Littlechedda a dit :

Its probably going to be ratapult if noone else votes
DD:
(might wanna fix the &'s in the title of the part up there)

Yeah probably ratapult :/
Oh and thanks o/

Micefamilies a dit :

Yeah probably ratapult :/
Oh and thanks o/

No prob

[url=]Chapter 9:Ratapult[/url]
Cookie's POV

"Ratapult!" The leader says excitedly "We are doing ratapult! Let's go practice now everyone."
"Yaaayy!" The mice all cheered

Ratapult ain't the best choice, but whatever. Atleast we aren't doing Battle. Now THAT'S one everyone would lose on. Even the Skittlez Troup. Speaking of them.... I wonder what they're is doing. Maybe we can spy on them to see how they practice. Chedda would be good. But she's kind of well a goodie-goodie.


Iwuv's POV

"Hey, Iwuv." Kirin says to me as I'm listening to music "I need to train you for the competition. We're going to do ratapult. It's really fun."
"Interesting. We're going to do it now?" I ask
"Yep, so get your bum up and let's go!"


Before I can even set my micepod down, Kirin is already headed off to Ratapult! I tell her to slow down for me to catch up, but I don't think she even heard me.
-
It's been 10 long minutes getting to ratapult. All sore and broken out after that. Kirin says that if I'm going to act like a weak nub, then I should leave the tribe. Better step up my game.


"Now Iwuv, next to you there is a bag of hard balls. You throw them at the other team so they fall off the platform!" Kirin says
"That uh, that sounds scary Kirin! I mean is there like a matress to land on?"
"No.... it's concrete floor. We aren't 3 year olds. And besides; Ths game is easy, so you won't die."
"Well that's a relief! So can you show me you and Imae doing it or...?"
"Not today. Imae's pretty busy. She's been having lots of stress lately. And I mean ALOT." Kirin says sadly "If you can help her calm a little bit, I'll let you play music on the radio, instead of using your mousepod."
"Deal." I say firmly


So Kirin showed me the important parts of the game. After that we did a small 1 on 1. Of course she won, and even bragged a little. But she supported me when we were doing it. Kirin may be sometimes not the nicest. But she will always be by my side.

Aw so Kirin isn't completely mean. Good chapter :D

*-*
cant wait for next chapter

i got some critique lately
ill try to use it
if not then oh well

[url=]Chapter 10[/url]
Iwuv's POV

After Kirin and I were done doing ratapult we walked back to the tribe house. It was almost dawn and we didn't have alot to say to each other. Just small smiles once in a while.
-
We get back to the tribe house and all the mice are either sleeping on the couch or talking in the dining room. I went upstairs to Imae's room, while Kirin stays downstairs doing who knows what.

"H-hi Kirin," I say swifting back and forth "Kirin told me you were quite stressed."
"Yeah I have been, but why do you care?" Imae asks
"I just wanna try to help you feel better. When I first came to this world, I felt confused, worried and stressed at the same time!" I say walking up a little closer "But since I've been here for a while, I've been more relaxed, then when i use to."
"Well that's nice. I don't think your stories will help though." She said somewhat annoyed

Before I said anything, Kirin came barging into the room with a horrifed look on her face! Imae and I turned around to see what was going on.

"IMAE! WE'RE UNDER ATTACK!" Kirin yells as she runs up to Imae and I
"WHAT? What do you mean??" Imae asks confused
"MEANING WE ARE UNDER ATTACK! A TRIBE IS RUINING OUR HOUSE! It's not even one of the contestant tribes from the competition!" Kirin grabbed Imae's arm and my arm, dragging us down stairs to see what was going on.

By the time we got downstairs, there was holes in the roof, parts of the house gone and the tribe-bombers. Everywhere, there was mice running out of the tribe house and mice destorying the home.

"HEY, EVERYONE! GET OUT OF THE TRIBEHOUSE EXCEPT THE OTHER TRIBE." A strong mouse says in a microphone. He looked like he was from our tribe. Not exactly everyone did what he wanted everyone to do. So he yelled to the point where you called hear it from 334485 miles away.


Imae took the microphone out of his hands, stood on a table and started raging out at the other tribe, but that's when I saw Flutty and Beauty.

Nooo
cliffhanger
D:
Idemandmorenojkbutreallysuspense

Micefamilies a dit :

i got some critique lately
ill try to use it
if not then oh well

[url=]Chapter 10[/url]
Iwuv's POV

After Kirin and I were done doing ratapult we walked back to the tribe house. It was almost dawn and we didn't have alot to say to each other. Just small smiles once in a while.
-
We get back to the tribe house and all the mice are either sleeping on the couch or talking in the dining room. I went upstairs to Imae's room, while Kirin stays downstairs doing who knows what.

"H-hi Kirin," I say swifting back and forth "Kirin told me you were quite stressed."
"Yeah I have been, but why do you care?" Imae asks
"I just wanna try to help you feel better. When I first came to this world, I felt confused, worried and stressed at the same time!" I say walking up a little closer "But since I've been here for a while, I've been more relaxed, then when i use to."
"Well that's nice. I don't think your stories will help though." She said somewhat annoyed

Before I said anything, Kirin came barging into the room with a horrifed look on her face! Imae and I turned around to see what was going on.

"IMAE! WE'RE UNDER ATTACK!" Kirin yells as she runs up to Imae and I
"WHAT? What do you mean??" Imae asks confused
"MEANING WE ARE UNDER ATTACK! A TRIBE IS RUINING OUR HOUSE! It's not even one of the contestant tribes from the competition!" Kirin grabbed Imae's arm and my arm, dragging us down stairs to see what was going on.

By the time we got downstairs, there was holes in the roof, parts of the house gone and the tribe-bombers. Everywhere, there was mice running out of the tribe house and mice destorying the home.

"HEY, EVERYONE! GET OUT OF THE TRIBEHOUSE EXCEPT THE OTHER TRIBE." A strong mouse says in a microphone. He looked like he was from our tribe. Not exactly everyone did what he wanted everyone to do. So he yelled to the point where you called hear it from 334485 miles away.


Imae took the microphone out of his hands, stood on a table and started raging out at the other tribe, but that's when I saw Flutty and Beauty.

CLIFFHANGERS HUHGRNGRNHRH

O-O omg cliffhanger ffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff. Write more I demand it! I mean if you could please... *cue puppy eyes*

Oi what happened?! Oh please don't let Flutty and Beauty be behind the attackkkkkk

More now.

DARN CLIFFHANGERSSSS

nise storie

Wow, this story is very nice! 10 out of 10 Breadsticks!

Xxfreespirit a dit :

Wow, this story is very nice! 10 out of 10 Breadsticks!

Thank you *-*
Whoa whoa, breadsticks? Gimmie!

[url=]Chapter 11[/url]
Iwuv's POV


"B-BEAUTY AND FLUTTY!" I yell getting up on a table, their eyes quickly focus on me, along with everyone else.
"Iwuv! Stop it, I'm trying to speak here!" Imae whisper-yells to me

Ignoring her I walk up to Beauty and Flutty as they are sweating rapidly.


"Uh, h-hi Iwuv." Flutty says shaking
"Why are YOU guys here?" I ask almost about to tear up "I thought you were my friends. I can't believe you would do this to Imae's tribe."
"Iwuv, You don't understand!" Beauty says fierce
"What do you mean I don't understand?! Ugh, never mind. Just stay away from me," I say as I walk away.


As I was walking to a vanilla room, faintly I could hear Beauty say:

"She just doesn't under stand, Flutty. Fashion Kidz is the ones who forced our tribe to do it, " Then I couldn't hear her
anymore.

-

"Build noob shaman, build!" A random mouse yells at me in Vanilla 3
"I-I don't know what to build though!" I say as I start running away from the crowd
"BUILD SOMETHING HELPFUL!" The mouse says again

After that being said I frantically start tying 8 balloons around mice's bodies to make them go to the cheese. Most of them were happy. Some were not.... Atleast I got 10 saves, woo! As the next map starts to happen I started getting questions in my head. Should I go back to Beauty and Flutty and ask them what was really going on? What Fashion Kidz had to do with this?

WHAM! Walked into a mouse by accident.
Oops.

"Ouch! Watch where you're going..." A strange looking mouse said. He looked like a rebel kind of mouse.
"I'm so sorry! Are you ok?" I ask starting to brush the dust off of his shoulders
"Yeah I'm fine. But thanks for asking," He says with a werid look on his face "H-hey, you look familiar. Aren't you uh from Skittlez Troup or somethin?" He asks
"Yeah why....? Wait.. how did you know?!?" I say fast
"Because, I'm in the tribe Fashion Kidz. Skittlez Troup and Fashion Kidz are enemies." He says firmly
"Oh, uh that's nice to know.." I say trying to sounds interested. "So what's your name?"
"I'm Cookie. And you are?"
"Iwuv." I say putting my paw out for him to shake
"I don't shake hands with enemies." Cookie says as his paws are still by his side.


"COOKIE! Come here, we need you!" A mouse yelled. She looked very excited as if she wanted to show him something.
"COOKIES? I'm coming Chedda!!" Cookie said running off.

End of Chapter 11.

More please. I need to know what happens next.

Beautyiscool a dit :

More please. I need to know what happens next.

You must be on the wrong thread, This chapter was very horrible and does not make you want to read more

Cookie reminds me of Scooby-Doo in a way. :3
Cookie: COOKIES?
Scooby: SCOOBY SNACKS?
huehue see what I mean? no? ok c:

^^ omg I totally see it LOl

anyways

daaang that chapter was awesome ;u;

Sorry but instead of pagegets I'm one for 100th post so imma just steal this real quick.
HAPPY 100TH POST!

And noob steals pageget. Oh well :D ----->