the snow ''tada!!'' wallace said while mora clapped with big eyes while on the other hand kathy dances on the huge monster ''stop that'' lachlan said angrily and kathy jumped off the huge monster
ayra and wallace were happy that the huge monster is dead? they then walked to the shop again to eat because they got hungry quick they saw a new shop with a creepy guy who works in the shop they were scared and will not know what happens next

End of chapter 3





im finally done with this one it took forever XDD btw thanks for another fanfic fanart!
plus i got bored on this one so i just messed with it XDD

waa thank you and your welcome ;U;
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OMG I FORGOT ABOUT THIS!!! XDDD
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This is quite nice!
I don't know why but is it ok that you put our very 'long' chapters in spoilers?
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Name: Jaylon
Gender: Male

Ref: (On tablet arggggg) He has the panda fur and has yellow and black eyes. His ears were mentally ripped so he has torn ears. He has a black- all black spiky collar, assassin hood (Red), Moon tail charm (Red and Black), and a knife. He has been killing off others since he was cursed by Esmereldz (Shaman Of Curses) to become a black and red cat sometimes.

Backstory (More ARRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGG)
Jaylon walked through The Cursed Woods and found Esmerelda. A moment later, he was bombarded in black flames. His body stretched into a cat as he swathed Esmerelda. Unfortunately, his cat was taken over by Esmerelda. He purred forcibly and stretched bask to a mouse. A cat eye that was chillingly black was etched in his arm. He never forgetted that curse.
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backupjulian a dit :
Name: Jaylon
Gender: Male

Ref: (On tablet arggggg) He has the panda fur and has yellow and black eyes. His ears were mentally ripped so he has torn ears. He has a black- all black spiky collar, assassin hood (Red), Moon tail charm (Red and Black), and a knife. He has been killing off others since he was cursed by Esmereldz (Shaman Of Curses) to become a black and red cat sometimes.

Backstory (More ARRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGG)
Jaylon walked through The Cursed Woods and found Esmerelda. A moment later, he was bombarded in black flames. His body stretched into a cat as he swathed Esmerelda. Unfortunately, his cat was taken over by Esmerelda. He purred forcibly and stretched bask to a mouse. A cat eye that was chillingly black was etched in his arm. He never forgetted that curse.

I'm in tablet too UGHHHH
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*on, I'm not taking part of this, im just reading for fun, nice characters btw
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backupjulian a dit :
Name: Jaylon
Gender: Male

Ref: (On tablet arggggg) He has the panda fur and has yellow and black eyes. His ears were mentally ripped so he has torn ears. He has a black- all black spiky collar, assassin hood (Red), Moon tail charm (Red and Black), and a knife. He has been killing off others since he was cursed by Esmereldz (Shaman Of Curses) to become a black and red cat sometimes.

Backstory (More ARRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGG)
Jaylon walked through The Cursed Woods and found Esmerelda. A moment later, he was bombarded in black flames. His body stretched into a cat as he swathed Esmerelda. Unfortunately, his cat was taken over by Esmerelda. He purred forcibly and stretched bask to a mouse. A cat eye that was chillingly black was etched in his arm. He never forgetted that curse.

accepted! :DD you can show ref and edit your message when you are not in your tablet ^^


and thank you elliimakk

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Name : Scater ("cat" and "skater")
Gender : Unknown.
Ref : http://imgur.com/EhOJS2g.png
(sorry for many items)
Personality : Smart,Calm,Brave,Helpful (red side : Lazy,Evil,Smart,Sarcastic)
Backstory : Scater borns in an abandoned house that has many ghosts.
Whenever he gets bored,s/he always skiing on the Snow Lands.
But,a proffesor called Ying caused the red side of his/her life.
S/he's is both good and evil because Ying poisoned him/her.
Quote : Everybody seems....lucky.

Red (Evil) Side
http://imgur.com/p1w4AXh.png

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Le copy of le Lachlan
I'm sorry and it seems like it
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Csonewforyou a dit :
Name : Scater ("cat" and "skater")
Gender : Unknown.
Ref : http://imgur.com/EhOJS2g.png

Personality : Smart,Calm,Brave,Helpful (red side : Lazy,Evil,Smart,Sarcastic)
Backstory : Scater borns in an abandoned house that has many ghosts.
Whenever he gets bored,s/he always skiing on the Snow Lands.
But,a proffesor called Ying caused the red side of his/her life.
S/he's is both good and evil because Ying poisoned him/her.

Red (Evil) Side
http://imgur.com/p1w4AXh.png

accepted
Csonewforyou
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Also,i forgot what caused him to be evil :
Caused by :
Shiny things,lava,dreams,sick people,and red things

How to turn him back to good side :
Blue things,sad things,and booty lasers.
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Csonewforyou a dit :
booty lasers

nice XDD
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Prooskiller a dit :
Csonewforyou a dit :
booty lasers

nice XDD

Yeah,quite funny.

Can't wait for a new chapter!
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a new chapter will be soon added don't worry! :D
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Chapter 4?: The dead meet



''so what are we going to do today mora?'' wallace asked
''hmm i think we are gonna go meet the dead!'' mora jumped in the air happily

''THE DEAD?!'' everyone shouted and shaked in fear

''yes come on! lets go!'' mora said a little bit angrily and they went to the dead meet's castle it looked scary it was full of spider webs.. and skeletons and even.. monsters

''i don't like this'' kathy said shaking

''who dares go here!'' ??? shoutted in the darkness

''me mora'' mora walked foward

for a min mora thought she/he would be dead for now but they were nice

''so you are a warrior?...'' ??? said looking at mora's arm it was written as ''warrior's heart warmer''
''yes kinda..'' mora said and walked more foward
''who are you?'' mora asked

''im scater'' scater said
''im jaylon'' jaylon said
''and who is the leader here?...'' ayra said
''scater is mostly the leader'' jaylon said punching scater a little
''im so happy we did not die here because dead meet start at 8 P-'' kathy looked at the clock
''kathy you dummy its already 8 PM'' lachlan said chilling


the end of chapter 4or will there be more?....

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Prooskiller a dit :
''and who is the leader here?...'' ayra said
''scater is mostly the leader'' jaylon said punching scater a little

Ehhh.
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XDDDD

sorry im kinda tired a bit to read the backstories and then edit my chapter
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