Supastarx a dit :

Anyone care to help me with a Non-TFM story? It's not finished btw the way
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wowthisthreadisreallylowplz

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I moodily said

Zetsuen a dit :

there's a few errors, but nothing too serious, although you might want to proof-read your writing a bit.

i'll note down the mistakes in order

# "luck; used" - incorrect use of semi-colon
# "too lucky, to normal, to mainstream" - *too normal, too mainstream
# "It's just the three of us now" - it sort of works as present tense, but everything you've written so far is in the past tense, so it doesn't really make sense
# ""How many more hours,"" - needs a question mark, not a comma
# "And also the occasional "I'm hungry!" plea," - this sentence doesn't make sense. do you mean "along with the occassional..."?
# "“c’mon sissy lets go to the wave pool!”" - *"C'mon, sissy! Let's go to the wave pool!"

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one of the things that you might want to change are phrases like this:


it works, but in my opinion, it flows much better if you phrase it like "I said moodily"

there's a few times that you do that, so you might wanna look over it again

Haruhitastic a dit :

bumping this up with an interesting challenge for everyone:
HOW ABOUT WE WRITE SOME FANFICS IN WHICH YOU CREATE ALL THE CHARACTERS ON YOUR OWN
seriously

Haruhitastic a dit :

bumping this up with an interesting challenge for everyone:
HOW ABOUT WE WRITE SOME FANFICS IN WHICH YOU CREATE ALL THE CHARACTERS ON YOUR OWN
seriously

Lagiacruss a dit :

Oh nooo but that's too hard don't you know, it's much much easier to succumb to requests since that's all people ever go for :~(

Kattiej a dit :

Sad to say but most publicity for fanfics come from people wanting to be in the story :I
Pretty sad isn't it

Kattiej a dit :

Sad to say but most publicity for fanfics come from people wanting to be in the story :I
Pretty sad isn't it

Haruhitastic a dit :

bumping this up with an interesting challenge for everyone:
HOW ABOUT WE WRITE SOME FANFICS IN WHICH YOU CREATE ALL THE CHARACTERS ON YOUR OWN
seriously

Beautyiscool a dit :

Sometimes it can be fun and some people have, Flutterbest for example. Kiyokichan made one didn't she?

Haruhitastic a dit :

I don't think it's much to ask for some sort of plot outside of the typical:

- CATS ARE ATTACKING WE GOTTA FIGHT
- OUR WORLD IS CRUMBLING WE GOTTA FIGHT
- I LOST MY PARENTS AND CATS ARE ATTACKING AND OUR WORLD IS CRUMBLING WE GOTTA FIGHT
- ...school

I realise my story may have kinda fallen on the second one, BUT it was a bit different from everyone else.

Lagiacruss a dit :

I'm just going to put this out there.

Fanfictions are meant to be well written and your own work. They're meant to be read and enjoyed by the readers.

Now, 99% of the fanfictions here are half-assed, a lot of times the user who made it only did to jump aboard the bandwagon, and 99% of the people who reply to the threads are either only interested in making their characters and don't actually care about the story, or just spamming the thread and/or posting just because the "writer" is their friend.

Zakryah a dit :

I guess I'm on the other side of the argument.