♠The None Luck Of Mora♠ |
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The story is good so far! Keep it up! |
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xxkaylacatxx a dit : i will! :D |
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New characters need to speak on different lines (meaning, you gotta hit enter when someone different speaks). Having them speak on the same line is confusing for readers, such as myself. Otherwise, this seems promising. Good luck. |
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bublamorce a dit : Prooskiller a dit : waa thank you and your welcome ;U; |
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OMG I FORGOT ABOUT THIS!!! XDDD |
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This is quite nice! I don't know why but is it ok that you put our very 'long' chapters in spoilers? |
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Name: Jaylon Gender: Male Ref: (On tablet arggggg) He has the panda fur and has yellow and black eyes. His ears were mentally ripped so he has torn ears. He has a black- all black spiky collar, assassin hood (Red), Moon tail charm (Red and Black), and a knife. He has been killing off others since he was cursed by Esmereldz (Shaman Of Curses) to become a black and red cat sometimes. Backstory (More ARRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGG) Jaylon walked through The Cursed Woods and found Esmerelda. A moment later, he was bombarded in black flames. His body stretched into a cat as he swathed Esmerelda. Unfortunately, his cat was taken over by Esmerelda. He purred forcibly and stretched bask to a mouse. A cat eye that was chillingly black was etched in his arm. He never forgetted that curse. |
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backupjulian a dit : I'm in tablet too UGHHHH |
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*on, I'm not taking part of this, im just reading for fun, nice characters btw |
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backupjulian a dit : accepted! :DD you can show ref and edit your message when you are not in your tablet ^^ and thank you elliimakk Dernière modification le 1449827820000 |
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Name : Scater ("cat" and "skater") Gender : Unknown. Ref : ![]() (sorry for many items) Personality : Smart,Calm,Brave,Helpful (red side : Lazy,Evil,Smart,Sarcastic) Backstory : Scater borns in an abandoned house that has many ghosts. Whenever he gets bored,s/he always skiing on the Snow Lands. But,a proffesor called Ying caused the red side of his/her life. S/he's is both good and evil because Ying poisoned him/her. Quote : Everybody seems....lucky. Red (Evil) Side ![]() Dernière modification le 1451182980000 |
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Le copy of le Lachlan I'm sorry and it seems like it |
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Csonewforyou a dit : accepted |
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Also,i forgot what caused him to be evil : Caused by : Shiny things,lava,dreams,sick people,and red things How to turn him back to good side : Blue things,sad things,and booty lasers. |
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Csonewforyou a dit : nice XDD |
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Prooskiller a dit : Yeah,quite funny. Can't wait for a new chapter! |
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a new chapter will be soon added don't worry! :D |
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Chapter 4?: The dead meet ''so what are we going to do today mora?'' wallace asked ''hmm i think we are gonna go meet the dead!'' mora jumped in the air happily ''THE DEAD?!'' everyone shouted and shaked in fear ''yes come on! lets go!'' mora said a little bit angrily and they went to the dead meet's castle it looked scary it was full of spider webs.. and skeletons and even.. monsters ''i don't like this'' kathy said shaking ''who dares go here!'' ??? shoutted in the darkness ''me mora'' mora walked foward for a min mora thought she/he would be dead for now but they were nice ''so you are a warrior?...'' ??? said looking at mora's arm it was written as ''warrior's heart warmer'' ''yes kinda..'' mora said and walked more foward ''who are you?'' mora asked ''im scater'' scater said ''im jaylon'' jaylon said ''and who is the leader here?...'' ayra said ''scater is mostly the leader'' jaylon said punching scater a little ''im so happy we did not die here because dead meet start at 8 P-'' kathy looked at the clock ''kathy you dummy its already 8 PM'' lachlan said chilling the end of chapter 4or will there be more?.... |
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Prooskiller a dit : Ehhh. |
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XDDDD sorry im kinda tired a bit to read the backstories and then edit my chapter |