Kattiej a dit :

it's missing a nose ^^
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and thanks waffle

Oh, np. x3

Graciekinz a dit :

please

The mouse is kind of fat o-o..
I don't think the mouse's back should be that high.

better??? sortaaaaa???

Kattiej a dit :

better??? sortaaaaa???

Yeah, I think it could do with some shading too.

yea...I'm so lazy but ok. later..maybe

*gasp* here goes nothing,my recent one,
tell me what to improve,please
p.s. sorry for big file,im used to drawing like that :/

I think the only part I see that is wrong is the fluff of fur under the collar/necklace. It's not suppose to stick out like that.

Luckyisdesi a dit :

*gasp* here goes nothing,my recent one,
tell me what to improve,please
p.s. sorry for big file,im used to drawing like that :/

The fluff of fur or whatever that is kinda looks like a teeny tiny paw, maybe make it littler and less puffy.

Peashaman a dit :

The fluff of fur or whatever that is kinda looks like a teeny tiny paw, maybe make it littler and less puffy.

well no, I think it should go down, not out

Um...I know this is supposed to be for TFM drawings but I need a little feedback on the eyes of a mouse...

I rarely hear critques for me...
I mean the most recent is about my effect abuse, so you can ignore that ...
But i just want some critque for this artwork:

Fierying a dit :

I rarely hear critques for me...
I mean the most recent is about my effect abuse, so you can ignore that ...
But i just want some critque for this artwork:

its great but it doesnt look clear.

Alikha a dit :

its great but it doesnt look clear.

Lol...

The glitch effect looks damn real and that look... its creepy to some of us but still, good work as usual XD

Unless your criticism is constructive kindly stop. This is "Art Critique Center," not "Art OMG WHAT A GOOD JOB YOUVE DONE Center."

The glitch effect is nice, I see what you're trying; but it looks on this end like the file corrupted loll
Yes, you do abuse effects. @-@ In some pictures it's necessary but in others it isn't.
What's the little swirl near the eye supposed to be? It looks like an eyelash.
Also the ear has a weird appearance to me? I can't exactly point out what I'm referring to right now, I'll get it later.

Galbelmz a dit :

Um...I know this is supposed to be for TFM drawings but I need a little feedback on the eyes of a mouse...

It'd help if we saw the full picture because it looks rather sinister. Was it intentional?

Galbelmz a dit :

Um...I know this is supposed to be for TFM drawings but I need a little feedback on the eyes of a mouse...

Is it an amputee or something? It has no arms. Due to this it looks reaaaally weird. @-@

Wafflecookie a dit :

Hopefully you dont mind my critque OAO"
Firstly, the eye is drawn too low o3o" i understand you are doing chibi, thats why the head is big, but making the eye too low makes the mouse looks like having a large brain (dont hate me o^o)
Secondly, i understnad you have your own way of drawing ears, i mean i do how my ways. But the .. furry part of the ear is too much, how does it listen? :I
Numbu tree: I can tell you how bad my anatomy is, but from my opinion, this anatomy brings suffering to your mouse... NOT SAYING it it bad, i ADORE this artwork, but just critcizing o^o"
All animals has muscles and.. meat, pfff those long talking stuff about science, but lets not talk about it.
I have to comment about the limps on your mouse, it anatomy of it shows it cannot run ><" it needs more muscl- meat there .. you know where i am going o^o" Also i cannot identify where is its tummy.. so yea oAo"
thats all, DONT HATE ME , ILY <3 k ;3;

Graciekinz a dit :

alot to crit about this one, but i would try to help!
I can see you are using a mouse to draw, thats why the lineart is shaky ^_^ i cant crit on that!
but even so, i can saw that the hair , scarf and tail are not... heh..
Number one: Do a sketch this!
like you, i used to not draw my sketches, i always say: they are a WASTE of time, blah blah,
but sketches HELPS A LOT!, do a basic sketch!


then slowly trace the lines on a new layer (dont forget to lower the op of the sketch
2. From my example, the mouse tail is thin (but dont make a string tail like i do)
3. mouses have nose, i also dont draw noses for my mouse, but is cruel right ? they cant smell... and stuff.. a handicap mouse isnt nice :c.
4. do know that hair is not a cardboard and paste onto your for head hm? ^_^"
Sure their are cartoonist that like 2D stuff, and draw hair flat, i dont mind chibi drawers or 2d artist
but the hair is overlaping the ear.. making it looks like it has been pasted on


... dont hate me, the artwork is really good, i can see you have some anatomy thinking!
good luck &gt;&lt;"

Fierying a dit :

Hopefully you dont mind my critque OAO"
Firstly, the eye is drawn too low o3o" i understand you are doing chibi, thats why the head is big, but making the eye too low makes the mouse looks like having a large brain (dont hate me o^o)
Secondly, i understnad you have your own way of drawing ears, i mean i do how my ways. But the .. furry part of the ear is too much, how does it listen? :I
Numbu tree: I can tell you how bad my anatomy is, but from my opinion, this anatomy brings suffering to your mouse... NOT SAYING it it bad, i ADORE this artwork, but just critcizing o^o"
All animals has muscles and.. meat, pfff those long talking stuff about science, but lets not talk about it.
I have to comment about the limps on your mouse, it anatomy of it shows it cannot run &gt;&lt;" it needs more muscl- meat there .. you know where i am going o^o" Also i cannot identify where is its tummy.. so yea oAo"
thats all, DONT HATE ME , ILY &lt;3 k ;3;

I wouldn't hate you at all xD! I was pretty lazy with this drawing, but yes I do understand your criticism. I'm not very great when it comes to the anatomy of a mouse (mostly on the legs). Usually I end up noticing the head or the position of the eyes and I'll then move the eyes up or make the head smaller. Thankyou very much :3! I didn't get too much criticism sadly and I was thinking about it right before I checked this thread xD!

Fierying a dit :

alot to crit about this one, but i would try to help!
I can see you are using a mouse to draw, thats why the lineart is shaky ^_^ i cant crit on that!
but even so, i can saw that the hair , scarf and tail are not... heh..
Number one: Do a sketch this!
like you, i used to not draw my sketches, i always say: they are a WASTE of time, blah blah,
but sketches HELPS A LOT!, do a basic sketch!

then slowly trace the lines on a new layer (dont forget to lower the op of the sketch
2. From my example, the mouse tail is thin (but dont make a string tail like i do)
3. mouses have nose, i also dont draw noses for my mouse, but is cruel right ? they cant smell... and stuff.. a handicap mouse isnt nice :c.
4. do know that hair is not a cardboard and paste onto your for head hm? ^_^"
Sure their are cartoonist that like 2D stuff, and draw hair flat, i dont mind chibi drawers or 2d artist
but the hair is overlaping the ear.. making it looks like it has been pasted on

... dont hate me, the artwork is really good, i can see you have some anatomy thinking!
good luck &amp;gt;&amp;lt;"

omg thank you fierying! :D Yea i draw like that i just can't really find the sketch tool i just have shaky lineart i know ;-;

thanks for helping i really needed it ^-^

Fierying a dit :

I rarely hear critques for me...
I mean the most recent is about my effect abuse, so you can ignore that ...
But i just want some critque for this artwork:

looks good but on the sham marking dont have the circles to end theV now t just looks like a computer

Some anatomy criticism maybe??

Marylovesshe a dit :

Anatomy hm? ..
tbh bfore i continue, i do not follow mouse anatomy, i made my own anatomy for my mice
Also i am not a good artist. I AM SERIOUS. this are my point of view :I.. so lets start!
Crit 1: Her Left ear is too forward:
Mouse ears actually not suppose to bend forward (even though i do that some times O_O")
Mice ears tend to go back.

2: Where is she looking?
Sounds like a weird crit hm? but i have this in mind.
When you eat, most of the time you would look at your food (i mean unless you are read or talking while eating, or the fact that someone splat a cake of your face o_o" no hate here pl0x)
but from this picture, after awhile you would see she isnt looking at her food. I CAN tell you are trying to, but is not enough.
I can suggest you to make her pupil lower. OR
2a: Cheese Position.
OK, you ask : What does cheese position and looking at your food has any similarity here?
Well, just try this. take an object and put it below you, try to look at it without looking down.. hard right?
thats kinda happening in the picture! In fact the cheese is not only below, is like suppose to be at her right but the cheese magically got into her mouth. It looks fine at first because the body is overlapping it, making it look more to the center of her mouth (MY OPINION dont kill me T_T)
Thats why you could not see the cheese o3o next~

3:Foot position.
I know.. one of the ways human can sit, like a diamonded shaped leg angle
But we mice arent humans (i mean we are but we arent!)
The foot is bothering me because it can face the cheese. but mice cant do that.. really ^_^""
For my anatomy, mice cannot cross legged (.. you dont really have to follow this one)

4: the head is.. too wide? (is it wide or length OAO")
The eye angle makes it looks like the head is kinda big ^^" heh.. which i also want to bring up
4a) Nose is too inwards.
looking at real mouse anatomy, their nose is pointy, not flat, (hope you get me for this one ^_^) also the nose looks slightly to her right

Lastly 5:


I have to be honest, idk why is there an extra curve on the mouth :I NOT SAYING it is wrong to put it but.. (for me), i dont get it :c sorry dont kill me T_T
Conclusion - i think you need to know where your mouse is facing, like putting a direction arrow on where you face faces.
I reformated the picture abit so you can understand me ok? All honesty, i love the artwork ! the shading and idea are neat and simple